Kindly evaluate my GRE AWA Argument essay

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Social service, being a vital character of students, also serves to make him a better citizen of the society. The argument is based on many unwarranted assumptions which if not supported will fail to hold the argument valid.

 

 

The argument heavily relies on the assumption that all the students will do the community service legitimately and assiduously. Although the majority of the students will be interested in serving the community, chances are good that students who aren't interested in such activities may produce spurious proofs on serving the community. That is, there is no mentioned method to verify if the student has truly engaged in community service and served for the specified duration; so students who are unlikely to be engaged with these social activities may not take part in the service. Had the argument provided a method to verify if the student has truly taken part in community service, it would provide better support to the argument.

 

Another assumption the argument makes is that enforcing the 9 months community service as a requirement for graduation will not affect the students' performance in academics. For instance, consider a below-average student who barely makes it through the examinations. The community service, while making him a charitable and a solicitous member of the society, may well be a hindrance for his performance in academics. Had the college made it optional or reduced the service duration, it would have been better of the below-average students. Also, it would have been better if the college had formed a team, like the Community Service Scheme, involving students who are truly interested in social service, to engage in community service.

 

Also, the argument assumes that all the local charities mentioned in the list will require the help of every student in the college. It is possible that most of the charities are already doing good in terms of man-power and may require other pecuniary support, which is not the aim of the community service rule enforced by the college. Hence, the college needs to make sure if all the mentioned charities need volunteers, which the argument has not mentioned.

 

The argument, failing to provide support for the assumptions on which the argument depends, is pretentious and hence enforcing such a rule will likely fail to serve its purpose.

 

Thank you,