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#011. Luck has nothing to do with success.

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Success is built up by hardworking bit by bit, little by little. Many successful people work very hard day by day. Thay have to give a lot of time and energy before being successful. No one can be succsesful with sheer luck. However, if we look at the history, we can see a lot of great inventories and discoveries were partly due to luck.

 

For example, penicillium was discovered by luck. The scientist discovered that a sample he was studying was contaiminated by bacteria. In usual practice, scientists would throw the contaiminated sample away and start the experiment all over again. However, the scientist did not throw that away, instead he studied the sample. He wonder why there were some areas in the sample did not grow mold and some areas did. Finally, he knew that the bacteria in the sample created an antibiotic (he named it penicillium) which could prohibit the growth of mold. He extracted the antibiotic and made it a drug which could cure human diseases. Nowaday, antibiotics are very important drugs. Doctors can use antibiotics to cure many untreatable or deadly diseases.

 

Newton is a great sicentist. He discovered gravity which has changed and reshaped the science of physics. However, his great discovery was due to a very trivial and ordinary event. One day, he was sitting under a tree and suddenly an apple dropped to him. Many people didn't think about the reason why the apple dropped. They thought that it was a common sense that everything would drop to the ground when you throw it up. However, Newton didn't jump to the conclusion without thinking. He wondered and studies the reason of it. He did a lot of experiments and calculations and eventually he concluded that it was due to gravity.

 

Without luck, penicillium may not have been discovered and Newton may not have discovered gravity and the world would be so different without their discoveries. However, we can not conclude that their discoveries were all due to luck. They did not succeed right after the incidents. If they had not spent time and energy to study the reason and if they had not read books and done a lot of researches before. They would not have the knowledge to unveil the secret. We appreciate the above scientists not because of their great discoveries. It is because of their spirit and attitude in working. They work very hard and they would not give up. They would try and try until they solve the problems. So luck only triggered their success and it didn't create their success.

 

 

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Hi, Polygon.

 

It is easy to see that you've given some good thought to what it is that you want to say in your essay. A good rule of thumb to follow when writing these essays is to keep in mind what your readers need. In your essay you should tell them what you are GOING to tell them (introduction), tell them (body), and then tell them what you've TOLD them (conclusion).

 

In your introduction, your point of view is made clear and this is good. You should work on transitional sentences between paragraphs, however. After mentioning "inventories (I think you mean "inventions" and discoveries" in the introduction, you should introduce the examples you use with some kind of transition. Don't start a paragraph with "For example". A stronger transition would be something like, "Luck has had very little to do with the greatest discoveries and inventions in our history. One of the strongest examples of this fact, is the discovery of penicillin." Reconsider all of the sentences between your paragraphs. These act as guideposts for your readers and contribute to the necessary flow of the text.

 

Your concluding paragraph and its intitial sentence is much more successful this way. The conclusion is handled quite well in this essay. There are some small grammatical problems, but they are not as much of a concern as clarity, organization and expression of ideas.

 

I hope this will be of help to you.

Best of luck,

 

TM Staff

 

 

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Hi, Polygon.

 

It is easy to see that you've given some good thought to what it is that you want to say in your essay. A good rule of thumb to follow when writing these essays is to keep in mind what your readers need. In your essay you should tell them what you are GOING to tell them (introduction), tell them (body), and then tell them what you've TOLD them (conclusion).

 

In your introduction, your point of view is made clear and this is good. You should work on transitional sentences between paragraphs, however. After mentioning "inventories (I think you mean "inventions" and discoveries" in the introduction, you should introduce the examples you use with some kind of transition. Don't start a paragraph with "For example". A stronger transition would be something like, "Luck has had very little to do with the greatest discoveries and inventions in our history. One of the strongest examples of this fact, is the discovery of penicillin." Reconsider all of the sentences between your paragraphs. These act as guideposts for your readers and contribute to the necessary flow of the text.

 

Your concluding paragraph and its intitial sentence is much more successful this way. The conclusion is handled quite well in this essay. There are some small grammatical problems, but they are not as much of a concern as clarity, organization and expression of ideas.

 

I hope this will be of help to you.

Best of luck,

 

TM Staff

 

 

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