I will not score it, but this one is ok. According to the topic, in conclusion you mentioned your opinion that "it depends". I would recommend to also explicitly say it in the first paragraph.
Both grammar and spelling are in general ok.
How many points would you give it out of 5?
Some people prefer to work in groups on projects, while other people prefer to work alone. What are the advantages of the each, and which do you prefer? Use details and examples to support your response
The leading managers from all over the world agree that group performance is more effective than average employees’ achievements working alone – this phenomenon is called synergy. However they also consider that teamwork is more difficult and time-wasting. There are some problems related to minor domination and ambiguous responsibility as well. On the other hand, in the most successful organizations collaboration at work is a positive tendency and the result - astounding.
The first and the most important comfort team working provides is variety of alternatives. More brains – more thoughts. Modern teams use a very effective type of generating ideas – brainstorming which is the process of accumulating individual opinions, discussing them and eliminating inappropriate ones. Thus, working process becomes interesting and effective.
More professional can discover more data, hence teamwork provides means of perfect information gathering. But, there might be so much material to be reviewed that it becomes problematic to decipher what is needed and what is not.
Another advantage is more possibility to discuss the solution. Although time is wasted there is still much potentiality of finding the acceptable decision.
Working in groups also have disadvantages that are pluses for individual performance. Some people like managing just themselves, the reason might be a lack of confidence or independent nature, or maybe they do not want to share responsibility. Acting individually needs less time for discussion because no one is arguing with himself.
Another plus is that you are the leader of yourself and there is no chief to influence your decision while working. Unlike to teamwork, individual employee performs without any conflicts among group members for resource allocation.
The exact responsibility inspire workers and push them to try harder. Everyone would like to show their knowledge, skills, professionality or personality characteristics.
I would rather work in a group, but after considering all of the above, optimal working conditions can be found either in groups or alone. That depends on person and situation.
Your essay is good. But you need to improve your essay structure by using "keywords" like "Firstly, Secondly, Hence I conclude that" etc for getting more good score with Computer Grader.
Also more specific examples are missing. You can quote some of real examples in supporting the reasons mentioned.
My score for your essay 3.5 / 5.0
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