freeze Posted July 6, 2005 Share Posted July 6, 2005 Some people pay money for the things they want or need. Other people trade products or goods for what they need. Compare the advantages of these two ways of obtaining things. Which way do you prefer? Explain why. Trading can be done in many ways ,some people prefer to trade products or goods and this is called barter system.Some people prefer to do all the transactions through money.As we discuss the advantages of bot the systems ,I would prefer trading through money. First ,let us discuss the advantages of the barter system .The barter system can be dated backto the ancient times ,when the money system was non existant .People exchanged goods for other goods or services,they did'nt have.This system helped build mutual co-operation and understanding between the people .It also made the people dependent on each other for their needs and thus helped in sustaining larger communities. Secondly as the the trade grew far and wide it become more necessary to use money instead of goods.With the progress of mankind,the useof money also progressed.Nowadays with cedit card,debit cards,checks and internet banking the use of money for fulfilling our need is become much easier.The convieniece of the paper money and its common usage has established a global economy for the whole world. Thus in conclusion,the modern world in which we live is more adept with the usage of paper money and made the life much easier . Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
buzz123vn Posted July 7, 2005 Share Posted July 7, 2005 Hi, I think this essay can be 4.0. Next time of writing other essay, you should put a stronger concerning about the sentences's structure (ex: the position of commas and point in a sentence). Starring at thi sentence "People exchanged goods for other goods or services,they did'nt have.", you can easy realize that a linking work is lacked after the comma. Buzz Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LouisLin Posted July 7, 2005 Share Posted July 7, 2005 It is a nice essay, few structural and grammatical errors and addressing the topic task efficiently. I guess this essay will socre 5.0. If you have spare time, try to make your conclusion a little bit big. Some people pay money for the things they want or need. Other people trade products or goods for what they need. Compare the advantages of these two ways of obtaining things. Which way do you prefer? Explain why. Trading can be done in many ways ,some people prefer to trade products or goods and this is called barter system while the other[.Some] people prefer to do all the transactions through money.[As we discuss]After compared the advantages of the both [the] systems ,I would prefer trading through money. [good start] At first[First] ,let us discuss the advantages of the barter system .The barter system can be dated back to the ancient times ,when the money system was non existe[a]nt .People exchanged goods for other goods or services[,]which they didn't[did'nt] have.This system helped build mutual co-operation and understanding between the people .It also made the people depend[dependent] on each other for their needs and thus helped sustain[in sustaining] larger communities. [good point] Secondly, as the the trade grew far and wide, it become more necessary to use money instead of goods.With the progress of mankind, the useof money also progressed.Nowadays with cedit card,debit cards,checks and internet banking, the use of money for fulfilling our need is become much easier.The convieniece of the banknote[paper money] and its common usage has established a global economy for the whole world. [good point] Thus in conclusion,the modern world where[in which] we live is more adept with the usage of paper money and made our[the] life much easier . [nice ending] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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