can someone please grade my ielts general writing task 2 :)

[pratap kumar]

Q) Being a celebrity such as famous film star or sports personality – brings problems as well as benefits.

Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or problems?

 

Ans)

 

 

Celebrities are most popular icons in the world. Getting a celebrity status is not an easy job. The person who achieves highest level among all people by hard work known as celebrity. Undoubtedly, the famous people have gained lots of benefits that common man doesn’t gain. Although, some society individuals think that famousness brings lot of downsides to the people, I believe that it brings innumerable number if benefits such as money and social status.

Celebrities are gaining lots of money in and around the work. They can earn lots of money with less amount of period compared to common people who are living in community. For example, Dhoni, A famous and popular Indian cricketer has gained 20000000 dollars money for an advertisement that he acted for a famous worldwide company. This was happened because of his fame in sports. This amount is not equivalent to a common school teacher whose pay is far less than him. It is clear that being a celebrity would have positive effect in their life and this is one of the two reasons that person can get as a celebrity.

High level social status, the celebrities has acquired than a normal people. Celebrities are role models, they can motivate the people towards their success. For Instance, Amitabh Bachan, A famous well known person and popular Indian star has gained high status, by administrating a lot of shows and involved in many social activities.

In conclusion, celebrities such as famous people have a lot of benefits such as economically sound and high level status. Therefore, I strongly believe that, being a famous personality people has got immense amount of advantages than a drawbacks. It is better said that if celebrity spends the money towards society growth.