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Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument wants to establish the point that the Palean Baskets were not only made by Palean but also made by other prehistoric group of people. For that it says, in Lithos a Plean basket has been found, which has the distinctive features of Palean basket. The river Brim is flowing through the prehistoric cities Palea and Lithos. This river is deep and broad. So maybe there were cases of floods. The basket found in the Lithos may be gone there by flood.
Only one basket cannot establish the point that the peoples of Lithos were also making such woven baskets. It may happen that Lithos built boats and there was a trade relation in between those villages. So as any Palean Boat is not found it cannot be concluded that there was not any form of transportation, where it is not stated whether any boat from Lithos also not found.
It is not stated in the argument whether these basket is not found any far places. It may happen that these baskets were built by other people from far away land and those people had trade relation with the Palean people and with Lithos. So without more information about that time and the civilizations those were established that time it canít be stated that the basket was unique or not.
As it is the case of prehistoric time it is very much possible that evidence have been tampered by many factors such as flood and natural calamities. So there are many factors which may cause the abundance of the basket in the surroundings of village Palea and thus it canít be concluded that the baskets were built by the Palean people alone so is the case for the basket found in Lithos and canít be concluded that the basket was built by people of Lithos. The argument is not providing sufficient information to judge the scenario and to get a solid conclusion from that. The author is assuming that the baskets were unique in the first case but it is also not sure, on the other part by some loose information he is trying to say that those baskets are not uniquely Palean.
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