Billions of thanks! could anyone grade my toefl essay of TPO 4 independent essay?

[Elaine1026]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

In twenty years, there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

My essay:

In mordern life, cars are an indispensable and essential tool for human life. Since its invention, car has altered human's life to a large degreee by facilitating people's work and shortening thier waiting time on the road. However, in twenty years, it is unavoidable that people would tend to drive car less frequently and fewer cars would hit on the road for the following reasons.

In the first place, there is an increasing awareness among people of protecting our only planet and create a more favorable environement for our next generation. However, wasted gases emitted by driving cars are the dominant factor causing the rising temperature worldwide. The worsening air quality and costantly melting polar glaciers are putting people's life and future at risk. Accoring to a survey, fuel gases accounts for 80 percent to global warming and green house effects. Furthermore, it is even changing the currents and waves in ocean, such as the appear of abnormal current of El nino, which damages the agriculture and bring about torrential rain along its route. Therefore, having realized the severe consequences, people would drive less and take the public reansporation.

Second, a series of measures taken by government would boost people's intention to drive less. It is not uncommon that during recent years, several summits aiming at global climate are held, by which president and top officials from a number of nations hope to come up with the solution of slowing or reversing this global warming progress. With large-scale financial investment in public transportation and the aleady prohibitively high oil prices in most cities, people would turn to take subways, buses and taxies. In addition, parking and traffic conjestion are also the big headache for citiznes. Take Beijing for example, for the high housing prices in downtown, large number of people choose to live in uptown. However, if they drive car to work office, traffic jams along their route would take them almost one hour and an half to reach their office, not to menton the high parking and fuel prices and limited parking lot in downtown. Therefore, there are increasing number of people prefer to take subways due to its convenience and low price, leading to shrinking car numbers on the road.

It is undeniable that driving a car could be comforatble and fast in an ideal condition, but with so many realistic problems need to deliberate, people in big cities would choose to drivce less and enjoy the fast public transporation.

To crown it all, I'm of conviction that in twnenty years, there will be less cars hitting on the road for people's increasing awareness to protect environment and government' s policies.

Word Count: 413

[san2612]

In modern life, cars are an indispensable and essential tool for human life. Since its invention, car has altered human's life to a large degree by facilitating people's work and shortening their waiting time on the road. However, in twenty years, it is unavoidable that people would tend to drive car less frequently and fewer cars would hit on the road for the following reasons.

In the first place, there is an increasing awareness among people of protecting our only planet and create a more favorable environment for our next generation. However, wasted gases emitted by driving cars are the dominant factor causing the rising temperature worldwide. The worsening air quality and constantly melting polar glaciers are putting people's present and future life at risk. According to a survey, fuel gases accounts for 80 percent to global warming and green house effects. Furthermore, it is even changing the currents and waves in ocean, such as the appear of abnormal current of El Niño, which damages the agriculture and brings about torrential rain along its route. Therefore, having realized the severe consequences, people would drive less and take the public transportation.

Second, a series of measures taken by government would boost people's intention to drive less. It is not uncommon that during recent years, several summits aiming at global climate are held, by which president and top officials from a number of nations hope to come up with the solution of slowing or reversing this global warming progress. With large-scale financial investment in public transportation and the already prohibitively high oil prices in most cities, people would turn to take subways, buses and taxies. In addition, parking and traffic congestion are also the big headache for citizens. Take Beijing for example, for the high housing prices in downtown, large number of people choose to live in uptown. However, if they drive car to work office, traffic jams along their route would take them almost one hour and an half to reach their office, let alone the high parking and fuel prices and limited parking lot in downtown. Therefore, there is an increasing number of people preferring to take subways due to its convenience and low price, which leads to shrinking car numbers on the road.

It is undeniable that driving a car could be comfortable and fast in an ideal condition, but with so many realistic problems needing to deliberate, people in big cities would choose to drive less and enjoy the fast public transportation.

To crown it all, I am in conviction (in conviction that: strongly believe that sth is true) that in twenty years, there will be less cars hitting on the road for people's increasing awareness to protect environment and government' s policies.

good job!

[Elaine1026]

YOU are so sweet! Thank YOU! Edited May 27, 2010 by Elaine1026

[mps]

TPO 4? is it from possible essay?Where can i find something like this?