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Could you please mark my essay .

 

A family member is coming to stay with you. He/she will be arriving by train in the morning, but you won’t be home until the evening.

Write a letter to your relative. In your letter:

 

  • explain arrangements you have made for them to have keys and get into the house
  • tell your relative how to get from the train station to your house
  • say when you will be home and suggest what you could do together that evening

 

Dear Kim

 

I am so sorry that I should work in the day you are coming, I asked one of my best friends , Sam, that is neighbor too, to deliver key to you when you arrive.she live at 5/3 .Feel free to ring their door bell please.

There are three ways to get home, first you can use taxi that is little bit expensive, the second way is take a bus in the main street, just walk from train station to the Mary main street and you will find a bus station at your right.

I will be at home at 4 and then we can talk and then make a dinner and go out and have fun, I am so sorry again that I couldn't make to visit you at train station , feel free to take anything you need and feel like your own home.

Sincerely

Shahla

Should arts-related entertainment venues such as museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge apply for admittance?

Discuss this issue, and give your opinion.

 

Should visitors pay money for entertainment venues like museums or art gallery or not, there are different subjects that can discuss here.

 

First , the keeping and take care of the staff in museums have so many expenses like hiring skilled staff to clean , study, research, building expenses, electricity power, and other expenses. so maybe people can pay for these expenses and help to take care of the staff inside of the museum or art gallery. Not for the all expenses but just some part of the expense and in this way they feel they are paying for keeping museum or art galley and they art part of this responsibility.

 

Second, despite all expenses all people even poor people have right to visit museum or art gallery and enjoy theses, no matter how rich or poor they are.So government should have a plan to pay for museum or art gallery to give this opportunity to anybody to vist museum or art gallery.

 

Finally , I think it it better to decrease price of the bill to the lowest price that any body in society can afford it and then government pay for the rest of the expenses. In this way all people able to visit what they like to see in museums and art galleries.

 

To sum up, every body have right , no matter poor or rich, and government should have a plan to respect people of their society and give them chance to visit arts-related entertainment venues .

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Writing academic,Please any one grade me and give me a band

Nowadays in a modern society punishment are established in order to reduce crimes and bring everlasting security and justice in a society.Setting punishment for each type of crime is a debatable issue.People argue that punishment must be in regard to act, however another group of people believe that verdict must be implemented by taking consideration of circumstances and motivations. It can only be justified by analyzing the situation for crime before deducing the punishment.

 

Circumstances for the crime is very important issue for a crime.For example,killing someone in self defense can't be compared with a lunatic killing for pleasure.However it must not be forgotten that a culprit may be exempted for his/her sin if he/she is able to prove the court that the incident took place as a act of self defense.Thus ,a court must be vigilant in giving its verdict after thoroughly examining the scene before deducing its final judgement.

 

Secondly,motivation for committing a crime is a serious factor that impels one individual to be a criminal.For instance, a hungry person are forced to steal in a situation of drought and famine to satisfy his/her needs.On the other hand,it is not comparable to a person who mixes a stone in a raw food materials,purely to earn financial incentives.In addition, if an incident took place that didn't have any harmful effect,then it is not justifiable to categories it as a crime.Nevertheless ,it is very wise to analysis the crime before judgement.

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On summary,it can be conceded that fixed punishment for each type of crime is not applicable to modern society,rather circumstances and motivations must be properly taken into account.Furthermore,it can be totally exemplified by crimes done in self defense and stealing during famine. On the contrary, it is also wise to understand the scenario of crime so that a culprit may not escape from wrong deeds.

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Topic: Some people think that the sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co operate become more useful adults. Discuss and give your opinion

 

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In today's modern world, the level of competition among children have rose immense due to rise in percentage share of younger generation, limited number of resources and improved standard of education. Some believe that a sense of competition should be encouraged among children to make them more successful. While, others argue that coorporation rather than competition can develop better individuals and ultimately better members of our society.

 

There is no denying the fact, that it is the sense of competition that can assist children in knowing what their target is and therefore encourage them to work with more zeal and enthusiam. In addition, it is only through competition we will be able to differentiate the best and capable children from the rest. Furthermore, every child will put his hardwork to compete against eachother and therefore there will be no free-riders.

