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[biscuit4me]

Please rate and comment my essay task#2 below:

Thank you for helping me, I have to test in the next week.

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We all work or will work in jobs with many different kinds of people. In your opinion, what are some important characteristics of a co-worker (Someone you work closely with)? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why these characteristics are important.
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A co-worker is very important in every workplace. In fact, it is the one of key factors that is used to make the decision about prolonging work. Many people decide to leave their jobs because they are uncomfortable with their colleagues. From my experience, I like to work with an open-mined, optimistic and responsible co-worker.

An open-minded people always accept the new idea and opinion. This characteristic will lead to the innovation or the creative idea which bring many advantages to the company. Conversely, people that are obstinate and restrict only one side always disagree with other people idea. As a result, this kind of people can make the company grow slowly and will be the obstacle of the company development.

Secondly, I like to work with the optimistic people. These people always make the workplace enjoyable. Every problem, in fact, has the two side aspects i.e. bright and dark side. The optimistic people will pinpoint the benefit of the problem. Thus, this way can encourage other people around them to feel about the good things or advantages that they will receive, not only the bad impacts which make them depressed.

Finally, the last quality that the best co-worker must have is responsibility. A responsible people will take care their jobs. They will not procrastinate their works. Therefore, other people’s job will be not affected, and all entire works will be delivered on time. Then, the company will gain trust and credit from their customers. Indeed, whether company is flourish depends on the trust and credit from these customers.

Actually, there are many characteristics that are very important for the colleagues. But for me, if I can choose, I would like to work with the open-minded, optimistic and responsible person. This people will make me work easily and effectively.

[sonson2007]

I think your writting is good. But you need to be more specific in each reason you give..this means more examples and details because I noticed that you are using general statement so much.
I hope this help.

[biscuit4me]

Thank you a lot.
I will add more details and example.