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07-11-2002, 02:37 PM
Some people believe that advertising on television is generally beneficial to viewers. Others take the position that television advertising has primarily negative effects. Which position do you agree with? Explain your decisioon, using speific examples.

Advertising on television is a relative produrct of television. Most of people spend at least one hour a day watching television. There are ten percent of television time playing commercial. Advertising is not just junk. On the other hand, it is a modern socail science in mass communication field.

Because of a lot of insticts of new merchandise, many tv-watchers become consumers. Somtimes they are persuaded how incredible and perfect the product is. After shopping, they keep the goods on the top floor of the closet or in a hidden corner of the garbage. Another problem is specific to children. Innocent children are easy to copy what they watch on television. Unlimited content of advertising is immoral.

However, we still can have a good time on watching advertising on television. There are more and more advertising involving new cultural events or knowledge. The most spectacular advertising must be full of creativity and imaginity. Besides commercials, unbeneficial advertising, such as saving improspertive children in Africa, is a postive example.

Even though over half of people go to the washroom or take a cup of tea in the period of advertising, the importance of advertisinnng can't be ignored simply.

We watch television everyday and of course we know that there are good programs and bad ones. People encourage television programmers to produce educational programs. And we should do so to advertising workers. I think vigorous advertisinng should be awarded more than normal programs because it is not easy to express many things in a one-minute commercial. The creators of advertising must be intelligent. In conclusion, we should encourage more positive and harmless advertising on television.

07-11-2002, 03:20 PM
Hi Magic,
Your essay is very good .You have included many good points in it.But if you can elaborate a little in each of your paragraphs then it will turn out really great.This is my opinion.Lets wait for Erin


07-20-2002, 11:43 PM
Hi, Magic! (Cool name!)

Your essay is pretty good, but it's very, very choppy! Your sentences are a bit too short.

Please write your next essay on a real TOEFL topic; that way, we can give you better feedback!