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In the lecture, the professor made several points about the banning of smoking. The professor argues that banning smoking will not hamper the right of the smokers rather it will protect the rights of non-smokers. However, the reading contends that banning smoking in open places and in the hotels and bars will hamper the rights of the smokers who pay lots of money to the government as tax, and to support this contention the reading cites several examples. The professor's lecture casts doubt on the reading by using several points and examples that are antithetical to the reading's theory that smoking will hamper the rights of the smokers.

First of all, one of the theories that the reading described is that it takes 20 years for direct smokers develop cancerous malignancy, and for the indirect smokers it takes 40 years. So, reading concludes that the statistics are suspected. However, the professor refutes this theory stating that cancer is not the only disease that is caused for smoking, but there are other diseases such as hear attack. After quitting smoking about 40% chance of heart attack reduces.
Additionally, the reading claims that banning smoking in bars and clubs will reduce the revenue those businesses dramatically. Nevertheless, the professor disagrees with this claims uttering that there will another places for the smokers to smoke such as home, open places, and those businesses can actually increase their revenues by attracting non-smokers to their bars. So, the reading is untenable.

Finally, the reading holds that the smokers pay lots of money as tax to the government; therefore, to ban means to betray with them. Still, the professor opposes this holding saying that banning smoking is not hampering the rights of smokers rather it is the protection of the rights of non-smokers.

In sum, from the discussion above it can be easily concluded that the reading has failed to consider some factors on the basis of which the professor criticizes the reading.

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