Is the inviroment being polluted???

[Hinda]

Hi Everyone

Would you please read this and let me know what you think.

This topic of discussion is about the invoment and wheather
it is truly being destroyed.

I think it is wrong to destroy mother earth. Humans are being
selfish, only thinking about themselves and always wanting to
benefit from everything. Money making is important for some
people, espacially in bussness.

For example, many campanies have dumped toxic waste in the water
and this leads to pollution. My solution to this is to make campanies pay when they behave in such away.

One thing is for sure, when we disrespect mother nature we are
accualy harming ourselves.

Instead of always trying to benefit from everything, we could instead think about our grandchildren. What kind of world are we creating for them. Why should they be the one to fix the problems that we have created.
We really should be thinking about future generations.

This might be my own opinion, but if we continue like this we will eliminate ourselves. The judgement is here.

Again, the government should take care of this. This is serious and should be taken seriously.

Finally, in the 70,s people thought better of the nature. They were thinking about future generations.
Nowadays it is all about moneymaking. Perhaps we should learn from them and change our attitudes today.

[AmigoRo]

Hej Hinda,

My comments are in red.

Originally posted by Hinda

Hi Everyone

Would you please read this and let me know what you think.

This topic of discussion is about the invomentdo you mean environment? and wheatherwhether
it is truly being destroyed.

I think it is wrong to destroy mother earth. Humans are being
selfish, only thinking about themselves and always wanting to
benefit from everything. Money making is important for some
people, espacially in bussnessbusiness.

For example, many campanies have dumped toxic waste in the water
and this leads to pollution. My solution to this is to make campanies pay when they behave in such away.

One thing is for sure, when we disrespect mother nature we are
accualyactually harming ourselves.

Instead of always trying to benefit from everything, we could instead think about our grandchildren. What kind of world are we creating for them. Why should they be the one to fix the problems that we have created.
We really should be thinking about future generations.

This might be my own opinion, but if we continue like this we will eliminate ourselves. The judgement is hereHmmm, what do you mean by that?.

Again, the government should take care of this. This is serious and should be taken seriouslyTake care of what?.

Finally, in the 70,s people thought better of the nature. They were thinking about future generations.
Nowadays it is all about moneymaking. Perhaps we should learn from them and change our attitudes today.

Your essay lacks depth. You have talked about many issues superficially. The writing more like a rant than an essay. Whenever you make an assertion, the onus is on you to justify it.

Furthermore, your essay is a bit off-topic. You have talked about how to save the environment. I don't think that's what's being asked of you. Your topic is not clear, so I can't comment any further on this.

Your spelling is a bit dodgy at times. Please pay more attention to this.

HTH
AmigoRo