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I think your essay is fine, for me I can't mark it not that professional yet but it seems like a 6 or higher to me. The thing disturb me about your essay is that the conclusion, you could say something like that because of the reasons above it is clear that the disadvantages of tourism is more than its benefits. There is no example or any knowledge about tourisms benefits maybe you should keep your conclusion and add a paragraph for its benefits.
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