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Hi dauwoo :D, WOW that's such a marvelous essay!!!!!!! I'm really impressed by it. I myself would give it 3 x 6.0 score at once! Of course I'm a great pet-lover, too. But I really like your ideas. They're so clear & interesting! Maybe this is the one I love the most among all in the forum :D:D:D!

HI ALL! I AND MY FRIEND HAVE DISCUSSED ABOUT THIS ESSAY FOR 2 DAYS BUT WE CAN'T FIND ANY GOOD IDEAS. PLEASE HELP ME FIND SOME IDEAS FOR IT. :( #148: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing games teaches us about life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. HELP ME, PLEASE! :)

Hi Tho! 1.I think "wildly" is wrong. You should use "wild" because "lovely" is adj. 2.a is right. You can eliminate c and d. a and b maybe right. But droplet"s" so you can't use [allow"s" them]==> a is ok. Certain fish eggs contain droplets of oil, which allow them... ==> ...of oil, allowing them...

I did't read this sentence carefully. I saw "seen" so immediately I chose ©. But "spotted turtles are seen" is meaning of this sentence, it is passive sentence. I am so hurried. Thanks.

Hi! :) I read this question in a book but my answer is different from the book's answer. I don't understand its explaining. Please help me. I think this question is not hard for you. :o :D Rarely ______ seen far from water. a. spotted turtles b. spotted turtles are c. have spotted turtles d. are spotted turtles My answer is c but their answer is d. Why? ?

Hi Vaya and Vehor! You are right. My 1st and 2nd paras are so similiar but I can't find any new idea. Please help me.

:D I am here with new essay. Please read and fix its errors for me. #90: If you could meet a famous entertainer or athlete, who would that be, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice. In life, we meet or know many people; some of them give us good impression. With me, Lance Armstrong is a great athlete I want to meet if I have a chance. Why is Lance Armstrong? Because he is a cancer survivor and world's greatest cyclist. There are two reasons clarify my wish. First, I want to meet and show him my admiration. Lance Armstrong is the world's top-ranked rider while he is a cancer survivor, it is an exceptional thing with many others. I knew many people who lived without belief when they had met unlucky things such as: family, love, healthy and so on. On the contrary, Lance Armstrong showed us his courage; he has struggled against disease and worked like other normal people. To do that, Lance Armstrong must have tried his best. Not only does he try to live but he does also help others who need courage to live. Second, I want to tell him that he taught me many things maybe he doesn't know. He taught me the courage to life and work. Sometimes in life I face with hard problems which make me tired and want to stop all of my works. But when I know about Lance Armstrong's life I asked myself:" Why can I do like him, a person is living with dangerous disease?" Afterwards, I live more active and try my best to do all things I want or wish to do. This is the biggest lesson I have in life. Thus I hope I have a real chance to meet Lance Armstrong to thank him about his lesson from far France. Everyone has one person whom we wish to meet in life because of individual reasons. With me, I want to meet Lance Armstrong the French rider because of his achievements in career and courage to struggle against disease.

This is my essay after fixing some serious errors. :D #86: If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. :cool: In this competitive world, sometimes you wish to make time stop and go back to the past. I am a graduate and working for a big company, so I wish I could go back to my childhood when life was pink and full of happiness. I have many reasons to explain my choice. First, I wish to go back to my childhood to remember my happy and careless time. After many competitions in school, university and now, society I realize that childhood is the most beautiful time and place. I want to forget all stress, competition and responsibility in life. To do that, we need a place that has no noise, no boss, no business, no salary and so on. And only childhood gives us peace, it reminds us our games with friends, our parents' sacrifice to give us the best things, our funny and impartial dreams about jobs in future such as: sometimes I wanted to be a rock star, famous actress, doctor, teacher... It is worthwhile to have a chance to travel back to the most beautiful time in whole life. Another reason is that I want to fix my faults in the past. It is common knowledge that most of us made some bad things in childhood and this chance helps us fix them. I have never forgot one story in my childhood. When I was a six-year-old girl, my family was quite poor. Once I saw a beautiful but expensive doll of my friend. I liked it and hoped I would have one but my mother had no money to buy it. She said sorry while I cried loudly:" I hate mom." You can imagine that my sudden sentence made my mother really sad and feel she couldn't give me everything I need. I really regret about this until now. If I could turn back time I would fix that biggest fault in my childhood and say:" I love mom". Going back in time is an unreal dream but we have rights to imagine and wish. If I can stop the time and fly through it, I would go back my childhood to enjoy again that peaceful time, to fix some faults that made my loved ones sad.

