Can somebody help me to Fix/Improve/Revise this Request Letter?

[Tuny0921]

[urgent /// ASAP]

 

Hi everybody,

I am helping my friend to write a request letter to the US Embassy for an expedited interview appointment. I need it ASAP.

Generally, it has been done but please help me to Fix/Improve/Revise it. Please feel free to leave any comments/opinions. Please don’t care about the details (Date, Name, etc.), I just care about the words, sentences to read/sound in better English style.

Would really appreciate your help.

 

 

 

“ To Whom It May Concern:

I, Mrs. A, am requesting your approval for an expedited interview appointment because:

I have a son, named Mr. B, a current international student at CDEF College in New York City, United States of America, with passport # ABCD1234. He is going to have a Commencement Ceremony on Thursday, June 6, 2013 and he has sent me an invitation letter from his college to attend this special occasion.

As what I have known, if my visa was approved, my visa would be delivered normally within three business days. My current booked appointment date is on Wednesday, May 29, 2013, with Confirmation ID: ***** and Barcode # *****. Therefore, if my visa was approved after the interview on May 29, 2013, I might would get the visa soonest on June 3 or 4, 2013. However, I have intended to arrive in New York on June 4, 2013 to make sure I can attend my son’s commencement ceremony on time and there will be no rush for unexpected problems.

I actually could not apply for the visa earlier because I had to wait for the paperwork which was sent from the United States by my son.

I please request you to understand my situation and approve to give me an expedited interview appointment. I will truly appreciate your approval.

Thank you for your time and have a great day!”