 

On the contrary, there are also number of benefits that children can gain by working collectiively. Firstly, they will be better able to work in teams. Secondly, in order to succeed every child will be motivated to contribute the best he/she can. Lastly, even the children who are not capable enough to work on their own will also be able to perform well and avoid getting discouraged because of "fear of failure".

 

To conclude, after analyzing both sides of the topic we can comprehend that neither competition or coorporation can benefit along. Children should be encouraged to compete and also at times coorporate with each other to achieve the best results.

 

 

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Could you please score me IELTS Writing 1. Thank you in advance.

Writing 1

 

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The chats reflect result of inquiry about aims and fees sources for studying of adults.

According to the graph interest in subject was mentioned by 40% of mature student what makes it the most widespread reason. 2% less respondents were about to gain qualifications.

Work-related issues make considerable impact on decision to study, 22% of surveyed expect it to be helpful for current job and 12% want to change a job and 20% looked forward improving prospects of promotion. The same number of people went on studying because they enjoy the process.

Finally meeting people is in the end of the reasons list with 9%.

Concerning studying fees survey showed following results: the main part of 40% must be provided by individuals, 35% of costs are going to be covered by employer and the last 20% remain to be shared by taxpayers.

So further education could be caused by variety if commitment either it could be feed by range of sources.

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Is there anyone who can check my essay and let me know my mistakes?I need to get band 7 in writing.

Thanks in advance.

 

Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations.

Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people?

 

It is the burning, debatable question whether or not media should publish the private information about the celebrity’s life. Everyday people use the newspaper to get the information about their favorite celebrities. These are the people who believe that celebrities’ life is not private and all the news should be published in public.

Since it is true that celebrities make significant effect on person’s mind, they watch them on national television doing something extra-ordinary. People try to imitate their favorite celebrities as they are interested in becoming like their desired celebrities. They are fascinating knowing celebrity’s lifestyles, where they eat, from where they purchase their clothes and with whom they have a current affair and the history about their career.

 

Celebrities work for longer hours to produce the desired output. After finishing longer hours of work, they expect to have some privacy for themselves where they can spend quality time with their favorite ones. This is one of the reason celebrities try to avoid interaction with media while spending their leisure time. Since they avoid interaction, they become the front headline news stating that particular celebrity is arrogant and rude. Media adds extra unnecessary news to add up some spice in the news which is enough to giggle the viewers and in order to increase their sale.

 

Finally, media should publish the original news rather than the gossip as it would affect celebrities’ career and their fans prospective. It would be more appropriate if media publish celebrity’s achievements and awards to public rather than private pictures and rumor. The chitchat would affect the celebrity and they would become rude and arrogant rather than friendly towards media.

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Hi,

This looks like a 6.0. The grammar and vocabulary are close to a 7.0, but the structure is poor.

The introduction has 3 background statements in it. A 7.0 should have some sort of overview:, such as "This essay will explore the advantages and disadvantages of the publication of private details of celebrities' lives."

Each body paragraph should have a topic sentence to state what the idea of that paragraph is, such as "First, the public has some right to know something about their favourite celebrity."; "However, celebrities also have the right to some sort of private life."

The conclusion is not bad.

Regarding your vocabulary, it is somethimes influenced by your first language (?): 'giggle' is wrong; 'chitchat' is too informal.

For your grammar, you overuse 'the'.

I hope this helps.

Mike

Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations.

Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people?

 

It is the burning, debatable question whether or not media should publish the private information about the celebrity’s life. Everyday people use the newspaper to get the information about their favorite celebrities. These are the people who believe that celebrities’ life is not private and all the news should be published in public.

Since it is true that celebrities make significant effect on person’s mind, they watch them on national television doing something extra-ordinary. People try to imitate their favorite celebrities as they are interested in becoming like their desired celebrities. They are fascinating knowing celebrity’s lifestyles, where they eat, from where they purchase their clothes and with whom they have a current affair and the history about their career.

 

Celebrities work for longer hours to produce the desired output. After finishing longer hours of work, they expect to have some privacy for themselves where they can spend quality time with their favorite ones. This is one of the reason celebrities try to avoid interaction with media while spending their leisure time. Since they avoid interaction, they become the front headline news stating that particular celebrity is arrogant and rude. Media adds extra unnecessary news to add up some spice in the news which is enough to giggle the viewers and in order to increase their sale.

