Hi,
First thing is I don't actually understand thy essay. Too redundant as fr as I see it! What are trying to say in the ist para?
I think u should have given more examples to state thy point. Of course,the medical front scandal is given but a few more would better justify thy position. Don't get offended by my way of lambaste as u always call it!
Hey, I also think that on the fair side, thy vocab is good!