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written in 35 minutes. attempted to edit but realized i went over the time limit. please let me know what scored you would give the essay and any areas of improvement. thanks!!

 

Topic: A nation should require all of the students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college

 

Directions: write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

 

 

 

In today’s society entrance into college requires standardized testing. However, without the implementation of a standardized national curriculum, how could the use of standardized tests be trusted? Students and teachers alike would benefit from a national curriculum because students would be learning the same if not similar material, while teachers would have better understanding as to what to teach their students. The lack of a national curriculum has resulted in vast educational discrepancies between socioeconomic classes, lack of equality on entrance exams because such standardized exams are written by a specific class of individuals who have received a specific type of education, and differences in an educational foundation, which can later hinder a student’s education career.

 

 

If all students learned the same material there could be fewer differences between the children of socioeconomic groups; eventually this could lead to eliminating the vast differences between socioeconomic classes. For example, inner city schools in areas, such as Detroit and Brooklyn, do not have access to the same educational material as those located in suburbs because the standards are not the same. The high school graduation rate for inner city schools compared to schools located in the suburbs surrounding these cities is much lower because teachers are overburdened, under-funded, and unable to maintain a standard in education. A national standard on curriculum could lead to better distribution of funding, specifically for inner city schools that have repeatedly been underfunded. If there was a national standard on curriculum then each school, theoretically, would have the same, if not similar, lesson plans, resources, and appropriate funding. The use of a national curriculum could also eliminate the need for standardized state exams, which generally allot less money to schools that score poorly. This would further eradicate the immense differences in education among varying socioeconomic groups.

 

 

Equality in standardized curriculum would lead to more equality in standardized testing. Exams such as the SATs and GMATs are intended for broad use; however, they are limited to a specific type of educational system. Standardized tests are written by a specific class of individuals; therefore, they are geared towards those who have the opportunity to learn in the same setting. For example, students attending a public school in the suburbs of Miami would receive a better education than students attending a public school in the more destitute areas of Miami because there are more resources available. However, students from the suburbs of Miami would have an inferior education compared to those of elite public and private schools located in northern America; therefore, the standardized test scores of those students in the north would be better than those in the south all because there is a lack on standardization in the curriculum of education. If a national curriculum was put in place then the standardized tests would have to be molded to fit one specific curriculum that would more fairly test the entire student body.

 

 

Curriculum taught in private schools is held at a higher standard than that of charter or magnet public schools, which in turn is held to higher standards then the remaining public schools. There is an astronomical difference between the various types of schools and the curriculum taught at each school. Through these differences students are placed on an ever growing difference in the type of education they receive. For example, Spruce Creek High School has four different programs high schools may attend outside of regular courses: Honor’s Program, International Baccalaureate (IB), Advance Placement (AP), and the Academy of Business and Finance. In comparison, Seabreeze High School, which is located in the same county as Spruce Creek High, only offered a few Advanced Placement courses. The stark differences in the educational curriculum lead individuals in the same county to attain different educational achievements. Though the options for high school programs such as AP and IB are extremely beneficial, the foundation, specifically kindergarten thru eighth grade, should be the same for each student. Without this foundation there would be little to build upon in the more crucial high school and college years. A national curriculum would allow all students the opportunity to a solid educational foundation to build upon.

 

 

In conclusion, a national curriculum could help alleviate the vast socioeconomic differences, allow for a fair standardized testing system, and allow all students the opportunity for a respectable educational foundation that they each deserve. With the implementation of a national curriculum there could be a decrease in the vast socioeconomic difficulties seen in today’s society. It could allow inner city students to receive similar if not the same education as a student in the suburbs. Moreover, standardized testing would be modeled after the national curriculum rather than a select few from a specific educational background model. Lastly, the use of a national curriculum could lead to better public school funding, allowing for more equality amongst public and private schools. The importance of a national curriculum is imperative in assisting future generations with the benefits of an equal opportunity to learn.

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  • 2 months later...

Hey!

 

I hope this isn't too late.

 

Your essay is really well structured, easy to read, and states the thesis very clearly.

 

Make sure to add transitional sentences when you start a new paragraph in order to link them better.

 

Also, to strengthen your essay, you should probably add a paragraph (or even a sentence) looking at the other side of the argument (the negative side to a standardized curriculum). And maybe address the fact that not all students want to go the university or higher level education that requires standardized tests.

 

But I think it was a really great essay! Don't know how it would score... perhaps a 5?

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