Please review my essay - "“Corporations should look to the city of Helios.."

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The following appeared as part of an article in a magazine devoted to regional life:
“Corporations should look to the city of Helios when seeking new business opportunities or a new location. Even in the recent recession, Helios’s unemployment rate was lower than the regional average. It is the industrial center of the region, and historically it has provided more than its share of the region’s manufacturing jobs. In addition, Helios is attempting to expand its economic base by attracting companies that focus on research and development of innovative technologies.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.

Argument given asserts that City of Helios offers new business opportunities and an ideal location for setting up new business. Reasons stated for this assertion are low unemployement rate in city of Helios, high share of region’s manfucturing jobs and city’s efforts to attract companies that focus on research and development. However, argument is not convincing and fails to connect these reasons with its main point.

First, corportations looking for new business opportunities or new location will look for good infrastructure, low cost of resources like man power, electricity etc and hassle free and low tax system etc. Argument fails to give any of these valid reasons instead it tries to establish relation between unemployment rate of City of Helios to the growth opportunites existing in City of Helios. Probably, existing manufacturing companies in the City of Helios might be exporting all of their products to foreign countries, where there is little or no effect of recession is there. So, unemployment rate in City of Helios will be lower.

Further, statement tries to establish a relation between manufacturing jobs created by City of Helios to the prosperity of the companies existing in the City of Helios. It could be possible that there are certain clauses where by companies establishing their business in City of Helios cannot fire the employees from their jobs when they are needed.

On the other hand, statement also states City of Helios is trying to attract research and development companies. But it fails to provide how these companies will complement the existing manufacturing companies or the prospective coroporations which will establish their business in City of Helios.
Argument would have been more compelling, if the argument stated facts or reasons like, avaialbale work forece in City of Helios and their qualifications, comparison of tax structure of City of Helios to others, avaialbale ancillary units or the type of companies existing in and around city of Helios and status of infrastructure available etc. These reasons could have been more compelling reasons to a prospective corporation to look to establish its business in City of Helios.

To conclude, though argument is trying to convince the corporations looking to establish their new busieness or manufacturing business with information related to employment level of City of Helios, it would be difficult for any decision maker in the business to correlate employment rate of region to organization’s profitability, if organization establishes it in that region.