 

Finally, media should publish the original news rather than the gossip as it would affect celebrities’ career and their fans prospective. It would be more appropriate if media publish celebrity’s achievements and awards to public rather than private pictures and rumor. The chitchat would affect the celebrity and they would become rude and arrogant rather than friendly towards media.

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Could someone check my essay and provide me a feedback with IELTS band. Please check for Grammar, Cohesion and Lexical resource and suggest me to improve my writing.

 

Your help will be highly appreciated!

 

 

QUESTION----Some parents and teachers believe that children’s behaviour should be strictly controlled, while others think that children should be allowed to grow up in their own way. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

 

It is generally accepted that children’s behavior plays a vital role in their lives. Parents feel proud if their kids show good etiquettes in front of their friends and family. Also, Teachers are the one who helps a child to learn different values in their childhood. I tend to believe that children should be raised under the shadow of their parents and shouldn’t know allow them much freedom.

 

First of all, Childhood is the learning stage for any human being. If children are not raised with good moral values they can be easily fall into bad company. Parents should be aware where their children are going to play and with whom. For instance, Children use the internet extensively these days but that should be allowed under the shadow of mature person. They may misuse the internet by surfing through porn sites or getting into trouble while chatting. I would like to share another example where kids start boozing in a teenage if they are not controlled by their parents properly. Moreover, few teachers are really watchful and see what children are doing in the classroom or in school. They keep an eye on their students all the time stops them right away if they find them doing any mischief.

 

On the contrary, there are some parents and teachers who believe otherwise. They feel that giving freedom makes their children more responsible and independent. Also, Parents want to give their children a proper space in their lives. They think that having more strictness may make their children more stubborn and they will start hiding things from their parents. Some experts say that parents and teachers should behave like a friend with children so that they feel free to share anything with them.

 

If we look at both sides of the argument, I would say that children should be controlled in a proper balance so that they follow good life ethics in their lives without losing their freedom. As we say, “Try not to become a man of success but a man of value”.

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thank you for providing this information,i read that you check the ielts essay..could you check mine too...

Nowadays environmental damage is increasing,even after knowing this individuals are doing nothing.what do you think why is this the case.what actions should we take.

 

Since the beginning of the recorded time, newly designed and devised technologies have madE are life more comfortable, however, they are also responsible for for pollution and environmental devastation,undoubtedly. curiosity and selfishness are the well-known characteristics ,which give their contribution in escalating it.below i will enumerate the myraids reasons and solutions prior to reach an infirmed conclusion.

 

T commence with, nowadays money is considered to be a second God.people are cutting down the trees and forests at supersonic speed for industrial and domestic purposes.elaborately,1000 acres of forests are being cut everyday out of 2.47, which is total.resultantly, minting money can be ascribed to these illful activities.

 

Another intervowen factor is,lack of time.In this hectic era,people are so busy in their personal and professional lives that they are not cognizant about thier surroundings and detrimental repercussions.

 

to my perspective,answer to to all these problems lies in "greener revolution.government with the help of media should educate the people about 3Rs, that are, recycle,resue and reduce.this will ultimately unlock all the keys and many issues, for instance, disposal of non-biodegradable sources, air ,land and water pollution can be solved.

 

to put sea into the vessel, i pen down stating the famous quotes of Blythe Danner,"we as the citizens of this earth have an obligation to leave this earth safer, healthier and better place to live for our children and future generations."

 

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This looks like a 5.0 to 5.5, depending on where you do IELTS;)

The problems are:

Task achievement: poor. The introduction has sentences full of unusual phrases with little meaning. The reasons why are understandable, but you are asking the examiner to guess what you mean. The same goes for the solution. The conclusion is the same problem as the introduction. Make it obvious in English exactly what your point is.

coherence and cohesion: poor. The connections are there, but they are strange. It looks like you are translating directly from your 1st language?

Vocabulary: poor. There are some big words there, but they are poorly used and there are some crazy phrases, like 'to put sea into a vessel'.

Grammar: poor. The grammar is strange. It sometimes looks like you know what you are doing, then it seems to get screwed up later in the sentence.

I am not sure what the solution is here. If you have just prepared by yourself, go and do an IELTS course. That will give you a more solid foundation to move forward. To eradicate the crazy phrases, start reading (anything) for two hours each day. You will start to see how the phrases in your language are expressed in English.

