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[kenneth]

some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. other people believe that the best way of learnig about life is though persoanl experience. I strongly believe that the best way of learning about life can only be approched though personal experience.


there is a prominent reason for why people should learning about life through personal experience rather than by listening to family. In our lifetime, there is only one thing most important to anyone which is independence. people need to have their own idea rathan than just listen to other people advice. Because sometimes you have to do thing by hand and then you can experiece it and use your own insight and feeling to decide whether or not you should do something. It is just like what you was a little bady, when your family tells the fire is hot but without touch it by your own hands you will never understand the true definetion of hot. Once your experice by yourself, the impression will inprint in your brain and makes you never forget about it.

Also, there is another important reason to suppurt why we should learning about life through personal experince and not by listening to family. It is true that family may have more life experiences than you and their advice can help you in some circumstances. But It is fact, that the family not always tells your the truth about life, or they sometime will tell you someting purposely and even have their own bias or intentions. Thus, listen to family is not a really good idea. In the oppposite, if you can keep try things by your own experience you will obtain the first hand information and also figure out if it is fit for your or not at all. It is basicly talking about to oberseve the world and learn about life in a objective way which is the way of finding the truth. For instance, your family may be have hate or love someting by their own opion or influenced by their time background, but apply them to your life will not fit your personal need and perticulirity. Just like your parent tells you not to do things like banjee and sky skate becaue they thinks they are dangous, but those activities may help your gain your courage and make your to get rid of your bad quality. Therefore, it is crucial to try and learn things by your own experiece.

In sort, learning about life should through personal experiece rather than just listening to your family. When you experiencing and learning about life by your own, you will find the truth by your own and not infuenced by other people's bias and intention.

[awhig]

Rating : 4.0
Comments:
1. I see improvement as regards to your previous submission.
2. Marks are deducted on account of punctuation marks, non-existent words like "bady" and typo errors.
3. First letter of begining sentence must be a capital letter.
4. Go On..........

[kenneth]

hi, awhig

i am really appreciate your help, and i will keep practicing my writhing.

[dexie",)]

the content is good practice writing correct spellings though and use proper punctuations...