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College and university education should be available to all students or should be available only to good students. Discuss the view. Which view do you agree with. Explain why.

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No one can deny the importance of education. Education help us to gain sufficient knowledge to succeed in life and to live well in this booming world of information and technologies. Education also contributes a lot to the development of a country. However, from my point of view, it is not necessary to let college or university education be opened to all students, in fact, only qualified students should get admission to universities or colleges.

The first reason for my opinion is for the own good of the students. In high schools, students are informed with basic and general knowledge but in colleges or universities, the knowledge will be much more in depth and a lot more difficult to grasp. So if unqualified students still have opportunities to attend universities, they will have to struggle really hard to past tests and exams. And if they fail, the results will be even more detrimental, these students may end up losing faith in themselves or being forced to leave universities in the middle of their study despite all the money, time and effort they have put in it.

Secondly, from my observation, the target of many high school students is getting admission to universities or colleges. If university and college education is available to any students then many of them won't be motivated and won't try their best to study many subjects which will the the foundation for the knowledge that they will study later . And the consequence of that is a lot of students will face more difficulties studying at universities or colleges.

My third reason is that when college or university education be opened to all students, the number of students will increase. We all know that college or university education is very costly so if a country does not have enough fund or resources, an increased number of university students may result in a decline in the quality of education. In this case, both the students and the country will suffer.

Last but not least, a bachelor degree is and important indicator in the job market of many countries, my country is one example. If a large number of applicants have bachelor degrees then it will be harder for recruitment staff to sort out the qualified applicant for a job position. This will also lead to an even more competitive job market.

To sum up, although education is an important part of human life and is the foundation for the prosperity of a country, college and university education should not be available to all students because this may put a lot of pressure on unqualified students as well as on the education system and on the job market.