If you could change one important thing about your country, what would you change?

[mqblm]

If you could change one thing in your country what thing would you change ?Give reasons to support your answer ; hi here is my essay on this topic ;

There are so many things that i would like to change but the most important to me is the Illiteracy rate which is very high .Since i belong to Pakistan where the percentage of educated people is very low.This is not because people have no access to the institutions instead people are not aware of importance of eduction .In such circumstances , if i could do something i would like to do the following things ;

First,i would like to make schools in every community so that people do not hesitate to send their kids to schools. Because sometimes parents are reluctant to send their children to schools if the schools are away from home.

Second , i would make schools in villages and towns .Because i have observed that in villages children have passion to get education but due to lack of available resources they cannot get education . I would make education free for all .

Third , i would use telecommunication media to support my campaign .As more and more people are aware of my ambition through this media , they might be get motivated .And the day is not far when education will be at every door step.

 

Please check my essay and correct me and give me suggestions to improve my ideas.I ll send more essays on this forum .

[san2612]

If you could change one thing in your country what thing would you change ?Give reasons to support your answer ; hi here is my essay on this topic ;

 

There are so many things that i would like to change but of the most important to me is the illiteracy rate which is very high . Since i belong to Pakistan where the percentage of educated people is very low. This is not because people have no access to the institutions instead people are not aware of importance of eduction . In such circumstances , if i could do something i would like to do the following things ;

 

First,i would like to make schools in every community so that people do not hesitate to send their kids to schools. Because sometimes parents are reluctant to send their children to schools if the schools are away from home.

 

Second , i would make schools in villages and towns .Because i have observed that in villages children have passion to get education but due to lack of available resources they cannot get education . I would make education free for all .

 

Third , i would use telecommunication media to support my campaign .As more and more people are aware of my ambition through this media , they might be get motivated .And the day is not far when education will be at every door step.

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I won’t go into details until you follow those steps:

 

Lengthen your essay by putting more effort in it and doing more reading about the same topic

Write the conclusion

The words in red are spelling mistakes, you can correct them yourself

State the thing you want to change about your country in the opening paragraph. You can change just one thing.

Rewrite and review the essay.

You can write only a few essays before the exam but try to perfect them.

 

Good luck,

Edited March 24, 2010 by san2612

[mqblm]

hi san thanks a lot .I ll keep in mind these things and will send more essays for correction . I never sent any essay on this forum before.And that was my first essay ever.