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Topic#17 Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher.Others think it is always better to have a teacher.Which do you prefer?

 

 

Learning is a never-ending process. From the day we were born till the death,we will learn new things at each and every step. But to learn good things in an easy way teacher is definitely necessary.

 

 

In my native country,teacher is regarded as 'Guru' having highest position in this society. Everybody respects 'Guru'. Teacher is considered to be the next to our mother. In olden days when a child turns 5 he is sent to Guru's place and when he becomes 21, he excels in every field with the blessings of a teacher. If we turn the pages of a history we find so many examples of great person like Eklavya, Chhatrapati Shivaji etc...who became famous with the help of their teachers.

 

 

Learning is surely a complex process. It takes lots of time,patience and pains to learn new things. But yes when these new things are taught our teachers,the process becomes enjoyable. Imagine the condition of a student learning Calculus of its own!! Moreover when we try to learn some difficult things of our own we may loose our patience and leaving it unlearned. So teachers play important role in moulding our life.With the help of teacher we can learn more things with less time.

 

 

 

Teacher is specilaized in his subjects so not only we get knowledge but also an opportunity to learn something from his experience and life. Teacher also gives us tricks and techniques which might not be possible for us to develop it by ourselves.

 

 

So in light of all these thoughts it is always better to learn under the shadow of a teacher showing us a way to life and guiding us. Teacher is the only person filling life into dull and complicated process.

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Topic#17 Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher.Others think it is always better to have a teacher.Which do you prefer?

 

 

Learning is a never-ending process. From the day we were born till the death,we will learn new things at each and every step. But to learn good things in an easy way teacher is definitely necessary.

GOOD INTRO, CLEAR.

 

 

In my native country,[OH,PLEASE,MAKEAGAPAFTERCOMMA]teacher is regarded as 'Guru' having highest position in this society. Everybody respects 'Guru'. Teacher is considered to be the next to our mother. In olden days when a child turns 5 he is [uSED TO BE SENT OR TURNED]sent to Guru's place and when he becomes[iN OLDEN DAYS HE BECAME] 21, he excels [iN OLDEN DAYS? MAYBE FROM OLDEN DAYS + PERFECT] in every field with the blessings of a teacher. If we turn the pages of a history we find so many examples of great person [PEOPLE] like Eklavya, Chhatrapati Shivaji etc...who became famous with the help of their teachers.

YOU KNOW, I GOT TO KNOW ABOUT GURUES BUT I COULD'T FIND THE ANSWES TO THE TOPIC. OK, GURUES ARE RESPECTABLE, BUT WHY?, BUT NOT FOR THE SUBJECT. DEFINITELY OUT OF THE SUBJECT

 

Learning is surely a complex process. It takes lots of time,[]patience and pains to learn new things. But yes [WHAT YES?] when these new things are taught [bY] our teachers,[]the process becomes enjoyable. Imagine the condition of a student learning Calculus of its own!! Moreover[,] when we try to learn some difficult things of our own we may loose our patience and leavE [ing] it unlearned. So teachers play important role in moulding our life.[]With the help of A teacher we can learn more things with less time.

OK, GOOD ARGUMENST, NICE PARA

 

 

Teacher is specilaized in his subjects so not only [sO WE NOT ONLY GET ] we get knowledge but also an opportunity to learn something from his experience and life. Teacher also gives us tricks and techniques which might not be possible for us to develop it [by] ourselves.

SO GOOD, YOU SHOULD DEVELOP THIS IDEA

 

 

So in light of all these thoughts it is always better to learn under the shadow of a teacher showing us a way to life and guiding us. Teacher is the only person filling life into dull and complicated process.

 

ok, maybe 4 as you have intro, conc + 2 good para of arguments.

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Hey dipalsoni,

 

Its a good essay but I think you should add 1-2 more lines in your first and , second last and last para as they look quite small. And one more thing: hadn't eklayva developed the skills on his own, keeping Dronacharya as an idol???...It was only when he had mastered the art by practicing, did he approach him...(Thats what i know)

 

Ziyod has given a good evaluation of your essay. I think you would get 4.5-5.

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Topic#17 Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher.Others think it is always better to have a teacher.Which do you prefer?

 

 

Learning is a never-ending process. From the day we were born till the death,we will learn new things at each and every step. But to learn good things in an easy way teacher is definitely necessary.

 

Below para away from the center point, you can make a point here reducing the introduction.

In my native country,teacher is regarded as 'Guru' having highest position in this society. Everybody respects 'Guru'. Teacher is considered to be the next to our mother. In olden days when a child turns 5 he(he/she) is sent to Guru's place and when he becomes 21, he excels in every field with the blessings of a teacher. (grammar error with if clause) If we turn the pages of a history we find so many examples of great personS like Eklavya, Chhatrapati Shivaji etc... (do not use 'etc' '...' errros) who became famous with the help of their teachers.

 

 

Learning is surely a complex process. It takes lots of time,patience (require space before patience) and pains(singular better) to learn new things. But yes when these new things are taught our teachers,the process becomes enjoyable. Imagine the condition of a student learning Calculus of its (his/ her)own!! Moreover when we try to learn some difficult things of our own we may loose our patience and leaving it unlearned. So teachers play important role in moulding our life.With the help of teacher we can learn more things with less time.

 

 

 

Teacher is specilaized in his subjects so not only we get knowledge but also an opportunity to learn something from his experience and life. Teacher also gives us tricks and techniques which might not be possible for us to develop it (plural required) by ourselves.

 

 

So(requires comma) in light of all these thoughts it is always better to learn under the shadow of a teacher showing us a way to life and guiding us. Teacher is the only person filling life into dull and complicated process.

 

Hope, this review helps you a lot.

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