#019: Should governments spend more money on

[TM Staff]

Originally posted by matek

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.
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Transportation is an very important factor in every country's development. It encourages other economic aspects to develope . Investment in transportation is always necessary in every nation, but the question is how to invest efficiently. Should the government spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? The answer is ofcouse, depends on the situation of each country. In my country, many studies have shown that the latter one is more efficient.

My country is quite big, with many rivers and mountains, which are great disadvantages for building roads, and bridges. On the other hand, the water trasportation, and the railway systems throughout the country are already very good for delivering goods, and traveling. The investment on roads and highways seem to be unnecessary and costly.

On the contrast, the population is densely concentrated on big cities, where the traffic problems are getting more and more complicated. Traffic jams take so much time from people. The problem is everyone drive their own motorbike to work, and the population keeps increasing. Besides,the puclic trasportation is very undeveloped, there are few bus routes in the cities. If we can sovle this problem, we can save time for everyone, and that means we are saving money. The solution seems to be the improving of puclic trasportation. It's not expensive, and may solve the problem efficiently.

Depending on the necessity of the developement of transportation in cities, the government should spend more money on public transportation. Improving roads and highways at the moment is unnecessary and very costly.

Hi, Matek.

The focus of your essay is a little unclear. It is always best to state your opinion simply and clearly and to use your points to support that opinion.

In the introduction of your essay, you state that the answer to the question depends on the situation of each country and then you go on to describe your own country's situation. In doing this you are not actually answering the question as it was asked. The reader is looking for your opinion, one way or the other.

The basic organization of your essay with the standard introduction, body and conclusion looks good, but you need to make sure that the body consists of at least two clear points supporting your thesis---not just examples.

The examples you do give of your own country's situation are good, but they need to be tied to the main point. In other words, if you state that public transportation is the best way to spend government money, then you can use the example of how well this system works in your country.

I hope this is of help to you.

Best of luck,

TM Staff

[TM Staff]

Originally posted by rukpong

Roads or highways have long been an important and necessary way of transportation for a long time.However, governments tese days should spend more money on public transportation.Public transportation creates less troubles while it is also more durable and enonomical.

Public transportaion creates less troubles than roads or high ways.Public transportation does not cause traffic jam, demand of cars in the market, or pollution problems while roads and high ways generate these problems more and more.

Durability of the public transportaion makes it superior to roads or high way.Highway or roads require more maintaintance cost more frequent than trains or buses.Train or buses do not disturb people to use them whereas orads or highway does.For example, if the road is under maintainance, noone will not be able to use the road meanwhile if the buses are under maintainance, the new buses will do the job instead of them.

Furthermore, Public transportation is more economical.It does not require as much fuel as roads and highway do because everyone who uses public transportation shares the bill.This also helps the country to save money as the demand for importing oil reduces while we use more public transportaion.

Meanwhile spending more money on roads or highways is necessary, it seems , to some extent, like a short term problem solving method due to the fact that those demand in roads or highways is usually resulted from the lack of good performance of public transportation.Therefore, I’d recommend the government spend more money on public transportation.

Hi, Rukpong.

Your essay is well-organized and it is easy to follow your opinion on the question asked through to its conclusion.

I would recommend, however, that you use stronger or more specific examples to support your main points. Instead of just mentioning some of the problems that you do in your essay, you should try to include either personal examples that you have seen or heard of or concrete examples. This will strengthen your argument for government money being spent on public transportation.

In addition to this, you should rethink your conclusion. The conclusion of your essay carries a lot of weight in determining whether or not you will be able to convince the readers of your point of view and even, if they will remember what you've said. Use the conclusion to restate your point of view and main points in a clear, concise paragraph.

(As a side note to this particular conclusion: I think that the word you are looking for is "although" instead of "meanwhile" to convey your opinion clearly. )

I hope this will be of help to you.

