kindly post your comments pls.

[pettygal]

This is my 1st attempt at an argument.[/font]
Please giv me some valuable opinions 2 help me improve.[/font]
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In a study of reading habits of Leeville citizens conducted by the University of Leeville, most respondents said they preferred literary classics as reading material. However, a follow-up study conducted by the same researchers found that the type of book most frequently checked out of each of the public libraries in Leeville was the mystery novel. Therefore, it can be concluded that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading habits.[/font]

At the first glance, the conclusion sounds reasonable as the respondents in the first study may not represent the majority of Leeville citizens. However, the writer should reveal more data before making the conclusion. The age group and occupation of the respondents recruited in the first study are never mentioned. These two factors can largely affect the outcome of the study as those that preferred literary classics to mystery novel may be of certain professions such as lecturers, writers, students, etc. On the other hand, citizens that patronize the public libraries come from all walks of life including children. Hence, the age group of the citizens that frequent the public libraries most should be well-studied.
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The findings from the second study are not enough to substantiate the conclusion. There is no details on the types of books and the ratio of novels to other genre of books in the public libraries. The amount of novels in relation to other types of books may determine the number of mystery novels being borrowed from the libraries. It may be that there is not much choice of other genre of books compared to the mystery novels. Hence, the situation in the second study may not truly depict the popularity of novels.[/font]

Furthermore, the contents of literary classics which use classical language are more intricate and the connotation require more time to be grasped while mystery novels use vernacular language which are easier to be comprehended. This imply that the mystery novels are more regularly checked out as the readers can finish reading the books faster. This again doubts the conclusion on the true reading habits of the citizens of Leesville just by looking at the tendency in the books being borrowed.[/font]


In conclusion, the writer should provide more information on the charcteristics of the respondents and the public that frequent the libraries in order to make a comparison between the first and second study. Besides that, the choice of reading materials available in the libraries should be unveiled before asserting that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented the reading habits of citizens of Leesville. [/font]

[samarfadl]

Hi pettygal

you made good points in this argument..

there is a few of grammatical and spelling mistakes.

The age group and occupation of the respondents recruited in the first study are never mentioned.

i don't agree that this point can attack the fallacy in the argument because the fact that there are different age group and occupation doesn't change the fact that Leeville citizens misrepresented their reading habits.

sorry if i couldn't make my opinion clearer.

in general your argument is good

if you have time you may take a look at Louislin essay at this link regarding the same argument. she and I made some other points that can be attacked.

http://www.urch.com/forums/gre-analy...ks-lot-ll.html

hope that helps
see u soon pettygal