Please evaluate my background

[ackerman80]

Target univs:
Wharton, Sloan, Columbia.

Target Specialization for B-school:
IBD, Private Equity.

Age:27yrs.

GMAT: 750 (V42, Q49) 2nd attempt; 640( V:27, Q:50 ) 1st attempt
GMAT Essays: 5.5

Work Ex:
2 years at Intel, CAD algorithm research, Central Software Unit for all microprocessor projects.

Currently( 1+ yr) at Goldman Sachs, Foreign Exchange technology division.

Education:
Under grad, IIT Bombay, Computer Sc, GPA: 7.5/10.0
Masters, North Carolina State, Computer Sc, GPA: 3.75/4.0

Extra Curricular:
2- year affiliation with National Social Service, chapter of IIT Bombay, which involved 1 person mentor 1 kid for a year. Volunteer work to visit slums, collect educational statistics for various families and help families in need for free tutoring of kids.

Team lead for Goldman Sachs sponsered charity event for "Women In Need" charity organisation.

Volunteer for Katrina Relief Fund Collection for Intel sponsored events.

Volunteer Production Assitant, for theatre group Naatak, in Bay area California,an amateur theatre group focussed on ethnic (mostly Indian theatres)

Orientation Counselor to International Graduate Students at North Carolina state.

Lot of Theatre activities in College involving leadership roles for group for script teams, organisation leads for organisation of on-campus theatre performances by outside professional groups. Hostel Color for achievements in theatrical activities for the hostel.

Appreciate your time and help on the feedback.
thanks.

[GMATbong]

I would suggest you go back to theatre activities. Your school/WE are ok. GMAT is fine. The only thing missing is ExtraCurr.

I am guessing you are also US green card holder? If so, your profile looks ok and you should be able to get in one of the three schools listed. If not, you still have a favorable chance.

[ackerman80]

thanks GMATBong, Goldman unlike Intel sucks away all the time I will try to see if I can get into theatre activities here in NY.
no am not a green card holder. but I still have 3+yrs of h1 left. so i guess that part should be fine?
Any other recommendations to improve the ExtraCurricular, or infact suggestions to highlight the activities done in past. oh well i will tag one more questions: is there some good site with guidance on writing the application essays?
Thanks so much for you help, really appreciate the time and help.

[GMATbong]

Not having a green card put you in a more competitive pool but this is not to say you have to wait till you get your GC before applying.

I think there are sites with sample essays that got people admitted. Just look at them and see. If you are very time constraint like you are now at GS, you might try using an admin consultant. They can't write your essay but at least they serve as a de-facto project manager so you are on track.