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awhig
10-23-2004, 07:31 AM
TOPIC :The following appeared in the editorial section of a newsmagazine.

"Some states are creating new laws that restrict the use of handheld cell phones by drivers of automobiles. Such legislation, however, is sheer folly.

Although some people with cell phones undoubtedly cause problems on the road, including serious accidents, the majority do not. Besides, problems

are also caused by drivers who are distracted by any number of other activities, from listening to the radio to disciplining children. Since there is no need

to pass legislation restricting these and other such activities, it follows that there is no need to restrict people's freedom to use a device that they find

convenient—or helpful in emergencies."


ESSAY: Presented argument prohibits the passing of law that restrict drivers to use mobile phones while driving. The argument lacks weight in convincing its stated presumption due to a number of fallacies present in it. The drivers are most distracted using mobile phones than listening to radio programs or disciplining children. This can be elaborated in following points.



As said, mobile phones are the biggest sources of distracters .For example, a veteran driver is rendered to drive with one hand only because he uses his other hand to hold mobile set for talking. Therefore, efficiency gets down by fifty percent while vulnerability of accident shoots up by fifty percent. The symmetry of holding steering gets lost and so is the control on vehicle. This results in accident or near accident when driver is forced to take quick decisions while driving at good speed.



A recent research shows that prolonged usage of mobile phones can lead to hearing loss, loss of memory or extreme anxiety in acute cases. This all lead to loss of concentration and inability to think. Thus it strongly supports laws to restrict the use of mobile phones by drivers. To further add, another research has shown that mobile phones are dangerous at gas stations since the radiations or microwaves emanated from these sets can generate enough heat to ignite petrol. Hence it again goes in opposition to those who advocate the promotion of mobile phones by drivers.



The argument fails again in its validity when it is holding radio and disciplining children as major trouble makers. Here also, it can be partially agreed that radio are sources of distractions but its advantages outweigh its negatives. For instance, a radio is source of entertainment and tension reliever where a driver can relieve all his tensions by putting on good music. Now it all depends upon the nature of driver, his taste what kind of music he prefers. Jazz and metal can cause tension but pop and folk music are tension relievers. Moreover, a driver can get important information of traffic jams, accidents, latest update of news such that he can be alerted beforehand. In other words, radio makes driver to act with caution.



Another cause for accidents can be reckless driving by youth while talking, thinking it as latest fashion. Lastly, it is not always true that all drivers have to make their children disciplined while driving. So to hold it as major reason of accidents seems implausible.



To sum up, mobile phones, though helpful in emergencies, should be restricted such that they do not play the roles of obstacles and cause injury.

gurucool
10-25-2004, 04:17 PM
An argument question needs to be dealt in two pronged approach 1) Highlight the fallacies in the argument , which you have done very well by pointing that just because there are other sources of distraction as well mobile can't be discounted to be used while driving as the distraction offered by mobile is far greater than other sources mentioned in the aforesaid argument.

2) Which additional data or study could have made the argument more complete : This part is missing in your essay , Which In this case could be conducting a comparative study of accidents caused due to various sources of disctraction .

In General, Good Work !!!

awhig
10-25-2004, 04:46 PM
An argument question needs to be dealt in two pronged approach 1) Highlight the fallacies in the argument , which you have done very well by pointing that just because there are other sources of distraction as well mobile can't be discounted to be used while driving as the distraction offered by mobile is far greater than other sources mentioned in the aforesaid argument.

2) Which additional data or study could have made the argument more complete : This part is missing in your essay , Which In this case could be conducting a comparative study of accidents caused due to various sources of disctraction .

In General, Good Work !!!
Thanks gurucool, I agree with your inputs.

jyoti
10-26-2004, 06:44 PM
Hi!
awhig
your analysis of the issue was good . you have dealt nicely.

my suggestion. you should have elaborated more on refuteing the laws restricting use of hand held mobiles.

over all good attempt

jyoti
10-26-2004, 06:54 PM
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The following appeared as an editorial in the wild life journal.

“ Arctic deer live on island in Canada’s arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately according to reports from local hunters the deer populations are declining Since these reports coincide with recent global trends that have caused the sea ice to melt , we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer population is the result of the deer being unable to follow their age old migration patterns across the frozen sea”

The author has based his decision upon certain assumptions which may sound true initially, but after detailed analysis of the authors arguments it becomes very clear that his decision is based on fallacious assumptions. The author is trying to say that Arctic deer population is declining because they are unable to follow their age old migration pattern across the frozen arctic in search of food and conducive environment . Authors decision is based on the assumption that the dwindling of deers population coincides with the report which mentions global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt therefore, deer population is not able to migrate to different islands

Firstly, authors says that local hunters have reported that population of deers is decreasing. It is very much possible that deerss can now discern the presence of hunters and protect themselves by hiding at different places therefore, this contention of author weakens the statement. It is quite possible that have become resistant to much colder temperature as compared to earlier time and have fled to those regions of arctic.

Secondly, It is possible that deers have migrated to some other region where they can find suitable climate and plants for food. The author no where mentions if those deers who have migrated to the other regions returned to the arctic region.

Thirdly, The author has mentioned about the presence of hunters in that area. Hunters can be one of the reasons of reduction in deer population merely coinciding of the global warming report and dwindling of deer population cannot confirm the reason of decline of deer population. It is possible that the effect of global warming is very minimal in arctic region and it did not cause the ice to melt. Therefore the decline of deer population cannot be attributed to melting of sea ice.

Therefore, The deer population may not have actually decreased as assumed by the author. The statement that local hunter have reported decrease in deer population is fallacious. There should be proper data about the number of deer population in that area. IT is possible that the deer population may have decreased due to presence of hunters. So authors contention that mere coincidence of global warming report can be the cause decrease in deer population weakens the authors arguments. In order to prove his contention author needs to provide authentic data and search about decrease in deer population should be done by some research group instead of local hunters.

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awhig
10-28-2004, 03:53 AM
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The following appeared as an editorial in the wild life journal.

“ Arctic deer live on island in Canada’s arctic region. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of a year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed, and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately according to reports from local hunters the deer populations are declining Since these reports coincide with recent global trends that have caused the sea ice to melt , we can conclude that the decline in arctic deer population is the result of the deer being unable to follow their age old migration patterns across the frozen sea”

Remarks: You have cited the strongest point that could weaken author's claim, 'later'. That point is the hunters themselves.You should have thrusted on this point that hunter are responsible for declining population.Since they do for profit, This should have been further strenthened by saying that hunters poach deers for their skin and meat.Since skin fetches good value in market.

Second important reason can be lack of food resources in the deer habitat.
The point of deer hiding for fear of hunters does not appeal.
This could have been supported that hunters might have reported deer population for a locality and it is likely that they might have failed to estimate the whole area.

Other reason could be put as poor fertility among deers.Eg death of calfs at early age etc.

Point of migrating to other place for lack of food is fine but topic says that ice is the only source for voyage, how can they travel to other places when ice is melting?

I suggest you to think well and write down points,try to connect them. Identify strong points and put them first.

I hope this will help you. All the best for your exam. :D

jyoti
10-28-2004, 07:37 PM
Hi!
thanks for your coments
next time i will write the points and connect them well