I hope this helps.

Mike

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Topic: It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.

Today the close relationship within the family has become a history. In fact with the influence of western countries, developing countries are also adapting a nuclear system. No doubt, this is today’s a heating issue to identify and resolve its various causes. However, in this essay I will try to contend some unique reasons and solutions to at least reduce the big gap within the close relationship of family.

The foremost reason behind this issue is in itself a sense of development and success. For instance, parents send their children far from home to get better education and later due to work entitlements they need to adjust at same place. This shapes a fundamental step to increase the gap within them. The next reason is the cost. As even if some of them want to live together, they cannot move easily from small country sites to big cities and it’s harder to migrate to foreign country. Eventually busy schedule, at somehow, reduces the thirst of relationship and everybody start to see in a lucrative way.

Nevertheless, there is still more than one way to get families together. The most important is the frequent visits, for example to celebrate events and festivals together. In fact, distance does not matter until the feeling and compassion of togetherness is live. Without any doubt, the technology is in itself a solution. They can make calls, send video’s and even live chat to at least lower the trends of being so far.

To conclude, the reasons could be the solutions, here the only need is to start to see things from different perspectives. The closeness does not mean to stay together, they can share the moments of their time at least frequently, through number of ways, to reduce the big jargons of life.

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Please read and give me some commends about my essay Task 2, from Academic point of view. (430 words, hand-written in 44 min’).

 

Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue.

 

Animal experiments have long been a heated topic amongst animal lovers, researchers and scientists. It is a known fact that each new drug will have to be tested on animals first before applying for human patients, which is a reasonable and necessary part of the drug development. However, many people consider this action as cruel to the experimented animals, and this should be stopped by the government. From personal point of view, I believe that sacrifices from animals are necessary to medical research, though it will be better if scientists in the future can develop a trialling method that might not involve animals.

 

To begin with, there had been a number of drugs been developed thanks to animal experiments. In order to find out how the patients’ bodies will react to a drug, the developer will have to choose to test on a living creature, which, cannot be human since it is rather unpredictable and potentially dangerous if side effects occur. Thus the only option is to experiment this drug on animals with the purpose of saving people. Particularly with some fatal diseases such as cancer, and with the limited power of current technology, taking trial medicines on animals seems to be the only rational and practical step that one has to make. It is obvious that from our human’s perspective, the lives of our fellows are higher regarded than the lives of experimented animals.

 

However, there are voices from animal lovers around the world against this practice since this is considered as too cruel to innocent animals. I, on the other hand, disagree with their opinion, as people have eaten animals from a long time ago, and no one had criticised about this. For an animal, being experimented is only as suffering as being eaten, and both are for human’s benefits. Furthermore, although my personal view appears to be unfair to animals, it is important to note that with our current level of technology, animal experiments is the only way for new medicines to be tested before using them on people. In the future, hopefully with the advancement in our medical science, animals will be treated better and less being involved in trialling new drugs, but that is only a mere hope in the increase of many new diseases arising from modern lives.

 

In summary, I support the idea that animal experimentation is still inevitable for medical research and developing drugs. In spite of that, there is a faint hope in the future that we might be able to test new drugs without experimenting them on innocent animals.

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Can anyone please provide suggestions for improvement; (attempted in 43 min's); Thanks

 

 

 

 

Many children today find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention at school.

What could you think are the main causes?

What are the possible solutions ?

 

Nowadays, children are paying less attention in school activities than before. There are various reasons behind this such as hard curriculum, harsh schedule and mischievous behaviour. In this essay, I will explain these causes in more detail and try to offer some effective solutions to at least lower this problem.

There is no doubt that little one’s are showing less interest in school curriculum. The very first cause is hard and strict curriculum. For example, one school term is comprised of various scientific, technological and mathematical programs. There seems no space for the other courses like painting, art, physical and game period. Ultimately, everyday’s similar yet technical routines turn young ones to show less interest compared to very first day of school excitement. Secondly, today teenagers are following stringent time schedule. For example, their whole day has turned onto a combination of school, tuition and home work routines, in fact, excluding such timing there is very less space for the little one to do exactly what he wants. Thirdly, the mischievous nature of children forces them to participate in play activities than to follow the schedule that they are really not fan of. They prefer to have more fun and hilarious moments due to the fact that this is what a childhood meant to be.

