Please evaluate my first AoI post. - greatness vs. personal faults

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When someone achieves greatness in any field—such as the arts, science, politics, or business—that person’s achievements are more important than any of his or her personal faults.

Greatness in any field is hard to achieve. When someone does achieve it, he will be known and remembered for it. Conversely every human being has his share of personal faults. If there was one who didn't, that would be God. Therefore, I agree, to a large extent with the given opinion, and favor the appreciation of people for their greatness.

Einstein is known for his intellectual greatness. Mozart, for his musical greatness. Tiger Woods, for his greatness in golf. But how many of us really know the personal faults of any of these people? Surely, only a very few friends and family members of these great persons, would be privy to that kind of knowledge. Yet, millions of people know and admire these individuals for their greatness in their respective fields. Therefore, the importance of their greatness has made them popular and much loved.

Another view point is that a champion of a field will always be looked up to, irrespective of his personal traits. A good example can be found at my work place. One of the senior consultants who work for my company is known for his quick temper. Yet, this person is consulted for most of the important decisions that are taken by the company and is known as a domain knowledge expert. Here too, we see that people are willing to overlook personal faults in order to reap the benefits out of the greatness one has achieved in a certain area. Therefore, its is evident that generally, people's personal faults are overshadowed by greatness in a certain field.

Some would argue that personal faults might get in the way of greatness and thus be a cause to undermine the value of one's greatness. However, we know that all human beings are imperfect. Everyone has their share of weaknesses. Why then should a quality that is common to all human beings be given importance or priority over one that is only unique to certain individuals? Once again, it is logical to give importance to someone's achievements in a field than to his faults or weaknesses that are common among many.

When we weigh the pros and cons, we see that although certain personal faults might hinder the achievments of great people to a certain extent, more often than not, these faults take a back seat in the presence of something far greater, which is rare among people. Therefore, a person's achievements in one or more fields will always be more important than his personal faults.

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I'm hoping to take the GMAT next monday. So if you could rate this post promptly I'd be ever so grateful. Please be honest, and criticize the essay since I have a solid 5 days to improve on my essay writing skills.

Thanks