Issue 50, PLZ rate and comment it. Many thanks in advance.

[LouisLin]

50"In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."

The issue is that all faculty should be required spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they tech so as to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level. The issue seems to be sound at first glance; however, looking this issue deeply and carefully, we can know this issue in not entirely cogent. In the following paragraph, I will try to illustrate my point view about this issue.

Admittedly, there is no denying that pragmatic sciences emerge and more colleges and universities establish these practical departments than before. Owing to this phenomenon, the professors, teachers and faculty who belong to these pragmatic science departments not only gain the knowledge from books but also need more useful and practical experiences. If teachers and professors of the pragmatic sciences have practical experiences, their students will regard their teachings and lectures as persuasive. For example, journalism department offices always invite the successful reporters and journalists to their departments to teach their students. Due to the practical experiences of the faculty, the students of pragmatic sciences will easily understand what they learn and convince the professors and teachers’ lessons. In addition, if professors and teachers of t pragmatic sciences spend time working outside the academic world and engage in something that is relevant to the courses they teach, they can give their students useful suggestions and help students who are serious about pursuing a career in that field to make correct career decisions. Moreover, some social sciences researchers and professors always spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach because they want to acquire the accurate research data and results. That is to say, more social sciences faculty take advantage of working outside the academic world in order to discover social problems, observe social phenomena and explain depth meanings of social facts. I took sociology for example, more sociologists and professors of sociological departments of universities are inclined to participate in some groups and organizations with an eye to observing the problems, causes and results. In Taiwan, one sociological researcher once spent one week prostituting in order to know why prostitutes engage in erotic jobs and interactions between prostitutes. Form what is mentioned above, we can’t deny that faculty who belong to pragmatic or social sciences should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach for the purpose of benefiting their students and improving the quality of instruction at the college and university level.

However, there are the other disciplines that their faculty is unnecessary to spend time working outside the academic world. To elaborate the above statement, natural scientists will puzzled when some people request them working outside the academic world. As everybody knows, natural scientists always spare no effort to do their studies in academic fields. For example, chemists must do their researches in laboratories. If you ask them spend time working outside the laboratories, they will confused and don’t know what you are talking about. The other example is that mathematics professors in universities don’t spend time working outside the academic world because working outside the academic world is futile to their research field. On account of the above explanation and examples, we can realize that not all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in that some researchers and professors of natural sciences should concentrate on academic field rather than do futility outside the academic world.

To sum up, it goes without saying that some faculty spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach will avail their students and better the quality of education at the college and university level. Nevertheless, not all disciplines’ faculty should necessitated spending time working outside the academic world, in contrast, some sciences’ faculty like natural scientists should be diligent in their academic world for the sake of improving their research and instruction qualities of colleges and universities. In the light of the above reasoning, the issue claim is compelling apparently in some part, but it is not entirely cogent.

[steven-lau]

The issue is that all faculty should be required (to)spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they tech(teach) so as to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level. The issue seems to be sound at first glance; however, looking this issue deeply and carefully, we can know this issue in(is?) not entirely cogent. In the following paragraph(s), I will try to illustrate my point view about this issue.

Admittedly, there is no denying that pragmatic sciences emerge and more colleges and universities establish(have eatablished) these practical departments than before. Owing to this phenomenon, the professors, teachers and faculty who belong to these pragmatic science departments not only gain the knowledge from books but also need more useful and practical experiences. If teachers and professors of the pragmatic sciences have practical experiences, their students will regard their teachings and lectures as persuasive. For example, journalism department offices always invite the successful reporters and journalists to their departments to teach their students.(as far as I am concerned, this example does not give the point-outside the academic world- a strong support) Due to the practical experiences of the faculty, the students of pragmatic sciences will easily understand what they learn and convince the professors and teachers’ lessons. In addition, if professors and teachers of t(the) pragmatic sciences spend time working outside the academic world and engage in something that is relevant to the courses they teach, they can give their students useful suggestions and help students who are serious about pursuing a career in that field to make correct career decisions. Moreover, some social sciences researchers and professors always spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach because they want to acquire the accurate research data and results. That is to say, more social sciences faculty take advantage of working outside the academic world in order to discover social problems, observe social phenomena and explain depth meanings of social facts. I took sociology for example, more sociologists and professors of sociological departments of universities are inclined to participate in some groups and organizations with an eye to observing the problems, causes and results. In Taiwan(good one), one sociological researcher once spent one week prostituting in order to know why prostitutes engage in erotic jobs and interactions between prostitutes. Form what is mentioned above, we can’t deny that faculty who belong to pragmatic or social sciences should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach for the purpose of benefiting their students and improving the quality of instruction at the college and university level.(this paragraph seems too long)

