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    Co-education or Single-sex education Rate my essay

    Nowadays, more and more people have noticed the phenomena that girls have been overtaking boys. The proportion of boys going to colleges is becoming smaller and smaller. Girls have been seeing doing better in different levels of the school. Therefore, a question being raised by the public is that between co-education and single-sex education, which will benefit our children more? As a teacher and parent, I strongly believe that the latter is a good choice. Gender-based classes can improve our children’s academic achievement through proper approaches suitable for their learning styles, foster better behaviors through promotion of role models and encourage them to explore who they truly are.



    As everyone acknowledges that each person has his own learning style, the learning style between boys and girls is not an exception, they are every different due to their physical and metal development. The development of boys’ reading ability is slower than girls’. Boys tend to be more active than girls. When boys know the answer they can’t wait to shout it out, in stead of girls would rather just understand and know the reason. The uneven development attributes to their different learning styles. For the better achievement, separating girls and boys to adapt approaches that fit their learning styles is the best way we can do. For example, in my grade one classroom, it seems like a disaster for boys to sit down to read, even the story they loved to listen. To girls, reading is such a relax thing to do. Both sides can’t have what they need the most, because I have to stay in the middle to look after each side obtain some but not too much. On the other hand, single-sex class using proper methods can provide what the student need most, and help them to achieve their potential.



    Furthermore, in single-sex classes, girls will have female teachers and boys own male teachers s for their core courses. To students, teachers are more than just teach their knowledge; they are role models of students. When I was in high school, many girls were shied away from physics, they were held back by the social expectations that girls are not good at science. But, my physics teacher was a female. Her successful career and classes had greatly encouraged me to pursue the higher education. The impact of role models in student’s life can never be under stated. The single-sex class can promote and reinforce this impact. Through their teachers, the students can know better what they are expecting to do and who they want to be. The better behaviors will be shaped by observing their role models having same gender.



    When students become teenagers, they care more about their images than their test scores. In co- education classrooms girls worry that they are not going to be invited to the right parties if they speak up too much. Boys try to draw attention from opposite gender even things are stupid. While in single-sex classes, the situation is far more simple. Students don’t have to pay too much attention about if they are popular, boys can play flute without worrying being called geeks. And girls can be clever as they want. They can explore who they want to be freely.



    In a nut shell, single-sex education has advantages that co-education can’t reach. Single-sex class provides better circumstance that teachers can tailor their teaching to suit students’ learning styles, improve students’ academic performance and develop conductive skills and personalities.


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    Re: Co-education or Single-sex education Rate my essay

    Quote Originally Posted by maisie
    Nowadays, more and more people have noticed the phenomena that girls have been overtaking boys. The proportion of boys going to colleges is becoming smaller and smaller. Girls have been seeing doing better in different levels of the school. Therefore, a question being raised by the public is that between co-education and single-sex education, which will benefit our children more? As a teacher and parent, I strongly believe that the latter is a good choice. Gender-based classes can improve our children’s academic achievement through proper approaches suitable for their learning styles, foster better behaviors through promotion of role models and encourage them to explore who they truly are.
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    As everyone acknowledges that each person has his own learning style, the learning style between boys and girls is not an exception, they are every different due to their physical and metal development. The development of boys’ reading ability is slower than girls’. Boys tend to be more active than girls. When boys know the answer they can’t wait to shout it out, in stead of girls would rather just understand and know the reason. The uneven development attributes to their different learning styles. For the better achievement, separating girls and boys to adapt approaches that fit their learning styles is the best way we can do. For example, in my grade one classroom, it seems like a disaster for boys to sit down to read, even the story they loved to listen. To girls, reading is such a relax thing to do. Both sides can’t have what they need the most, because I have to stay in the middle to look after each side obtain some but not too much. On the other hand, single-sex class using proper methods can provide what the student need most, and help them to achieve their potential.
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    Furthermore, in single-sex classes, girls will have female teachers and boys own male teachers s for their core courses. To students, teachers are more than just teach their knowledge; they are role models of students. When I was in high school, many girls were shied away from physics, they were held back by the social expectations that girls are not good at science. But, my physics teacher was a female. Her successful career and classes had greatly encouraged me to pursue the higher education. The impact of role models in student’s life can never be under stated. The single-sex class can promote and reinforce this impact. Through their teachers, the students can know better what they are expecting to do and who they want to be. The better behaviors will be shaped by observing their role models having same gender.
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    When students become teenagers, they care more about their images than their test scores. In co- education classrooms girls worry that they are not going to be invited to the right parties if they speak up too much. Boys try to draw attention from opposite gender even things are stupid. [Strong tone used] While in single-sex classes, the situation is far more simple. Students don’t have to pay too much attention about if they are popular, boys can play flute without worrying being called geeks. And girls can be clever as they want. They can explore who they want to be freely.
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    In a nut shell, single-sex education has advantages that co-education can’t reach. Single-sex class provides better circumstance that teachers can tailor their teaching to suit students’ learning styles, improve students’ academic performance and develop conductive skills and personalities.

