@ HIMADRIC:
Sorry, it took too long to read your work. Here is my assessment (even though super unprofessional). I think the structure of the essay is good. The beginning is really good, then you explain your point pretty well, you give enough examples, and your have a conclusion. What I didn't like about your essay is grammar and wording. You made slight mistakes like sometimes subjects don't agree with verbs. Also I am not sure if you can use some cliches in analytical writing (like nitty-gritty). Well, in general I think the essay sounds pretty persuasive and you communicated your ideas well.