Hi Erin and Synthia! I really thank for your remarks. I have many errors in grammar; it is my weak point. I am trying to fix it. Now I am studying grammar in Complete Guide to the CBT TOEFL Test of Heinle & Heinle'S. I think this book is good for me. It is so wonderful when you said that my essay was nice and gave it 5.0/6.0. I am really happy. Thanks again and again about your help.

Hi! Last week, I was so busy and today I post my new essay for you to read and remark it. Thanks for your help. ;) :D #86: If you could go back to some time and place in the past, when and where would you go? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice. :cool: In this competitive world, sometimes you wish to make time stop and go back the past. I am a graduate and having job in a big company, so I wish I could go back my childhood when life was pink and full of happiness. I have many reasons to explain my choice. First, I wish to come back my childhood to remember my happy and impartial time. After many competition in school, university and now, society I realize that childhood is the most beautiful time and place. I want to forget all stressfulness, competition and response in life. To do that, we need a place that has no noise, no boss, no business, no salary and so on. And only childhood give us peaceful, it reminds us your games with friends, our parents' sacrifice to give us the best things, our funny and impartial dreams about future job such as: sometimes i wanted to be a rock star, famous actress, doctor, teacher... It is worthwhile to have chance to remember the most beautiful time in whole life. Another reason is that, I want to fix my faults in the past. It is common knowledge that most of us made some bad things in childhood and this chance help us fix them. I have never forgot one story in my childhood. When I was a six-year-old girl, my family was quite poor. Once time I saw a beautiful but expensive doll of my friend. I liked it and hope I would have one but my mother had no money to buy it. She said sorry while I cried loudly and said that:" I hate mom." You can imagine that my suddenly sentence made my mother really sad and she felt she couldn't give me everything I need. I really regret about this until now. If I could turn back time I would fix my biggest fault in my childhood and say that:" I love mom". Going back time is an unreal dream but we have rights to imagine and wish. If I can stop the time and fly through time, I would go back my childhood to have peaceful time, to fix some faults those make my love ones sad.

Thanks Vehor and Vaya(Renata). I think I more understand about this kind of essays. Thanks!

Hi all! I have a question which I am not sure the answer. Please reply me. ;) What is different between compare and contrast question? In my opinion, comparing is showing the similar points between two problem. And contrasting is showing the different points between them. But after thinking carefully I think compare is wider than contrast. When an essay asks you compare, you should show divide your essay in two paragraphs. First para show the similar points. Second para show the different points. And when an essay asks you contrast you need show only different points. Is it right? :p Please answer this question. Thanks

Hi everybody! :D My last essay (#1) was not good at grammar and idea. I think it is bad. In this new essay I try to make my ideas and organization more clearly. Please read it and reply me. Thanks. :p #158: When famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars give their opinions, many people listen. Do you think we should pay attention to these opinions? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Famous people such as actors, athletes and rock stars are magnet to attract the concern of many other people in society. When they give their opinion, many people listen. I think we should pay attention to these opinion but not too much. I have three major reasons to say that. First, actors, athletes, rock stars and so on are famous people, they have to think carefully before saying or asserting anything. So their opinions often express their 'good' characters and their maturity before society or at least their opinions include one good idea. I think we should listen to them and find what good point is. Second, some of these famous people have more knowledge than some of our normal people so their opinions are sufficient to interested in. Our favorite people maybe have knowledge and experience not only in entertainment field but also in many other fields. For example: Sir Elton John is a famous singer. He is a maturity and charitable person who gives good opinions with his massive experience in some problems. So we are especially young people should hear his opinions. Thus, listening to their opinion, some times, will give us good ideas. Third, we have rights to chose which opinion is suitable to us. We have nothing to lose when hearing one's opinion. Sometimes, famous people' opinion will helpful for us. If they are good and useful we can remember and use it like our experience. If they bad and shallow, we can throw them away and forget it. For instance: I remember that I read a rock star' opinion in a magazine about alcohol and cigarette. He said that: " You should try alcohol and cigarette. You will like them." This kind of opinion should be thrown to garbage immediately. Listening is one aspect and remembering or using them are another aspect. It depends on our own choice. For these reasons, I conclude that we should pay attention to the famous people such as athletes, actors, rock stars etc but not too much and do not believe all of them excessively. Erin and others! Please read my essay and give me your remarks. ;)

Hi Renata! Thanks for your help. I think your English is very OK. I learn much from you.

