mi0000 Posted June 19, 2006 Share Posted June 19, 2006 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Parents experience life with their children from the beginning of their lives. Hence, they have taught their children many lessons. They are definitely the first teachers of their children but they are not the best teachers. Firstly, parents are closest to their children so it’s difficult to teach their children strictly. For example, it’s time to do homework but their children don’t want to do so. They may wheedle their parents into letting them do it later. Parents always pamper their children so they permit them to do homework later. This increasingly spoils their children. Secondly, parents constantly shape their children interests to be similar to theirs. This makes their children difficult to develop their potential ability. For example, if the parents like music they may want their children to attend music class. Likewise, if the parents like art they may let their children attend art class. However, what if their children are interested in science? Last but not least, because of the differences of generation, parents’ points of view are somewhat narrower than their children’s. For example, their children want to go to some university which is far form their hometown in order to have more experience in live. In contrary, parents prefer their children to attend to university which is near their hometown because they think it is unsafe for them to live far form family. In conclusion, parents might be the good teachers but they are not the best ones. They can’t teach the children strictly, always tend to shape their interests and have the different points of view with their children. Fortunately, we have various teachers during our lives. Therefore, we can learn a lot from them. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ish Posted June 20, 2006 Share Posted June 20, 2006 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Parents experience life with their children from the beginning of their lives. Hence, they have taught their children many lessons. They are definitely the first teachers of their children but they are not the best teachers. you make a very good point, but your sentence structure can improve. the first statement, especially. modify it. Firstly, parents are closest to their children so it’s difficult to teach their children strictly. For example, it’s time to do homework but their children don’t want to do so. They may wheedle their parents into letting them do it later. Parents always pamper their children so they permit them to do homework later. This increasingly spoils their children. good point, about teh degree of closeness. but maybe you could have thought of a stronger example than homework? Secondly, parents constantly shape their children interests to be similar to theirs. This makes their children difficult to develop their potential ability.[makes it difficult for the children to...] For example, if the parents like music they may want their children to attend music class. Likewise, if the parents like art they may let[want] their children attend art class. However, what if their children are interested in science? good point, again. Last but not least, because of the differences of generation, parents’ points of view are somewhat narrower than their children’s. For example, their children want to go to some university which is far form their hometown in order to have more experience in live.[cut this] In contrary, parents prefer their children to attend to university which is near their hometown because they think it is unsafe for them to live far form family. okay. In conclusion, parents might be the good teachers but they are not the best ones. They can’t teach the children strictly, always tend to shape their interests and have the different points of view with their children. Fortunately, we have various teachers during our lives. Therefore, we can learn a lot from them. not a bad effort. the strongest thing that strikes me about your work is that you seem to be very rigid in your ideas. it might be a good idea to present your views a bit more moderately. and improve your sentence constructions. :) keep practising and good luck! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
mi0000 Posted June 21, 2006 Author Share Posted June 21, 2006 Thanks Ish! I will try harder. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vertical_horizon Posted June 23, 2006 Share Posted June 23, 2006 Yes I partially agree with Ish about the above comments of his. Yours is quite a good essay to me. You are good at grammar but yes, as Ish pointed out, should be more flexible and creative in phrasing and wording. The ideas are valid at least to me. But I don't think that this was too rigid for you to have written like that. As long as your reasons and examples are persuasive, being firm on your opinion is perfectly fine. A 5.0/6.0 from me. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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