However, there are various solutions for all the reasons enlisted above. Firstly, the need is to change school timetable. The whole term should be comprised of games and art courses including all other scientific and mathematical approaches. This would at least break a monotonic routine of theory based practices and provide some effective and efficient interest activities. Secondly, school and parent can organize small tours to museum, zoos and science so as to increase young one’s interest in history, living species and scientific routines. This would also increase and fulfil their curiosity to find fun while learning.

To recapitulate, although this has become a necessity that children should have an interest and knowledge of whole globe and its scientific routines, this could only be accomplished by providing a combination of his and world interest routines together. This will increase their interest together with heterogeneous environment.

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It is needless to say societies contain individuals without considering the role of people the word of society is meaningless. However, not all people are worth equally to communities. Some people argue that scientist have crucial role to play. Whereas, others strongly believe that artists are invaluable to their societies and without them communities would be dull and monotonous besides they have impacts on their fans.

 

On the one hand, it is deemed that if a country lacks scientist, they are unlikely to make progress. The future of a country correlates the number of intelligent ones and scientist they own. A simple instance is comparing developed nations with developing ones. Developed countries such as Germany strive to absorb highly skilled people throughout the world because it is to the best interest of them. They state the more geniuses dwell in their countries, the more improvement they make.

 

On the other hand, others firmly state that artist are worth more. They argue that artists are representatives of a community. For example, directors and movie makers can depict their culture to all over the world. Thus, it is neither sensible nor useful to neglect them. Take a well-liked actor for an instance. Clearly, they have substantial number of fans who consider that actor as their role model. These role models are imitated. Thereby, eventually their behavior will be accepted as a common behavior among people. They can easily set or change a norm in societies. They have such influential roles.

 

To sum up, I stand for the latter opinion which means I do agree artists deserve more value. They should be supported and treated well by societies otherwise they would rebel against the community and the result can be a catastrophe owing to being popular. If they shun the mainstream their fans will ignore as well. Then we will end up living in a chaotic society.

It is needless to say societies contain individuals without considering the role of people the word of society is meaningless. However, not all people are worth equally to communities. Some people argue that scientist have crucial role to play. Whereas, others strongly believe that artists are invaluable to their societies and without them communities would be dull and monotonous besides they have impacts on their fans.

 

On the one hand, it is deemed that if a country lacks scientist, they are unlikely to make progress. The future of a country correlates the number of intelligent ones and scientist they own. A simple instance is comparing developed nations with developing ones. Developed countries such as Germany strive to absorb highly skilled people throughout the world because it is to the best interest of them. They state the more geniuses dwell in their countries, the more improvement they make.

 

On the other hand, others firmly state that artist are worth more. They argue that artists are representatives of a community. For example, directors and movie makers can depict their culture to all over the world. Thus, it is neither sensible nor useful to neglect them. Take a well-liked actor for an instance. Clearly, they have substantial number of fans who consider that actor as their role model. These role models are imitated. Thereby, eventually their behavior will be accepted as a common behavior among people. They can easily set or change a norm in societies. They have such influential roles.

 

To sum up, I stand for the latter opinion which means I do agree artists deserve more value. They should be supported and treated well by societies otherwise they would rebel against the community and the result can be a catastrophe owing to being popular. If they shun the mainstream their fans will ignore as well. Then we will end up living in a chaotic society.

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Hi Behbahani,

The introduction is a 5.0. The structure is fine, but the grammar makes it difficult to understand (particularly the first and last sentence). Do not use 'whereas' or 'besides' until your English is stronger. The examiners will not notice:)

 

The body paragraphs look like a low 6.0. The grammar is much better (although you do use a lot of simple sentences).

 

The conclusion is a 5.5. You state your opinion, but there is no summary (scientists are not mentioned). Because of this, you end with a crazy set of statements. "To sum up, I stand for the latter opinion which means I do agree artists deserve more value. They should be supported and treated well by societies " is pretty good. Put a summary before this and you will get an easy 6.0.

 

Overall, you should get a 5.5, but a 6.0 is close. Go to school. They will sort you out in a month.