However, there are the other disciplines that their faculty is unnecessary to spend time working outside the academic world. To elaborate the above statement, natural scientists will puzzled when some people request them working outside the academic world. As everybody knows, natural scientists always spare no effort to do their studies in academic fields. For example, chemists must do their researches in laboratories. If you ask them spend time working outside the laboratories, they will confused and don’t know what you are talking about.(I major in chemistry, actually we did have a lot of work to do outside the lab, but whatever, as an example it is reasonable) The other example is that mathematics professors in universities don’t spend time working outside the academic world because working outside the academic world is futile to their research field. On account of the above explanation and examples, we can realize that not all faculty(faculties?) should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in that some researchers and professors of natural sciences should concentrate on academic field rather than do futility outside the academic world.

To sum up, it goes without saying that some faculty spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach will avail their students and better the quality of education at the college and university level. Nevertheless, not all disciplines’ faculty should necessitated spending time working outside the academic world, in contrast, some sciences’ faculty like natural scientists should be diligent in their academic world for the sake of improving their research and instruction qualities of colleges and universities. In the light of the above reasoning, the issue claim is compelling apparently in some part, but it is not entirely cogent.

[steven-lau]

i happen to write this one before.

The speaker asserts that all school faculties should spend time working outside their academic world in professions relevant to the course they teach. In my point of view, whether professors should spend time outside the class and the lab depends on a case-by-case analysis of different subjects.

As for the subjects that receive rare experiences from outside work, the faculties do not need to be required to take time working outside their academic area. Especially in some certain academic area like literature and philosophy, the professors would generally find very limited academic atmosphere outside their profession. They could earn more through class argumentation, reading related literatures and communication with each other. Take my uncle, who is professor major in theoretical physics, as an example that he finishes his everyday job usually in his office with his computer and a lot of reference in physics. On the other hand, a compulsory outside class work would distract professors in these subjects who could pay more attentions to their research.

However, for these subjects like software engineering, business, botany and so on which would certainly gain advantages from the experience acquired from outside working, the professors should be encouraged to take time working outside their academic area. This would bring some benefits for both the students and their own research.

First, such experience could cultivate students' interest of the subject. If a botany professor takes his/her students into the real forest to distinguish the spices of the flowers and trees they have learned from the textbook, the students would gain more direct experience. That is to say, the working outside the academic area could bring more concrete, real sense to help students major in nature science to comprehend the abstract laws and principles they learned from books.

Another advantage is such working outside the academic area would help the faculty and the students to catch up with the great changing of the world. After all, what the students learned from the textbooks is old-fashioned more or less. It is not exaggerated to say that the development in the area like computer science or software is happening everyday. Staying in the class would only block our eyes and ears that we can not see and hear what this world has become to be.

What is more, practice outside the academic area could make our research more convincing and specialization. Usually a great research is the section based on theory which is conducted in class combined with practical investigation out of the class. For example, in the financial area, knowledge only from the books is far from enough, to better understand the real market the students should jump into the money market to feel it. It is also bring materials for their research papers.

In sum, whether faculty should spend time working outside academic area depends on different subjects. For some like literature and philosophy, it would be unnecessary, while for others such as nature science, engineering and business, experience outside the class could bring advantages for the professors and students.

[grad2009]

Hi LousLin,
you will definitely get 5.5-6 in your exam....great job..
please evaluate my essay
4. "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."

The speaker, here, asserted that outside field expertise and knowledge is must for the advancement of any field of study. Undoubtedly, I support the statement of the speaker just because of the fact that we, human being, have categorized our field of study to attain certain goals of our life. For example, ‘science’ is used basically to decipher the mystery of the universe or beyond and for the technological advancement; ‘art’ is used to cultivate our culture and to know our topography and history of our evolution. However, none of these can exist without the help of other. Again, if we think about intra categorization like physics mathematics as a sub part of science and history and literature as of arts, then inter dependency is also required to go forward. With the above mentioned examples I will elaborate my views in detail to support my opinion.


