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Notes ( 5 minutes)
1)Makes a general statement but gives specific data.
2)No data is given about the consumption habits of people in this decade or the last decade.
3)Assumption that just because a shop has on display a wide selection of cheeses, people must be buying and consuming them too.
4)Assumption that New House of Beef have become millionares due to increased consumption of red meat, and not due to any other reason.
Essay (15 minutes)
I find the argument that, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses, full of logical loopholes and wide assumptions.
The author makes a very general statement, but provides only specific cases to prove her point. Based on the evidence collected from just three stores, one cannot conclude anything about the entire populace. It may be the case, that the local population in the vicinity of the three stores has become unconcerned about the consumption of red meat and cheese.
Also the author compares consumption patterns of this decade with the earlier one without giving any quantitative evidence. The evidence that Heart's Delight has on display a wide range of cheese, says nothing about the buying habits of its customers. It may very well be the case that none of the cheeses that are on display sell. Also no figures showing sales of red meat and cheese have been quoted in the text of the article. The author also makes the mistake of correlating the prosperity of the New Beef House proprietors to the sale of beef in their store. It may be the case that the prosperity of the New Beef House is due to some other business venture it has undertaken or due to an inheritance.
To conclude, the argument falls apart when subject to logical scrutiny. The argument could be made more cogent and tenable if actual sales figures of the products are given for both decades that are being compared. The argument is at best qualitative.