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topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live
performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more
enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons
and examples to support your opinion
Personally I disagree with the statement that attending a live performance is more enjoyable than watching the same event for the following reasons
First, location is very important factor for me, if I have to travel to a different state altogether I wouldn’t find it encouraging to attend the live concert .For example recently there was a Britney spears concert in London and I live in Coventry west midlands,uk. I chose to watch the concert on TV but my friend bill went to attend the live concert, bill was late to the concert and therefore couldn’t enjoy it really well ,also the temperatures were low ,so bill was down with common cold for next 4 days. While I really enjoyed watching the concert on tv in the warmth of my home.
Second ,car parking is a big issue when you attend a live concert there is limited amount of car parking area sometimes and u have to face the music as a result. I usually drive my own car so finding a car-park will be a hassle for me at such events. Jane went to a concert with her friends ,since she couldn’t a car park as she was late for the concert, she parked her car in no park zone and didn’t notice the sign board as she was in a hurry to attend the concert, the end result was a fine of 100$ by the patrolling police.
Third, these live concerts charge a lot of money per ticket, and a rocking performance is not always guaranteed as there are always uncertainties like a technical problem, drunken performer, or a show can be canceled at the last minute and this would leave you utterly disappointed. Instead I will watch it for free on television and save the money towards my future degree in fashion designing at the Paris institute of fashion technology in Paris.
Moreover, event Management Company contributes a lot towards the success of the concert and this would result in ultimate satisfaction for the audience who attend the live show for example Cindy went to the Amy wine house concert. The ticket included food and drinks. Due to inefficient management by the organizer, the food wasn’t sufficient for all. Cindy fumed at this but could do nothing except for spending extra on the food as she was so hungry, so I would definitely avoid such a situation.
In addition, hygiene matters the most for me when I go out with my family and friends. Whether it is a restaurant, park or for a holiday. At a live performance there will be very big crowd especially if its by a noted artist such as Jenifer Lopez, Britney spears etc , big crowd means lots of bacteria and the risk of contracting viral infections. Added to this if the concert is in open auditorium and the temperatures fall suddenly you’ll have to face the music and end up spending the next couple of days in the bed suffering with cold and fever.
In conclusion, for the above explained reasons and details I would watch a concert on tv rather than attend the concert, as this would save my energy, health and money.