Dear M,
Here are my observations:
1. The essay is well written for the most part.
2. ... farms are in burgeon state instead of being incipient. Big words. I think it is wise to refrain from using a heavy vocabular in your essay. The pool of essay graders are not all English professors from universities. Ordinary Joe Public can become an essay grader if he meets the minimum qualifications. He may have been lucky enough to have not done the GRE, so he may not be familiar with the GRE vocabulary. There are times when one needs to use a rich array of words, but, sadly or otherwise, GRE is not one of them.
3. I always assumed Batavia to be the country, and not the locality. Hmmm...
4. I think you have attacked the *****s in the armour of the argument, and you have done it quite successfully.
This is the first essay I am rating after many moons. I am not confident enough to give you a grade for this. But I think as a whole, your essay is excellent.