Vijay..
[First time evaluating someone's essay]. I have the following views after reading your essay:
1. Structure is good.. I know where it came from
2. Essay seems to be more on one side .. I suppose 60% on oneside and 70% on ther side is better.. Finally sticking up with 70% approach.
3. Topic is very broader and it has got lot many angels to cover. But anyways, thats not really measured here.
4. Some words are most repetitive, such as technology, For example.
For example an e-card can be send through internet at anytime and it reaches its destination immediately unlike paper cards when you have to got market and search for the card of your choice and it will still take weeks to reach its destination.
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For instance, Unlike conventional greeting card, An E-card on internet just takes few fractions of seconds to reach recipient's mailbox.
What has this achived?.. 1. Combining sentences is improved. 2. clear ,concise and sweet
3. I have used for instance, in place of for example just for difference. What do you think ?