First, in support of our views on intra subject relationship, we are considering a scientific research organization, doing basic nuclear physics research using accelerators. The basic objective of the organization is to accelerate charged particles to bombard a target, made of say gold, to study the after effect of the phenomenon, by which the characteristics of certain unknown elements can be studied. The knowledge of nuclear physics will not suffice to achieve it without designing of an accelerator, which itself demand the involvement of several domain like mechanical, civil, cryogenics, electronics etc.. Moreover, the involvement of electronics to design a data acquisition system, which provides raw information of the phenomenon, is inevitable and furthermore the knowledge about computer science is also necessary to develop a software, which shows a realistic presentation of the event. Now, with the same example, if we proceed to discuss about inter relationship of two broad domains like ‘art’ and ‘science’, we will see that the study of different languages could not be avoided to do collaborative research, without which advancement of research is impossible. There are many examples where an entirely different field has been reached in very advanced stage during the study of a main field. The concept of internet is one of the examples which evolved during the collaborative research of European defense scientists, needed to interact amongst themselves using a virtual medium.

Nowadays, the use of technology is everywhere in the field of arts. Video and audio technology is used extensively in film, music and theatre to make it more realistic. The knowledge of fields like history and geography are not limited in the text book, but can easily be available in the internet with proper graphical representation which interests many to study those subjects and henceforth helps the advancement.

However, in contrast, there are certain fields do not require the involvement of outsiders for its advancements. As an example a painter shows the mastery of painting by his own skill. But, this is very narrow domain, compared to other.

To conclude, I must say that all existed field somehow overlaps with each other because they are essentially converging to a main field which is mankind and the universe.

[grad2009]

also tell me whether you are completing such a long essay in 45 minutes or not.It seems your essay exceeds 800 words wheras ETS requires it within 400-500

[LouisLin]

i happen to write this one before.

The speaker asserts that all school faculty[faculties-as I know, faculty is uncountable noun when it means school labors] should spend time working outside their academic world in professions relevant to the course they teach. From[In] my point of view, whether professors should spend time outside the class and the lab depends on a case-by-case analysis of different subjects.[Somehow it's wrong. When we use whether, it always accompany conjunction, or. ]

As for the subjects that receive rare experiences from outside work, the faculty[faculties] do not need to be required to spend[take] time working outside their academic area. Especially in some certain academic areas like literature and philosophy, the professors would generally find very limited academic atmosphere outside their profession. They could earn more through class argumentation, reading related literatures and communicating[on] with each other. Take my uncle, who is professor major in theoretical physics, as an example that he finishes his everyday job usually in his office with his computer and a lot of reference in physics. On the other hand, a compulsory outside class work would distract professors attention on[in] these subjects who could pay more attentions to their research originally.
[good statement]

However, for these subjects like software engineering, business, botany and so on which would certainly gain advantages from the experience acquired from outside working, the professors should be encouraged to spend[take] time working outside their academic area. This would bring some benefits for both the students and their own researches. To detail the above statement, [F]firstly, such experiences can[could] cultivate students' interest of the subject. If a botany professor takes his/her students into the real forest to distinguish the spices of the flora[flowers and trees] they have learned from the textbook, the students would gain more direct experiences. That is to say, the working outside the academic area could bring more concrete, real sense to help students major in nature science rather than[to] comprehend the abstract descriptions[laws and principles] they learned from books.
[very good example and illustrations]

Another advantage is such working outside the academic area would help the faculty and the students to catch up with the rapid[great] changes[ing] of the world. After all, what the students learned from the textbooks is obsolescent[old-fashioned-I useing GRE verbal changing your usage^^;] more or less. It is not exaggerated to say that the development in the area like computer science or software is happening everyday. Staying in the class would only block our eyes and ears that we can not see and hear what this world has become to be.
[excellent interpretation]

Furthermore[What is more], practice outside the academic area could make our research more convincing and specialization. [Usually] A[a] great research is always the section based on theory which is conducted in class combined with practical investigation out of the class. For example, in the financial area, knowledge only from the books is far from enough, to [better] understand the real market better, the students should take part in[jump into] the money market to experience[feel] it. It is also bring useful materials for their research papers.
[good example and statements]

In sum, whether faculty should spend time working outside academic area or not depends on different subjects. For some disciplines like literature and philosophy, it would be unnecessary, while for others such as nature science, engineering and business, experience outside the class could bring advantages for the professors and students.
[Okay]

This issue is extremely well-organized and has very good points and examples. Nevertheless, you have to correct some grammatical errors and use more exact vocab to express your meaning. All in all, it's a very good issue.

