2009 April 3rd, 10:55 AM
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I JUST got here.
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grading my essay--help
Can anybody grade my essay
 ...and many thanks in advanceeffects of the the reduced flight tickets fares Travelling around the world is one of the most common dreams among people all over the world. This dream of travelling is becoming a reality due to the noticeable decrease in the air flights tickets. This essay will discuss the negative effects of the reduced prices of air tickets on society, personality and environment. First of all, the plan's motors use fuel to operate, as a result of the reduced fares, more people will book flights and more plans will be flown. This has a damaging effect on the environment .it increases the earth's temperature and the air pollution, thus, making the earth unpleasant and a dismal place to live in in the future. second, researches proved that people are attracted to reduced prices and try to make use of these fares even if they do not need the product .consequently people will waste their time searching and comparing flights .in more complicated cases people will have interest in jobs only to spend it on their travel and leisure. As a result, the quality of their job and their productivity will be decreased . A third effect will be on society and family. People will spend their money and savings on travelling and tourism and may loss the interest in attending local cultural activities, reading books or spending time with the family, friends and children. this behavior will have disastrous effects on the culture of people and on the family and society coherence. In conclusion, although travelling around the world has many advantages like relaxation, I believe that the cheap flights will lead to uncontrolled and irresponsible attitudes among people which have negative effects on society and environment. thank you in advance |
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2009 April 17th, 11:15 AM
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You should get a 6.0 for this. You have obviuosly studied the vocabulary and structure of an essay. The next step is to eliminate the grammar and vocabulary mistakes.
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2009 April 18th, 10:25 PM
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Sure. Look at this paragraph:
"Second, research{es} has proved that people are attracted to reduced prices and try to make use of these lower fares even if they do not need the product .Consequently, people will waste their time searching for and comparing flights .In more complicated cases people will have an interest in jobs only to spend their salary on their travel and leisure. As a result, the quality of their job and their productivity will be decreased ." { } means delete I hope this helps. Regards, Mike ielts2u - an IELTS speaking and writing help site |
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2009 April 21st, 04:43 PM
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