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sow1225
12-05-2002, 01:33 PM
Until recently, people in Hiparia did most of their shopping by driving to shopping malls. They are beginning, however, to do more of their shopping by ordering merchandise from mail-order catalogs and the Internet. These purchases are delivered to them by mail or by a delivery service. For many purchases, Hiparians no longer need to drive to and from shopping malls; there will therefore be a resulting reduction in the consumption of vehicle fuel in Hiparia.

The conclusion made by the author is, there would be reduction in the consumption of vehicle fuel in Hiparia, as the number of visits made by the people to the near by shopping malls is reduced. The argument is based on the dubious assumptions, which are not stated with clear evidence.

First of all, the author assumes that, In Hiparia, peopleís regular shopping was done in the near by malls until recently. Additionally, the ordered merchandise is delivered by mail or by a delivery service. They started ordering merchandise from mail-order catalogs and the Internet. There could be many reasons for the reduction in the number visits made to the near by shopping mall. It could be the severe weather conditions. For example, if itís a severe winter full of snowstorms, people may cut down the visits until the weather gets better. Moreover, it could be the discount offers made by the shopping malls to promote their ordering merchandise and the service they offer, which was dormant all along. Further, they could be delivering it for free to the people to entice more orders for the merchandise. Therefore, the author has to consider all the elements pertaining to the number of visits made by the people to evaluate the situation also to strengthen his assumption for the argument.

Secondly, the assumption was, the Hiparians no longer need to drive to and from the shopping malls. There could be other reasons that the Hiparians might be using their vehicles. It could be for their dialy use. For example, people with kids needs to drive their kids to the schools and pick them back after school. Additionally, they could be using for their daily chores like getting grocers from grocery store. The argument would be strengthened if the author provides enough evidence stating Hiparians daily schedule and usage of their vehicles.

Finally, the author states that, it would lead to the reduction in consumption of vehicle fuel. There could be many elements involved. It depends on the location of Hiparia and the relative distances. If the distances are small, it may not result in the reduction of consumption of fuel. Even if the distance to the shopping malls is less, it could be that the people in Hiparia might be traveling to the other cities for work, which are from Hiparia. Therefore, the author has to give enough information regarding every element pertaining to the reduction in fuel, which would strengthen the argument.

The argument to determine the reduction in the consumption of fuel would be strengthened and would be beneficial to evaluate, if the author provides enough reasons and evidences regarding the people in Hiparia and their basic routine schedule, which is related to their usage of vehicles.

chhaya
06-18-2003, 11:58 AM
Hi!! PLEASE EVALUATE MY ESSAY !



According to the argument as the people of hiparia have began making their purchases through mail order catalogs and internet, they will no longer need to drive to the shopping mall as a result it will reduces the fuel consumption. However the argument has provided no evidences for this shift in trend. Even if the of shopping has changed the conclusion drawn is not convincing.

To begin with, there is no evidence provided for this shift in shopping trend. It is very much possible that only few purchases are made and there is no such trend at all. Even if the trend is prevalent presently this cannot be predicted that the trend will continue.

Firstly, it cannot be said that there is no need to drive to the shopping malls as the daily uses products like vegetables; fruits etc are to be bought from malls. In purchasing certain things like cloths one has to make trails first. Thus driving to shopping malls may be preferred over ordering for home delivery.

Moreover, if we consider that visit to shopping malls will decrease. Will it have any effect on fuel consumption? If customers stop driving to malls all the good are to be delivered at home, it will not have an effect on fuel consumption as the delivery services will have to drive to their home to deliver.

Secondly, shopping is not the only place where people drive. Hiparians will continue to go to their work places; children will go to school and colleges. They may drive out for entertainment instead of malls. Thus it cannot be concluded that it will have any effect on fuel consumption.

To better strengthen the argument evidences should be provided to support the change in shopping trends like observation of shopping mall showing the decrease in purchases. If the trend is prevalent surveys showing what percent of the population is making purchases through order catalogs and Internet and are they satisfied with the services. And has the sale of fuel has started decreasing due to these tends. Unless these informationís are provided the argument is unconvincing as it is based on many assumptions.