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This isn't my best, but I was just wondering how it would do.

 

Topic: In order for any work of art—for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

 

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For a work of art to have merit, it does not necessarily have to be understandable, however it must be intriguing or thought provoking. Simply because a piece of work is understandable does not mean it is art. Indeed, many blockbuster movies are extremely easy to comprehend, however they are not considered art. Furthermore, many complex or abstract paintings and poems are not easily understandable by the broad public, however they evoke intense emotions, they intrigue and inspire the mind. However, if a piece of work is not comprehensible and also does not evoke a reaction, it is not worthy of art. It is the ability to stimulate the senses and provoke thought that makes art worthy, not whether it is understandable.

The average popular blockbuster movies is extremely easy to understand. It can have a basic plot, following the normal paradigm of the genre. It does not require the audience to stress their cognitive abilities to comprehend the premise of the movie. However, few would consider these movies art. Indeed, understandability is not a requisite for fine art. Artistic films are not always as easy to understand as popular films. They may not contain a simple plot -many do not have a plot at all. Nonetheless, these films -while not always understandable- can stimulate the senses, provoke emotions, and intrigue the audience. For instance, McGill University had a film competition. The movie that won did not have a plot: it was a confusing jumble of scenes in Montreal traffic. However, the film provoked a feeling of unease and anxiety as it showed the busy traffic of the streets. Indeed, it is not necessary for works of art to be understandable for it to contain merit- however it must be thought or emotion provoking.

Similarly, many abstract paintings are not easy for the average person to understand. Modern and abstract art is not a simple scenery painting at can be understood by everyone- it often contains erratic features, harsh lines, and incomprehensible aspects. For instance, Jackson Pollock's paintings are likely hard for the everyday person without a fine arts degree to understand. Indeed, the average person may not be able to analyze the arbitrarily splashes of paints or the erratic applications of lines or color in his paintings. However, simply because many do not understand his paintings does not mean Pollock's work do not deserve merit. Thousands of people from all over the word still flock to the Guggenheim in New York to catch a glimpse of Pollock's work. Indeed, his paintings -with their startling colors and blunt shapes- while quite understandable, still evoke a visceral response from the audience, either of excitement, confusion, or enchantment. Indeed, the incomprehensibility of Pollock's paintings does not render his paintings worthless- they are still a valued part of the art world.

However just because a piece is not understandable does not automatically mean it is worthy of merit. A poem that is merely a jumble of arbitrarily picked words does not make it a valued piece of art. If the audience reads it and is not moved in a certain way, then it is not worthy of merit and should not be considered art. Indeed, artwork must elicit emotion or stimulate thought for it to be worthwhile. While popular blockbuster movies are understandable, they are not thought provoking such as Pollock's paintings, which are not easily understood but stimulates emotions.

 

 

thanks!!!

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This isn't my best, but I was just wondering how it would do.

 

Topic: In order for any work of art—for example, a film, a novel, a poem, or a song—to have merit, it must be understandable to most people.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

 

Response:

For a work of art to have merit, it does not necessarily have to be understandable, however it must be intriguing or thought provoking. Simply because a piece of work is understandable does not mean it is art. Indeed, many blockbuster movies are extremely easy to comprehend, however they are not considered art. Furthermore, many complex or abstract paintings and poems are not easily understandable by the broad public, however they evoke intense emotions, they intrigue and inspire the mind. However, if a piece of work is not comprehensible and also does not evoke a reaction, it is not worthy of art. It is the ability to stimulate the senses and provoke thought that makes art worthy, not whether it is understandable.

The average popular blockbuster movies is extremely easy to understand. It can have a basic plot, following the normal paradigm of the genre. It does not require the audience to stress their cognitive abilities to comprehend the premise of the movie. However, few would consider these movies art. Indeed, understandability is not a requisite for fine art. Artistic films are not always as easy to understand as popular films. They may not contain a simple plot -many do not have a plot at all. Nonetheless, these films -while not always understandable- can stimulate the senses, provoke emotions, and intrigue the audience. For instance, McGill University had a film competition. The movie that won did not have a plot: it was a confusing jumble of scenes in Montreal traffic. However, the film provoked a feeling of unease and anxiety as it showed the busy traffic of the streets. Indeed, it is not necessary for works of art to be understandable for it to contain merit- however it must be thought or emotion provoking.

Similarly, many abstract paintings are not easy for the average person to understand. Modern and abstract art is not a simple scenery painting at can be understood by everyone- it often contains erratic features, harsh lines, and incomprehensible aspects. For instance, Jackson Pollock's paintings are likely hard for the everyday person without a fine arts degree to understand. Indeed, the average person may not be able to analyze the arbitrarily splashes of paints or the erratic applications of lines or color in his paintings. However, simply because many do not understand his paintings does not mean Pollock's work do not deserve merit. Thousands of people from all over the word still flock to the Guggenheim in New York to catch a glimpse of Pollock's work. Indeed, his paintings -with their startling colors and blunt shapes- while quite understandable, still evoke a visceral response from the audience, either of excitement, confusion, or enchantment. Indeed, the incomprehensibility of Pollock's paintings does not render his paintings worthless- they are still a valued part of the art world.

 

However just because a piece is not understandable does not automatically mean it is worthy of merit. A poem that is merely a jumble of arbitrarily picked words does not make it a valued piece of art. If the audience reads it and is not moved in a certain way, then it is not worthy of merit and should not be considered art. Indeed, artwork must elicit emotion or stimulate thought for it to be worthwhile. While popular blockbuster movies are understandable, they are not thought provoking such as Pollock's paintings, which are not easily understood but stimulates emotions.

 

 

thanks!!!

 

Your essay is highly comprehensible.

Sentence structure is varied.

Overall very good.

I found this sentence " it is not necessary for works of art to be understandable for it to contain merit- however it must be thought or emotion provoking" repeated too often in almost the same tone and structure.

Look here:

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For a work of art to have merit, it does not necessarily have to be understandable, however it must be intriguing or thought provoking. Simply because a piece of work is understandable does not mean it is art. Indeed, many blockbuster movies are extremely easy to comprehend,...

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The bold and the italic sentences are your two separate claims. You followed the latter with little elaboration but failed to follow the first. It could have gone like:

 

For a work of art to have merit, it does not necessarily have to be understandable, however it must be intriguing or thought provoking. Many great paintings and movies are very obscure to most people but yet are considered a great piece of art, by virtue of their thought provoking nature. On the flip side, Simply because a piece of work is understandable does not mean it is art. Indeed, many blockbuster movies are extremely easy to comprehend,...

 

And I think you failed to point out the case in which: A piece is art and is understandable by most people. These cases are exactly what the writer had in mind when making the claim that good art is understandable by all. You need to show these cases, then debunk them, or agree with them.

 

And you lack a more general concluding sentence.

While popular blockbuster movies are understandable, they are not thought provoking such as Pollock's paintings, which are not easily understood but stimulates emotions.

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This conclusion makes it appear that your whole essay was concerned with discussing blockbuster movies and Pollock's painting.

 

Like:

While understandability gives some credit to the arts, It is actually the art's ability to stimulate emotions that play the major role in deciding whether an art deserves merit or not.

 

Maybe you deserve 4.5

 

Would you please rate my essay too. (It is in this same form in another thread. Look for the thread started by "thecritic". :)

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