please help me review my first attempt at AoI

[totoro]

"A business should not be responsible for providing customers with complete information about its products or
services; customers should have the responsibility of gathering information about the products or services
they may want to buy."
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion state above, support your views with
reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.
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The issue of a business' responsibilty to provide customers with complete information about its products or
services is a controversial one. On the other hand, the customer can not be entirely exempt from the
responsibility to gather information about the products or services they're paying for. However, in the final
analysis, I believe that the responsibility lies in a business to provide the customers with complete
information about its products or services since the information itself should be treated as part of the
product or service they're selling.
One reason why a business should be responsible for the information pertaining to products or services it's
selling is related to consumer awareness. Even though average consumer can be assumed to have intelligence to
acquire the information related to products or services one's interested in, there is a significant proportion
of population who are not able to do the same. For example, teenagers and elders looking to purchase products
or services might be at a disadvantage since studies show that teenagers are more impulsive in purchase habits
whereas average consumers are more cautious before buying any products or services. Elders, on the other hand,
might fall victims to potential dangers any products or services without significant information. It is well
known elders are often the victim of various scams that leave them devastated which could be easily prevented
with basic information educating them the nature of the products or services so they can make a informed
decision. As you can see, the information provided by the company can not only help in making the decision but
also help the customer to be better educated as well.
Another reason for my belief is that a business might be better off providing the information. Let's assume
that it falls under consumer's plate to acquire information related to the product. In order for the consumer
to acquire the same level of information which used to be provided by companies, consumers will need an access
to the sensitive information that company might not want to make public. Furthermore, laws requiring those
company-sensitive information public might make u.s. companies unable to compete in global market, since other
companies will have same information to make same or better product. Also since the company already have the
information related to products or services they're providing readily at hand, it is unreasonable for
consumers to waste time trying to acquire the readily available information. In the end, I believe it is
better left for the company to provide information related to products it is selling.
Perhaps the best reason is that the information related to the products services should be treated as part of
the product or service itself. It is silly to differentiate the product from the information, since service is
equally treated as product in our market. If this is the case, why should information related to appropriately
using the product treated separate from physical product? If service is treated as product, customer service
including informing the consumer about the products should be part of the product as well.
For all these reasons, I therefore believe that it is the responsibility of the business to provide the
information related to products or services it's selling. This will benefit both consumer and business in the
end, enabling the customer easy access to product and the company protecting its profit-sensitive
informations.

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Thanks for reviewing!

[Infinite7]

This is a well-thought essay, Imo. The organization is very good, great length, a few grammatical mistakes, nice examples. I'd rate it.... 5.5. Did this take you exaclty 30 mins or less?

[totoro]

Yes, once I had the template familiarized and spent 5 min or so organizing my thought, it takes roughtly 25-30min to write the essay. The challenge for me is to have 5 min at the end so i have enough time to edit my essay. This has been hit or miss depending on the time i spend brainstorming in the beginning.

Thanks for your feedback!

[Infinite7]

Your Welcome !