Adil Lashkari Posted July 29, 2014 Share Posted July 29, 2014 "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer." A course curriculum should be designed in such a way that it helps shape the future of the child. If there is discrepancy between the courses studied between different students some students will lead in a particular field while some will lag. Therefore, the school curriculum should be designed in a way that all the students in the country study the same subjects till they enter college so as they are on the same level of education received. If all the students study the same national curriculum there will be no variations among the courses the students has studied before they enter college. For a student who is going to enter the college for a Electrical engineering course would have studied the same course as any other student from any different place thus there will be no discrepancy among the concepts. Also the level of studies can be maintained by the education board throughout the country. A student who has studied both economics as well as science will have the option of choosing the course in the college based on his/her interst. Morever, the government can identify the best students among the country if they have studied the same subjects. As the government spends millions of dollars in publishing different books in different states throughout the country, if there is a same syllabus throughout the country the cost of the books can also be decreased. In a country like India, the government publishes the books for all 28 different states. If same course is studied lots of money can be saved in publishing the same book. But, there is also a flip side to this propsistion that all students study the same curriculum. In a country like India where there is a different language for different state the students of that paraticular state won't be studying the regional courses which are associated with that state. Though there will be cons for the issue that all students study the same curriculum, but the pros outweigh them. Therefore a nationalized curcriculum sould be put into effect. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
maharsh011 Posted July 29, 2014 Share Posted July 29, 2014 Hi, Regarding your essay. I can say that if you know the exact meaning of curriculum (not what you assume ) by going through wikipedia. You will have more an argument. The fact is you have not understood the meaning of the word curriculum. It is very essential to know the exact meaning of the words that are used in the issues in GRE because that is what makes the argument weak. Go search in wikipedia and rewrite your essay it will be much better. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adil Lashkari Posted July 30, 2014 Author Share Posted July 30, 2014 Thanks maharsh! for going through the essay and giving me valuable suggestions. It was actually my first essay and I wanted to know where I stand and how can I improve on it. Thanks!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AbhinavTripathi Posted August 1, 2014 Share Posted August 1, 2014 Dear Adil, I, myself a complete novice would like to appreciate that you have achieved the verticals which an issue task demands. 1. Expressing your view 2. Backing it with examples 3.Mentioning the situations where it might fail 4. Concluding The organisation is impressive. But you have not elaborated much, and your examples are not enough. You should think of more instances where your argument bolsters your position, it could have been extra-curricular activities should be made compulsory or something different. You need to show variety for your response. Your conclusion is very small, although it fits the concise nature of the rest of your essay, but still the conclusion has to be the most interesting. It should bind your reader, by the time the reader reaches your conclusion he has your examples and assertions jumbled in his mind. Always frame a conclusion that structures those jumbled examples and assertions. The GRE readers do not give a lot of time to a single piece of writing, so your conclusion has to be the pith of your argument. Thanks Abhinav 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adil Lashkari Posted August 2, 2014 Author Share Posted August 2, 2014 Thanks Abhinav for the constructive criticism!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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