 

Mike

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Please give me suggestions to improve my IELTS essay, i'm going to take the IELTS exam on March 15 2014. (Time: 25 mins)

Thanks

 

 

Topic": Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think that this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.

 

 

Some professions weave the very fabric of society but it is widely known that sports professionals earn more than them. Although others think that this is justifiable, some believe that it is unjust.

 

Teachers, doctors, nurses, scientists and some others play a significant role in the continuing functioning and development of our society. Despite this, they are poorly compensated. These professionals undergo rigorous training and long hours to achieve their current state. In order to qualify for these positions, there are certain criteria that must be met that are endowed only to few. Without them, society is helpless. It is undeniable that community cannot function without schools and hospitals. Access to healthcare and good education are both essential to the population.

 

On the other hand, entertainment has a significant part in the society as well. Sports is one of the most common form of entertainment for people of different walks of life. Being a sports professional is not easy. A great deal of talent and years of dedication to a chosen sport is needed to acquire the status quo like that of Michael Phelps or Manny Pacquiao. These athletes are able to generate a lot of income from sponsorship and money from the crowd that are willing to watch them play. They have a larger audience compared to that of a surgeon. They influence millions of people while doctors save one life at a time.

 

It is justifiable that sports professionals earn more since they affect the world in a larger scale.

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hi could you please check my essay

 

Recent research shows that the consumption of junk food is a major factor in poor diet and that it is detrimental to health. Some people believe that better health education is the answer to this problem, but others disagree. What is your opinion???

 

It is generally acknowledged that food has given the world a large number of benefits and provide us a huge amount of energy. However, there is a damaging to health comes from the food cannot avoid it without take care about our health. In my opinion, I agree that it is very important to teaching the people about food and their health by, for example, healthcare systems. Therefore, this easy will discuss the effect of unhealthy food on the health of the people.

On the first side of the argument there are people who argue that healthcare by education systems is best way to teaching people to take their attention about their health . For example, government should ban advertising of bad food on television and promotion a good health. Also, it can do that by producing a handbook which has advices about a healthy food. In addition, it can educate the children in schools to avoid unhealthy food because this kind of food can cause many kinds of diseases, for instance, fatness or obesity, overweight, hurt heart, blood procure, and cancer.

On the other hand ,there are people who believe that it is not necessary to teaching people about unhealthy food because they believe that all people know what is the junk food mean. Moreover, it is very cheap and inexpensive ,also they can find it at anywhere. In addition, they think that a little from junk food will not cause diseases , Also they think that there are anther ways to keep their health like exercises, for example, running very morning is a good to keep their health.

In conclusion, however, it is not doubtful that the health education of people has a great deal of problem, so, the answer, I think lays somewhere in the middle. To put it a different way, provided that the government should address the magnitude of this massive problem and its underlying the causes, they can make a significant different.

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Animals' rights and the use of animals for food or research (discuss the both views)

 

 

Nowadays, animals are used not only as a source of food, which is generally assepted, but also in scientific research. The number of studies using animals grows faster. Hence, in the last decades, the animals' rigths have been discussed.

The human kind is a apex predador in Earth, so, to use other animals in our alimentation is the part of our nature. Some people can exclude meal, fish, milk and eggs from their food habits, but the vegeterian diet should be supplemented with vitamins and protein complex which extracted from animal tissue. Due to the biological dependence of humans there is no way to exclude animals from our diet. Although, we can decrease the consume of meal and fish, adapting our food habits to our real needs. In the developed countries there are millions of pounds of meal which are transformed in garbage unnecessary. The better management of food distribution and consume will save thousants of animals every year.

In the other side, many animals are killed during scientific experiments. The laboratorian animals, as mice or rabbits, are largery used by pharmaceutical companies, universities and researh groups in order to test new drugs or cosmetics. Maybe, some of this expeeiments are useless and there is no need of sacrify living being. The use of animals in science and industry show be allowed only if there is no other solution to certify the safenessn of medical drug or treatment. All animals are living beings, with the right to live and they do not deserve to suffer.

Therefore, our society cannot live without using animals in food, but we can reduce the consume of meal in one side and avoid the criminoua murdern living beings. If we assume that animals are alive, as we are, and act in the ethical way, we will save millions of animals.

 

(Written in text editor, without orthography corrector.)