Best of luck,

TM Staff

[TM Staff]

Originally posted by mayalisa

comment my essay please......[heartbeat]

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

There are 2 choices of traveling by vehicles. The first one is traveling by private transportation such as cars and motorcycles. The second one is traveling by public transportation such as buses, trains and subways. In my opinion, the governments should sponsor and spend more money on improving public transportation because it will decrease the problems of traffic jam, air pollution and economic failed.

I am a Thai living in Bangkok, the capital city of Thailand. Bangkok is notorious for the traffic jam and the air pollution caused by the discharges from many cars on roads and highways. Consequently, money people pay for importable cars including oils is so high that brings the inside money went out to abroad. These problems increase continually because of the increment of personal cars, the low standard of controlling the smoke from exhaust pipes and the limited public transportation. If the public transportation was improved, citizen will turn to travel by buses, sky trains or subways higher. As we know, at the same distances, traveling by sky trains is faster than by cars so, traveling by sky trains is a better option. After the public transportation is more popular, the increment of private cars will be decreased resulting in the flowing traffic and cleaner atmosphere. Additionally, the money paid for importable cars and oils is reduced that will make better economic growth.

Until now, Thai government has been spending money on improving more public transportation for example, the latest success one is sky train called “BTS”. I have found that it helped people comfortably travel in crowded areas. And in the next couple years, Thailand will have a subway which is under constructed now.

In conclusion, governments should spend more money on improving public transportation because it will decrease the problems of traffic jam, air pollution and economic failed.

Hi, Mayalisa.

The introduction of your essay is quite good. It gives your readers a clear understanding of your opinion and your main points are well-stated. These are the points that the readers are going to be following as a kind of guide through the next part of your essay (the body).

However, the body of the work needs to be reworked in order for this to be a successful essay. The first paragraph attempts to include all three of your main points when it should only be dealing with one. Each main point in the body should be assigned one paragraph to address. Also, avoid using an entire paragraph on one "example" as you have done in the fourth paragraph. Tie all your examples in with the appropriate points in their respective paragraphs.

I hope this will be of help to you.

Best of luck,

TM Staff

[mayalisa]

Thank you very much TM staff for your kindness. What score should I get from my essay?

[joyyoj]

Hi There!! PLEASE PLEASE All frank comments are welcomed here I desperately need some comments

Public transportation, such as buses, trains and subways, is considered significant in many aspects. However, in my view, improving roads and highways is one of the significant problems that governments should be taking care of. Therefore, I strongly support governments to spend money on developing roads and highways for three main reasons.

To begin with, these days most people unavoidably use roads and highways to commute everyday. Thus, roads and highways should be safe and secure. Several roads and highways in many cities are missing road signs, which are vital to guide them to their directions faster. Moreover, some road signs are out of order, which also lead people to the wrong directions.

Next, many tragic accidents occurs mostly on the roads and highways. For example, people died from car accidents are sometimes far more than ones who died from cancer, especially in the rainy days. Several accidents caused by impaired roads and highways, which make the cars are out of control and finally cause another terrible accident.

Last but not least, roads and highways are the place where many severe crimes take place, such as rap and robbery. Most criminals usually choose dark and far-sighted place to attack their victims. Thus, the roads and highways that are out of light and far away from the city are the best place for crimes.

In short, improving roads and highways should be the primary concern for government because damaged roads and highways can lead to tremendous problems. For example, losing directions, car accident and crimes. Therefore I strongly believe that governments should spend more money on improving roads and highways.

[lodger]

Hi, everyone.
Please read and comment on my essay.
Thanks in advance.

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.


The money poured into buliding roads, especially expressways, has been one of the big political issues in Japan during recent long recession and many are regarding it as a waste of budgets. I also strongly assert that the government should spend more money improving public transport. I'll expand on this below.

First of all, the expressways constructed in Japan since the 1970's have created and accumulated a large amount of deficits because my nation anticipated gaining revenue by taxing people driving through them and making ends meet, but the number of those using them has far less reached the expectation of the government. Nevertheless, the government has not changed their program to build more expressways and the debits are steadily added.

