this is a good essey, need not any comments. i think. haha..
I am sheerly agree with you opinion.
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hi this is my first argument that i m posting to testmagic please rate it and suggest the improvements.
The following appeared in the editorial section of a newsmagazine.
"Some states are creating new laws that restrict the use of handheld cell phones by drivers of automobiles. Such legislation, however, is sheer folly. Although some people with cell phones undoubtedly cause problems on the road, including serious accidents, the majority do not. Besides, problems are also caused by drivers who are distracted by any number of other activities, from listening to the radio to disciplining children. Since there is no need to pass legislation restricting these and other such activities, it follows that there is no need to restrict people's freedom to use a device that they find convenient—or helpful in emergencies."
I think here the author has made a good amount of assumptions in taking a decision about an uninvestigated situation. There are some critical things that the author has overlooked in calling the legislations if any as completely unwanted. Now let us check those assumptions.
First of all the author has assumed that many states are creating new laws to discourage the use of handheld cell phones but he has not supported this statement with any kind of substantial data for e.g. names of the states and kind of law imposed. If the so called laws really exist do they restrict the drivers completely from using the cell phones? Say, ‘if a person has driving license then he/she cannot have a cell phone.’ Thus without any statistical evidence the author has called formulation of laws as “sheer folly”.
Secondly the author sounds very confident in saying that only a few people are causing problem while using the cell phones. Here again the missing thing is the statistics in form of say % of people using cell phones on road and causing problems and that too driving. It may be possible that pedestrians using the phones may be a large percentage of people not causing any accidents, whereas drivers are the ones who are making a real havoc by causing serious accidents. The author should mention data regarding this to support his confidence but has failed to do so.
Finally the author tries to give some weak support to his argument by drawing attention to other activities like listening to radio, disciplining children, etc. distracting the drivers. But here we can question the author whether he has made any kind of investigation that no laws exist for the same and can he present any evidence on it? Also, has he made any comparative study about the potential of the so called other activities with using the cell phones in distracting the drivers? Also is he sure enough that these activities are done by the drivers only and no else sitting in the automobiles say other parent as far as disciplining the child is concerned? Regarding emergency the driver can park his automobile and use the cell phone.
At the end I would say that the author has made a meager or no study on the situations arising on roads due use of cell phones by the people who are actually driving. He could have made his argument more strong by presenting some data for e.g. percentages regarding cell phones users classified into drivers and non-drivers on the road and the ones actually causing accidents, also data about the severity of laws imposed if any, etc. Thus looking at argument I did not find any strong point for considering the point stated by the author.
It looks to me like u are trying to over emphasise on data. Problems in the usage of handheld cell phone is obvious. U dont need statistics to prove that. Do u?
At the same time we also the importance of time & cell phones as of today. We cannot afford not using a cellphone. So there are 2 solutions for this : Either dont pass the law, leave it as it was, Or modify the law as to use the cellphone only after taking the vehicle off-road.
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