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Please grade my essay and give me a band score

rite about the following topic:

Should arts-related entertainment venues such as museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge apply for admittance?

Discuss this issue, and give your opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

 

 

Some people hold the opinion that a common man should have free

access to art galleries and museums; others, however disagree and

think it should be available on cost so that artists are helped financially.

 

The first group, who are in favour of cost-free entry to

art related entertainments, say that it is the basic right of every citizen

to have access to national museums because it depicts history of a nation.

Further, they stress encouraging people to participate in

art exhibitions is kind of healthy activity. Lastly as more people suffer from

financial problems now-a-days; so it is not advisable to impose

charges as it would significantly reduce the number of visitors.

 

However, there is other group who has strong feelings that it is not

wise to have free entries. Firstly, it would not help the art in general,

and the artists particularly. The artists must have a stable source of

income as to support themselves. The same thing applies to museums

as it must generate revenue in order to support its various costs and

without an income source it is hard to sustain it very self. Lastly, they

argue that it will generate a sense of recognition and importance in

a common man as some thing done as paid is usually worthy.

 

In conclusion, i suggest an awareness needs to be created among general

public about financial aspect of entry fees and they should be persuaded

to pay as they enter. This money is necessary for art to live and progress.

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The flow chart shows that, hiring process at large corporation for the permanent post. The step involved in the process of selecting candidates described below.

In the first step candidates must submit their resume or curriculum vita to the company. After successful completion of the submission process job seeker will go for attend the initial qualifying interview round, in this round recruiters wants a minimum qualification from the candidates (ex. B.E, B.Tech)

Recruiters will select who achieved a minimum qualification and rest of them eliminated. The candidates who achieved a minimum qualification they were go for next round that is aptitude test. In the test recruiters want to know about the candidates how much he or she having the skills, the reason behind this test candidate who were in the post they should have a minimum skill when he or she work with under pressure. The candidates who were pass in the test they will go to next round remaining candidates eliminated means not employed.

The candidates who were appeared and pass the test they must start work in probation of six months, in this period candidates get more information about the work and other hand recruiters get a chance to how much candidate have the capability of work. After successful completion of six months recruiters gave reference they were posted in permanent employed

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Hello, everybody. This is my first effort of writing an essay for IELTS. Could you, please check and estimate?

 

One day oil and gas reserve will run out. The research for alternative energy sources like wind, solar, water power, burning waste are causing as much environmental damage as nuclear power sources they are intended to replace. How far do you agree to this statement? What possible benefits do the alternative sources bring OR what damage they cause.

 

In the argument, the author states that in some time the world’s entrails will not be able to provide humanity with oil and gas. Therefore, people need to find alternative energy sources. Nevertheless, the envitomental concerns of the researches for renewable energy sources are as acute as those of using nuclear power. However, if we take a closer look it’ll become apparent that the author has not taken into consideration some aspects of both using nuclear power and the researching for renewable energy sources, which has lead to a number of mistaken assumptions.

The use of nuclear power energy can not only be dangerous for environment itself but directly for people. The nuclear disaster happened in Chernobyl in 1986 can be considered the largest catasrophy of the 20th century. The health state of people living in the polluted areas is still being worsen. The death rate along with the frequency of cyroid gland cancer among children and women has considerably increased. And more than that, the results of this disaster will undoubtedly be shown on future generations because of the aggravated geen pool. In contrast, harnessing of wind, solar and water powers can be beneficial to society causing much less harm to people.

Besides, renewable energy provides not only safety, but also independence for counties’ economies. In essence, being available everywhere, wind turbines are now being installed in most of the European countries making them idpependent from gas imports.

More than that, the problem of oil and gas reserves running out still worries people. Certainly, they are not endless and some day we will need to face up to this fact. However, if we sit hands down waiting for this day to come we will definetely be at a loss to know what to do then. Instead, renewable energy gives us a mean to be prepared.

On the other hand, the dangers of researches for renewable energy resources can’t be neglected. Armenia is still suffering great losses because of the widespread use of water power stations. It causes water pollution and changes the climate as well as the whole ecosystem.

In conclusion, the argument contains several logical flaws that should be taken into account. Furthermore, there is not enough data to proove the allegation. The essay gives a complete overview of the risks involved in both using of nuclear power stations and renewable energy sources.

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