"Young people frequently fall into the trap of assuming that the

[samarfadl]

"Young people frequently fall into the trap of assuming that the difficulties they face today are greater and more troublesome than those faced by previous generations. As they gain experience and maturity, however, they eventually aware of the falsity if this assumption."

In modern society, young people always try to compare the life that they are living with the life of their ancestor and precedent generations. They always feel that they are living much harder life and that they are facing many problems compared to their ancestors. I agree with the idea that we are today suffering from more problems and that these problems need lots of experience and patience to be solved.

First of all, the problems that facing the today's societies ranges from political to economical to social problems. We are encountered by different problems such as wars and conflicts between nations such as the case in the Middle East where there is an ancient conflict between the Arabs and Israel. There are also problems of economic recession, lack of natural resources in some countries and the equable increasing of the oil prices. The social problems also burden the government and its people such illiteracy, unemployment, high rates of divorce and lots of other problems.

Some might argue that the preceding generations have also encountered similar problems and that we are not facing harder problems than those faced by our ancestors. Moreover, they assert that the fact that we are enjoying high technological advancement must enable us of solving our increasing problems.

Admittedly, the high technological progress and the prosperity of societies are unable to solve all the problems of our societies. In fact, the new technology has brought some disadvantages along with the many advantages that it has brought.
This can be discussed by the following example. In agriculture field, the problem of low productive yield the problem of destruction of crops because of pests and insects has been solved by genetic engineering. Yet, this technology has its drawbacks because it has been proved that the use of this technology might cause serious health problems in the long run.

Furthermore, many countries in the contemporary society are facing the problem of overpopulation. This is a grave dilemma that the government might be unable to solve if it didn't try to control the growth of the population from the beginning.
Countries such as China, India and Egypt might be unable to provide its people with the factors of prosper life. Young people in such countries are unable to find proper jobs due to unemployment. The overpopulation force the youth to accept any kind of work even if it is incompatible with their education. They are also forced to migrate to foreign countries in order to find prosper life. Other problems that might face those individuals in such countries are lack of proper education, child labor and higher crime rates.

In order to resolve such problems, we need more than experience and maturity.
To be experienced and mature may help solving some personal problems, but the more complicated problems such as diseases, overpopulation and wars, need great effort that must be done by the governments of different countries.

To sum up, the problems of the contemporary society is much more complicated than our ancestors' problems. Despite the technology that provides our society with convenience, we are faced with many difficulties and troublesome problems.
In order to be able to solve such problems, we need more than experience and maturity. We need the government to work hard for the prosperity of its people.

this is my first essay
plz, if you have read my essay, just tell me if i'm off point
thanx in advance
it took me one hour to write this essay

[maple_leaf]

Hey,
I think it is a good essay considering the fact this is your very first essay. A couple of things I would like to talk about:

• I found some fragmented sentences in your essay. You need work on your sentence structure.
• Some grammatical errors.
• I think it will be better for you to combine second and third paragraph.
• You might want to mention about the deadly diseases e.g. AIDs, Cancer,etc.
• You need to compare the problems of modern times with the problems of the ancient ( or near past). You talked about the problems we are facing in today's world. However, you did not really explain why the extent of the problems in the past are lesser compared to the problems in the modern times.

Hope it helps :>

[ruchia]

Originally Posted by samarfadl

"Young people frequently fall into the trap of assuming that the difficulties they face today are greater and more troublesome than those faced by previous generations. As they gain experience and maturity, however, they eventually aware of the falsity if this assumption."

In modern society, young people always try to compare the life that they are living with the life of their ancestor and precedent generations. They always feel that they are living much harder life and that they are facing many problems compared to their ancestors. I agree with the idea that we are today suffering from more problems and that these problems need lots of experience and patience to be solved.

First of all, the problems that facing the today's societies ranges from political to economical to social problems. We are encountered by different problems such as wars and conflicts between nations such as the case in the Middle East where there is an ancient conflict between the Arabs and Israel. There are also problems of economic recession, lack of natural resources in some countries and the equable increasing of the oil prices. The social problems also burden the government and its people such illiteracy, unemployment, high rates of divorce and lots of other problems.

Some might argue that the preceding generations have also encountered similar problems and that we are not facing harder problems than those faced by our ancestors. Moreover, they assert that the fact that we are enjoying high technological advancement must enable us of solving our increasing problems.

Admittedly, the high technological progress and the prosperity of societies are unable to solve all the problems of our societies. In fact, the new technology has brought some disadvantages along with the many advantages that it has brought.
This can be discussed by the following example. "In agriculture field, the problem of low productive yield the problem of destruction of crops because of pests and insects has been solved by genetic engineering." [very complicated, how about-> "Genetic Engineering has solved the problem of low productive yield and destruction of of crops in agriculture."] Yet, this technology has its drawbacks because it has been proved that the use of this technology might cause serious health problems in the long run.

Furthermore, many countries in the contemporary society are facing the problem of overpopulation. This is a grave dilemma that the government might be unable to solve since it hasn't being controlled [if it didn't try to control the growth of the population] from the beginning.

Countries such as China, India and Egypt might be unable to provide its people with the factors of prosper life. Young people in such countries are unable to find proper jobs due to unemployment. The overpopulation forces the youth to accept any kind of work even if it is incompatible with their education. They are also forced to migrate to foreign countries in order to find prosper life. Other problems that might face those individuals in such countries are lack of proper education, child labor and higher crime rates.

In order to resolve such problems, we need more than just experience and maturity.
To be experienced and mature may help solving some personal problems, but the more complicated problems such as diseases, overpopulation and wars, need great efforts that must be done together by the governments of different countries.

To sum up, the problems of the contemporary society is much more complicated than our ancestors' problems. Despite the technology that provides our society with convenience, we are faced with many difficulties and troublesome problems.
In order to be able to solve such problems, we need more than experience and maturity. We need the government to work hard for the prosperity of its people.

I think stating that efforts are required on the part of government does not put forth your idea. The flow here was that Younger generation or contemporaries are facing more problems as compared to our ancestors. I like your examples on the problems. But then only government does not have the solution to these problems. it suggests as if the main problem is that government is not working properly. in my opinion, you should talk about the society. That the contemporary people need to build such a society. etc. etc. Also when you give examples of the problem faced by people today, see if you can compare them with those faced by people earlier.

this is my first essay
plz, if you have read my essay, just tell me if i'm off point
thanx in advance
it took me one hour to write this essay

I hope you don't mind my comments. I hope it helps you!

[samarfadl]

hi maple-leaf!
hi ruchia!

thank you so much for your comments
they have been very helpful

thanks to you, when i re-read my essay i was able to notice the mistakes that i've made.

thanks again