Hi all friends who will read my essay. I really need your comments. I have many problems in grammar and ideas. Please repair them for me, a new student. :D #1: People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Today, university is one of the important goals of high school students in my country and maybe in the world. People attend college or university for many different reasons. I myself will go to university next year so I think I could understand what others want to have when they study in colleges and universities. In my opinion, most of these reasons are career preparation and increasing knowledge. I think the first reason we attend university or college is career preparation because we students need a professional occupation to create our own life, earn money for life and help the society developing. The major function of university and college are training professionals so university and college are good places can help us reaching our approach. After graduating university/college, we will receive good transcripts, which help us find a good job and indicate that we are professionals in our studying field. In fact, we see that people have good career in university/college have more advantages in applying for a job than others who do not. Another reason that, university/college gives us much useful knowledge. All of us know that knowledge in the world is large like ocean. We could never have all the knowledge of mankind so studying to update what we feel appropriate is so important. And university/college will give us a part of it in one field. More details, university/college with professors and its high education will teach us how to obtain information fast and sufficiently. We also gain this knowledge out of school but in university/college we will study more systematically and easily. In conclusion, my opinion is attending university and college gives us good career preparation and increasing our little knowledge. Not all everyone has opinion like me but I think many of them would support my reasons. I feel my grammar and ideas in this essay is so complex and not clear:shy:?. Please show me your remarks. :D

Hi Vehor and Vaya! Thanks! This essay also has many mistakes and my ideas are not clear. It is difficult to realize them when I wrote. I only know my mistakes after read your comments. You are help me so much. Thanks.

Thanks Vertical Horizon and Vaya. I read your comments and admit that my essay had many mistakes in grammar and ideas. I will remember and avoid them in next essay. Thanks again!

Dear sun-flower! I myself think your essay has good ideas and grammar. However maybe your introduction is short.

Oh! It maybe too much to post 4 essays a day. I agree with you. I had better post about 1 or 2 essays a day if I can(my English is not good enough for me to do 4 essays in one morning) .I will read other essays to learn their good points I don't have. Thanks Vaya. :shy::D

Thanks Vaya for your conscientious advice. I know my essays have many errors in grammar, organization and so on. I will try my best to repair them. And your English is so good and beautiful! Thanks again. P/S: Please give me your advice when you read my essays.

I posted three essays but haven't received any replies. Please let me know that my essays are too bad, normal or good. Thanks [: (]. #49: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. There are many kinds of communication in modern life. All of them help people so much but as my opinion, face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication. I will clarify my answer by follow reasons. First, face-to-face communication will obviously express your mood such as happy, sad, annoy and so on. Expressing your mood in dialogue is one of interesting point of talk. For a little example: when you chat with a friend on Internet, your friend is telling you a funny story. How can you show him that you are really laughing loudly? You will write this sentence on the screen:" Hey! I'm laughing!" won't you? I think that is so complex or maybe little ridiculous. Not only help you show your mood, but face-to-face dialogue can also help you realize your partner's mood. It is make your conversation more appealing. Second, if you connect with another person by other types of communication, in some cases you can not say all of what you want. By face-to-face communication you can explain your idea easily. For example: sometimes you have to make your partner understand what you say by many signs such as: hand, face and only face-to-face communication can do that. On the other hand, we can make errors in grammar, vocabulary and so on; it can make receivers understand your opinion in a wrong way. Sometimes, it is very dangerous. Third and the last, other types of communication such as: fax, telephone, email, internet and etc have many conveniences for people but in fact they are making stress ambiguously. By face-to-face, an original communication, we can avoid stress and tired. For all above, I think face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication. However, you also need other types of communication because not all time we have good condition to take a face-to-face dialogue. Please read and reply my essay.:cool:

If you read my essay, please let me know your thinking about my essay. Next month I will take my TOEFL test. Thanks very much. :shy: #24: A person you know is planning to move to your town or city. What do you think this person would like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. My home city is Hanoi- the capital of Vietnam, a small country in Asia. It is always a peaceful and beautiful city in my mind. When a person I know is planning to move to my city, I think he will like your life environment with old streets, old buildings and so on, however, he will dislike my city's transportation system. He will feel uncomfortable with crowded public transportation in city. My city is a developing city, it has many problems can not solve immediately such as broadening roads in city, small width of some major roads often leads to traffic in rush hours. It makes everyone, especially, people who come from large cities in other places feel annoy or inconvenient. But in fact, traffic jam is common problem of all of countries and cities in the world, not only my favorite cities. Albeit we have some problems in transportation, I think my friend still likes this city because of its follow advantages. First, he will like our old streets with old buildings from time Vietnam was one of French's colonies. He will like walking slowly in some quiet small roads under burgeoning trees planted along park fences. The streets with trees along the side of roads are one of our special things differ it from other cities. Second, we Hanoi are spirited, polite and honesty people. We are willing to help others when they need our help. For example, when a tourist ask to show street he/she want to go, we will very happy to stop our work to help them. I think my friend can not unlike them. After a time he will feel happy living in our society. For all reasons above I hope my friend would love my city. Like all other cities, it maybe has some problem but with me Ha Noi is always in my mind if I have to go far from it. ;)

Please read and give me some remarks. Thanks to all friends who will read my essay. :) #77: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Boys and girls should attend separate schools. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. It is common knowledge that boys and girls have different periods improving their ability and intelligence so having friends in two sexes is important. Some people say that boys and girls should attend separate schools. I myself disagree with this opinion. I will explain my opinion by follow reasons. First, boys and girls have individual characters and ability so the study level between them during these periods can not be balanced if we divide them into two seperate schools. Schools should have both boys and girls, in these schools students can help each other promote equally. For example, a boy can help a girl in math or a girl can help a boy in sociable subjects such as: literature, history and so on because most of boys are smart in nature science subjects while most of girls are hard working. As a research of England scientists, a school has two sexes has more number of students’ graduate than a seperate school. Second, these seperate schools make their students less sociable and confident about themselves because they are not accustomed to the normal environment outside school. They don't know how to deal with different situation they meet in life such as what gift is suitable foe a girl or boy friend and many other cases. Third, at the adult age, they can grow abnormally and will be nervous or in experienced in the relationship of different sexes. The lack of girls or boys in school will lead student to mistakes that maybe not exist if student have relationships with two sexes. In a normal school they can realize what should be done with boy and girl friends especially in this teenage period. In conclusion, I disapproval with above opinion. It had better attend in school has two sexes: boys and girls. It is a good environment for growth of teenagers.;)

This is my first essay in forum. Please read and give it a score. My test date is coming.:o #070: Some people think that the automobile has improved modern life. Others think that automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. The advent of automobile has made the world change. There are two aspects of change: advantages and disadvantages. Some say that the automobile has improved modern life while others think hat automobile has caused serious problems. I myself endorse the first opinion because I think its advantages are helpful for our modern life. First, automobile has a very important standing in economic. With the appearance of it, a new industry was born. This industry has increased and broadened quickly for many years. It is so important that number of automobile can be produced will evaluate the economy ability of one country. For instance, Japan is classified in the top richest countries in the world because of its fast growth industries especially, automobile industry. Besides, when look at a car, we can see that it reflect many others achievements of mankind such as: petrol, metal, fashions and so on. The development of automobile industry will lead those industries to grow with it. On the other hand, automobile- producing system creates jobs for many people in the world so it distributes stable lives for these people. Second, not only important in economic, but it is also useful for people 'life. Automobile can take us to far places much quicker than before. It makes us not feel difficult and complicated when wee want to go or travel to another place. It also saves time, money in moving for us both in far or near distances. Besides, it has many other advantanges. For example, it can help people carrying small or cumbersome things from one place to another place. To summarize, I want to say that I think automobile is one of the most exceptional inventions of mankind because of its benefits above. However, automobile has only advantages, it also has disadvantages but if without it, our life will be more difficult and uncomfortable.:)