Please review my argument essay. Its my first essay.

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The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting."

 

 

 

The following arrgument is flawed for various reasones. Primarily the argument is based on unwarranted assumption that town on Brookville and Deerhaven are same in terms of Georaphy, society etc, rendering its main assumpation that propety rates in Deerhaven will be increased if it follows the footsteps of Brookville.

This arugment fails to give any justification that poeple who want to buy propety in Deerhaven will think same as Brookville. There can be a case that buyers in Deerhaven are more concered about the interiors of the house rather than its exteriors. They may pay and exhorbiant price for the interior but will be reluctant to pay the same for the exteriors on which Deerhaven's communities has high hopes. If this arugment has shed light on the views of buyers about the exteriors and till the extent they will like it, then this conclusion would been strengthen .

Paragraph never talks about the economic trend in the Deerhaven. If their in and recession going on in this area/country, then poeple will hardly initate property deals as naturally they will think to save money instead of buying property which just has an decorated inetriors. Their can be a case that when Brookvilles plan was successfull, there could be an bloom in financial sectors which motivated people to invest money in property even thought the cost was high.

The belife that just making exterior superior and not focusing on other points such as basic amenites, poplution etc in the area in not correct. Even though homeowners of Deerhaven beautify thier exterior, they may not bother to clean maintain their sourroudings. The road network connecting Deerhaven and other major cites/town can be poor or never exist. There may not be good hospitals, public parks, amusment parks, lakes rivers etc which justifies such a high property cost. No the other hand Brookvile may had all this facilites along with polished exteriors and landscapes. If this argument had written about the presence of basic amenties, then stament that, like Brookville, buyers will pay for Deerhaven too was justified.

Finally, the point is that, things never be the same after 7 years or after such an long time period. As mentioned above the mind set of people may change and this surely weakness the arugment along with other stated reasons.