Second, there are many counrtysides lacking public transports. I watched on TV about people who live in an undefinite small town, troubled in going to stores, hospitals, stations, and sometimes even to school because of not having access to public buses, the coming around of which the local government had to do away with for the lack of budgets. I found It very ironical that while the government has used fabulous money to unnecessary roads, it has more and more cut down on budgets for the municipals in thin-populated areas.

Third, the construction of roads ever before has been always related to some politicians' profits, especially to what is called "dorozoku" (in Japanese for politicos subsided by particular building companies for favoring them. This is a most obnoxious known political abuse in Japan that many Japanese think it should be eliminated.

To summerize, the building of more expressways means our nation's more deficits and political corruption, while the improvement of public tranportation is a necessity for people living in the countryside. I, therefore, believe that the government should spend more money improving public transportation and farthermore, that this architecture in which the establishment only gain profits, whereas people on the fringe suffer from it must be disappeared.

[jane1126]

Please give me frank adivc about my essay. Thank you!


Traffic jam is a general problem in today¡¯s city. Then how to solve it? Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways or on improving public transportation? In my opinion, that depends on the cause of the traffic jams. In different cities, the choice should be different

In some large cities, there are millions of people. Even though many roads and highways have been built, traffic jam is still severe. That is because more and more people have their own cars and the increase of roads and highways cannot meet the increase of cars. So the governments of these cities should spend more money on improving public transportation. If the public transportation becomes convenient and comfortable, many people will give up driving their own car, after all public transportation is cheaper and they do not need to think where to park their cars. With more people taking public transportation, the cars on roads and highways will be reduced and traffic will become unblocked. And the decrease of cars can benefit the environments of these cities. Their atmosphere will become fresh.

On the other hand, in many small cities, their roads are very narrow and even there are not any highways. Though the number of cars is far less than large cities, traffic jams happen frequently. So the key of solving their traffic problem is improving roads and highways. When the roads become broad and many highways have been built, traffic jams will never happen.

All in all, to solve each problem, we should find the cause of the problem first, and then choose the best way to solve it. Traffic problems are same, so the governments of different cities should make the different choice.

[jane1126]

Please give me some advice about my essay . I need it so much. Thank you!

[rukpong]

Thank you so much for your comment.
I've just finish TWE course at Princeton Review in Bangkok.
The instructor of TWE suggests the similiar things as you did.
My weak point is on the lack of real world examples which help strengthen the essay.
Thx again!!

[sheju]

hi can someome rate my essay

Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer
Basic needs really important in mans life one would not be able to survive without them,on the other hand peole can survive in this world without the use of computers and technology which draws in a great deal of money.Every day needs are essentail to people that man will not be able to survive without them.
Backbone of any country are counted on the well being of their citizens and not on the growth of the computer and technology , buying a computer and the use of a computer is a very expensive thing to be considered in many peoples lifes.Governments spend a lot of money of the expensive technology and computers they hardly have money left behind to think about supplying the basic needs which are very essential.As a result people suffer to a great extent and this forces them to go to level of poverty.
Goverments spend unlimited amount of money to up grade the technology forgetting to provide the basic needs like pure water and shelter to its own citizens .Governments have federal funding for launching of satellites but they really dont care about the health needs of their own country people not everyone will be able to afford insurance.There are still peole living in this world who are not able to get pure water to their homes but still the goverment has numeruos vast growing nuclear weapons that cost billions .
Suffering people are the common man and not anyone else they stirve in poverty and hunger and sometimes taken care by charities and sometimes turn in to begars for food in streets and aslo as burglars to find money and food .When government fails to meets the basic needs it not only creates poverty but also dangerous people who can harm the society by diffrent means
In conclusion I think government should make an endless effort to provide basic needs . This should be their utmost priority and not in improving technology or buying computers . They should also realise happy people make the country happy and prosperous but not the computers and technology.