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Infinite7 · 2009 September 21st, 08:34 PM

“The people we remember the best are the ones who broke the rules.”
Discuss the extent to which…..

The debate that people who break the law are remembered the most presents a very interesting and controversial issue. Some may argue that people who live by the law are respected and remembered most and others might disagree. However, I would agree with the latter. With a detailed explanation I shall make a strong and clear point.

Firstly, a law may not always be moral and for that reason citizens would either abide by the law that does right by them, but not one that works against these citizen’s rights and unified beliefs. Those who stand up for their rights as well other’s, are the ones who will not be forgotten.

Secondly, if the law is immoral the person who stands up to the person who made it would be appreciated and respected because they would have to suffer the consequences that most people wouldn’t have the courage to do. For example, in the southern states of the US segregation (separation) of Black people and White people was the law that the society had to respect. But had it not been for Rosa Parks, who wouldn’t give up her seat in the bus, and many others with their deeds, the US citizens of the southern states would not have been able to live and work together in peace, with love and respect for one another.

Admittedly, some may ask, ‘What about the people who break the laws of God? How can they be remembered?’ Of course, petty thieves, liars and killers are not remembered. But criminals whose names are not forgotten is because their deeds are ones that should not be committed again. Those who break laws for a good cause do so for the sake of justice and a better future rather than selfishness.

To conclude, I believe that a law is one that is made for the betterment of society, depending on why it is made. And not only are people remembered, because they broke immoral laws that would create separation and hatred, but their names will stand the tests of time.

I finished this essay in 32 mins

, please rate my essay and give me advice on what I can improve on. Thank you!

Infinite7 · 2009 September 26th, 09:43 PM

Anybody..... any kind of input! Grammar, structure, length, etc...

nitsiso · 2009 October 9th, 11:52 PM

Hi,
I just read your essay. It looks good and follows the structure that everyone recommends. Your second point was definatly well defined with the example but I was not sure about the first point. Also the ending was pretty strong too. so overall in my opinion its worthy of about 5.5
Thanks

Infinite7 · 2009 October 10th, 07:27 PM

Hi Nitsiso, Thanks for rating my essay!

Sry about the first point I was trying say that a law should be fair and I was trying to put down my points as fast as possible.

gmat^3 · 2009 October 12th, 07:09 AM

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Originally Posted by Infinite7

“The people we remember the best are the ones who broke the rules.”
Discuss the extent to which…..

The debate that people who break the law are remembered the most presents a very interesting and controversial issue. Some may argue that people who live by the law are respected and remembered most and others might disagree. However, I would agree with the latter. With a detailed explanation I shall make a strong and clear point.

Infinite7,
I don't think that it is same as saying "The people we remember the best are the ones who broke the rules" and saying " people who live by the law are respected and remembered most." So, in my opinion, we should take our position, saying directly that "I agree/disagree with the statement that the people we remember the best are the ones who broke the rules."

Infinite7 · 2009 October 12th, 05:04 PM

Thank you for that input Gmat^3. I meant to use different words to express (sort of) the same idea.

2009 September 21st, 08:34 PM	#1 (permalink)
Infinite7 I can DO this! Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 330	PLEASE READ!!! “The people we remember the best are the ones who broke the rules.” Discuss the extent to which….. The debate that people who break the law are remembered the most presents a very interesting and controversial issue. Some may argue that people who live by the law are respected and remembered most and others might disagree. However, I would agree with the latter. With a detailed explanation I shall make a strong and clear point. Firstly, a law may not always be moral and for that reason citizens would either abide by the law that does right by them, but not one that works against these citizen’s rights and unified beliefs. Those who stand up for their rights as well other’s, are the ones who will not be forgotten. Secondly, if the law is immoral the person who stands up to the person who made it would be appreciated and respected because they would have to suffer the consequences that most people wouldn’t have the courage to do. For example, in the southern states of the US segregation (separation) of Black people and White people was the law that the society had to respect. But had it not been for Rosa Parks, who wouldn’t give up her seat in the bus, and many others with their deeds, the US citizens of the southern states would not have been able to live and work together in peace, with love and respect for one another. Admittedly, some may ask, ‘What about the people who break the laws of God? How can they be remembered?’ Of course, petty thieves, liars and killers are not remembered. But criminals whose names are not forgotten is because their deeds are ones that should not be committed again. Those who break laws for a good cause do so for the sake of justice and a better future rather than selfishness. To conclude, I believe that a law is one that is made for the betterment of society, depending on why it is made. And not only are people remembered, because they broke immoral laws that would create separation and hatred, but their names will stand the tests of time. I finished this essay in 32 mins, please rate my essay and give me advice on what I can improve on. Thank you!

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2009 September 26th, 09:43 PM	#2 (permalink)
Infinite7 I can DO this! Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 330	Anybody..... any kind of input! Grammar, structure, length, etc...

2009 October 9th, 11:52 PM	#3 (permalink)
nitsiso I JUST got here. Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 13	Hi, I just read your essay. It looks good and follows the structure that everyone recommends. Your second point was definatly well defined with the example but I was not sure about the first point. Also the ending was pretty strong too. so overall in my opinion its worthy of about 5.5 Thanks

2009 October 10th, 07:27 PM	#4 (permalink)
Infinite7 I can DO this! Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 330	Hi Nitsiso, Thanks for rating my essay! Sry about the first point I was trying say that a law should be fair and I was trying to put down my points as fast as possible.

2009 October 12th, 05:04 PM	#6 (permalink)
Infinite7 I can DO this! Join Date: Jul 2009 Posts: 330	Thank you for that input Gmat^3. I meant to use different words to express (sort of) the same idea.

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