Originally posted by nnphuoc
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People living in the twentieth century saw many changes in their lives thanks to technological evolution. These changes occurred not only in offices, factories and universities but also in every household, especially in the way they eat. As a result, food has now become easier to prepare than ever before. On one hand, this change has improved the way people live, but on the other hand, this has devalued the way people feel about their lives.
Nowadays, it takes only half an hour to prepare for dinner and even much less time for breakfast. People who spend most of their time for working may take advantage of this change as a convenience. After an exhausting day of working, they can easily get a simple but nutritious enough meal and not to worry too much about cooking. Also, they may have lunch at a fast food restaurant without considering about their budget instead of asking their wives to prepare sandwiches every morning. Moreover, many food-processing factories have provided their customers with the convenience that they never had before. For example, if a young couple wants to hold a party, they will simply go to the supermarket to purchase all they require and the only thing left to do is to put the processed food into the cooker. The biggest advantage of this change is that the less time it takes for cooking, the more time people may have for entertainment.
However, since a meal is easy to prepare, it makes people feel more separated from one another. For instance, a family which used to have a brunch (breakfast and lunch combined) every Sunday and they spent a lot of time cooking together and as a result everyone felt happy. Yet, with the advance in food processing, the meal becomes less significant than it used to be and people may sometimes feel that they are missing out on something very important in their lives. Therefore, this change could be seen to have devalued some traditions that should not be lost.
In summary, the advance in technology that has brought about changes in the way in which we prepare our meals has had both negative and positive effects. However, in my view, the advantage of this change far outweighs any disadvantage as this change has greatly improved the way people live.