[LouisLin]

Hello, grad2009, many thanks for your comment and suggestion. If I had free time tomorrow, I will correct your issue.^^ll

[grad2009]

hello louisLin,
waiting for your comments regarding my eassy

[LouisLin]

Hi LousLin,
you will definitely get 5.5-6 in your exam....great job..
please evaluate my essay
4. "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."

The speaker[, here,] asserted that outside field expertise and knowledge is must for the advancement of any field of study. Undoubtedly, I support the statement of the speaker just because of the fact that we, human being, have categorized our field of study to attain certain goals of our life.[the above description is too abstract] For example, ‘science’ is used basically to decipher the mystery of the universe or beyond [and] for the technological advancement; ‘art’ is used to cultivate our culture and to know our topography and history of our evolution. However, none of these can exist without the help of others. [Again, i] If we think about intra categorization like physics, mathematics as a sub part of science and history and literature as of arts, then inter-dependency is also required to go forward.[this statement is also too abstract so that I don't fully understand what you are talking about] With the above mentioned examples, I will elaborate my views in detail to support my opinion.


First, in support of our views on intra subject relationship, we are considering a scientific research organization, doing basic nuclear physics research using accelerators. The basic objective of the organization is to accelerate charged particles to bombard a target, made of say gold[Do you mean target made of say gold? What do you mean?], to study the after effect of the phenomenon, by which the characteristics of certain unknown elements can be studied. The knowledge of nuclear physics will not suffice to achieve it without designing of an accelerator, which itself demand the involvement of several domains like mechanical, civil, cryogenics, electronics etc.. Moreover, the involvement of electronics to design a data acquisition system, which provides raw information of the phenomenon, is inevitable [and ]Furthermore, the knowledge about computer science is also necessary to develop a software, which shows a realistic presentation of the event. Now, with the same example, if we proceed to discuss about inter-relationship of two broad domains like ‘art’ and ‘science’, we will see that the study of different languages could not be avoided to do collaborative research, [without which advancement of research is impossible.-cumbrance, unnecessary] There are many examples where an entirely different field has been reached in very advanced stage during the study of a main field.[por favor, el señor use more simple sentence to express the above sentence's meaning becuase the above sentence formation is not good and easy for reading.] The concept of internet is one of the examples which evolved during the collaborative research of European defense scientists, needed to interact amongst themselves using a virtual medium.

Nowadays, the applications[use] of technology is ubiquitous[everywhere] in the field of arts. Video and audio technology is used extensively in film, music and theatre to make it more realistic.[very good point and example] The knowledge of fields like history and geography are not limited in the textbook, but can easily be available in the internet with proper graphical representation which interests many people to study those subjects and henceforth helps the advancement.
[good point but some sentences need to polish]

However,[ in contrast,-redundancy] there are certain fields do not require the involvement of outsiders for its advancements. As an example a painter shows the mastery of painting by his own skill [. But,] because this is very narrow domain[,] that compared to others.
[passable example]

To conclude, I must say that all existed field somehow overlaps with each other because those[they] are essentially converging to a main field [which is mankind and the universe- worng sentence. when you use relative pronoun, that means it equal to subject or object in relative clause. According to your last sentence, main field is mankind the universe. I don't know the meaning of the last snetence.].

In my opinion, you have professional knowledge which can adress the topic task. However, I advised you that you may as well use simple sentences to convey your thoughts.
Anyway, hope you can do better next time.

[grad2009]

Thanks LousLin for your valuable comments...I am working very hard to make this section(AWA) perfect but it is giving lots of trouble...Any suggestion?? what do u think? What will be my score with this writing?