    Good Topic chosen for writing.

    Score: 4.5
    1. Points are supported well.
    2. Strong tone used at some places.


    Mam, if your idea is implemented I will oppose it .
    (Though it has nothing to do with deducting your marks)

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    Re: Co-education or Single-sex education Rate my essay

    Thank you very much. the score you gave is just right. I tooke TOEFL test in Dec. TWE is 4.5. But I need 6.0 to get into the school I want. How can I IMPROVE IT?


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    Re: Co-education or Single-sex education Rate my essay

    Generally , in such topics, you should have unbiased views. Probably your previous rater for the actual test was a male :-) . As I indicated,you used a strong tone against opposite sex members.(Highlihted in bold) . Never do such thing plus be apolitical. Grammar and construction are integral parts of a good essay.Be creative in order to hit the shots.

    In other words, generally you have to agree with the opic,though it is not neccessary though.

    Most important thing is how well coordinated your points are and how strongly do they support your stand.

    Refer to previous posts for sample essays and ratings.You will get an idea of how to improve writing.

    Hope this helps you. :-)

    (Infact you can have your essays rated by others too,if you are not convinced.)

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    Re: Co-education or Single-sex education Rate my essay

    Quote Originally Posted by awhig
    Generally , in such topics, you should have unbiased views. Probably your previous rater for the actual test was a male :-) . As I indicated,you used a strong tone against opposite sex members.(Highlihted in bold) . Never do such thing plus be apolitical. Grammar and construction are integral parts of a good essay.Be creative in order to hit the shots.

    In other words, generally you have to agree with the opic,though it is not neccessary though.

    Most important thing is how well coordinated your points are and how strongly do they support your stand.

    Refer to previous posts for sample essays and ratings.You will get an idea of how to improve writing.

    Hope this helps you. :-)

    (Infact you can have your essays rated by others too,if you are not convinced.)
    I think what you mean is that the tone must be neutral. do not use some radical words. I will try to avoid it.

    what is good grammar and struction? what I felt was don't make grammar mistakes and organize your ideas clearly. Can you give me more details or mabey some exaples.

    you said I usually have to agree the topics, does that mean I the angle I chose is not right? I uaually choose whatever is easy to write. What about the topic to choose one from two options.

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    Re: Co-education or Single-sex education Rate my essay

    you said I usually have to agree the topics, does that mean I the angle I chose is not right? I uaually choose whatever is easy to write. What about the topic to choose one from two options.
    That is why I said "Generally", instead of "Every". If you write against topic, no harm , but points should be strong.

    Example: Consider "Death is bad"...........now 99% will write in favour of it.Suppose, you don't support the idea, what will you write?

    Here you need something that is exceptional and convincing to reader to change his mind. If you write " Death is not bad" because every body dies and is natural, yeah ofcourse, but a better point would be " Death is good" for those who are suffering.
    Example: For brain dead persons like or those who live in utter penury , it is good.It means end of sufferings.Think of like this. This point has an appeal and reader won't differ on this.

    BTW Where are you from? and what do you teach?

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    I am an immigrant in Canada. I don't know why you ask me what I TEACH. I was a teacher in my country. I want get into it in Canada.

    By the way, you mean my points are not convicing. or mabey I should rewrite it on an oppsite side?

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    I am not opposing your stand. It is your view . I was giving you example to question posed by you in your previous post.

    I was just curious to know what subject did you teach? If you are not interested, it is OK with me.

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    I taught English and want to be a ESL teacher.

    I mean what I wrote probably is not my views. It is just easyer to generate ideas and write. My question is whether my points are convicing

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    By the way Thank you again. Where are you?

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