Please rate my issue essay!!

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This is the following topic for my first attempt for writing the issue task.

"Governments should provide funding for artist so that the arts can flourish and be available to all people ."

The development of an individual needs a complete assessment by the educational institution like universities and colleges of the country .The young students should get a wide range of career choice for their life .

It is their choice that makes a difference for the development of the country .Although, in this modern era we are expecting young students to specialize in different types of science fields.But this will lead to

loss in remaining yet equably important fields like arts and related fields.

Well,let's see if we force our students to take science subject will lead to complete paralysis of the nation .As it will cause loss of history and culture of a community .The culture of a community are mainly

revealed with the help of arts ,which are shown by different artists .The young generation of the society needs to know about their culture ,so that they can have a proper perspective towards their future.

The university should have courses which make sure that students are getting a proper knowledge about the different arts .

And on the second point,arts give us a special way to teach people about the different cultures that are present around the world .Their are several old civilization that are known only because of their arts and

practicing artists .They help to spread their culture to different people around the world by displaying various forms of arts .The government of a country should make amendments to provide proper funding to the

universities to promote arts in society .

The funding or development of a particular field will not make sure a proper development of the country .The government should analyse the situation to get real view of the situation.It must take factors like availability of funds

choice of subjects in a particular fields by students can effect the need of funding by different departments of the fields .The government should see that the science and technology is not held back just due to over funding to promote

art and related fields .Because the science field will make sure a safe future for a country .The funding should be given in a very precise and control manner which will allow us to prosper every field which will help us in any way .

Their are many different of fields available in the university and they are equally important for us .So the government should make sure that their is equal distribution of funds among them ,because if any of them is help back due to

lack of funding it will cause in a poor future .

 

And please suggest ways to improve grammatical mistakes .It would be a great help,seriously!