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  1. Congrats smile !! Way to go !! Wish you all the luck!! Amruta
  2. Hi Nagalakshmi, I rather think that you have made good points in your essay. Change in advertisement strategy should be a result of careful and acurate analysis, which you have cited in your conclusion. However, I didn't understand your last point. It may be a valid point but you need to explain it a little bit. Your sentence formation does not an improvement. But your ideas are really good. Amruta
  3. Well Dev, Thanx for pointing that out. That is probably a big mistake !! Will take care of that !! Amruta
  4. Hey AmigoRo, Thanx a lot. That has boosted my confidence quite a bit. I guess, "etc" shouldnt be used anywhere in an essay. I will avoid using. I have to tackle the Monster of "Issue" topics now. Thanx for all your help. Amruta
  5. Wow .. that is cool !! CONGRATS !! Wish you luck for a 287 there !! Amruta PS : wanted to ask you something. I posted an arg essay on Monday ... but it was not moderated .. I realised that I hadn't written a 3 digit topic number. So I modified it yesterday .. that is 26th Nov ... but it wasn't still moderated till today the 27th.. so I have now deleted it .. and posted it again ... what do you think is the problem ?
  6. The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food-distribution company with food-storage warehouses in several cities. "Recently we signed a contract with The Fly-Away Pest-Control Company to provide pest-control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest-Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff Company for all our pest-control services." ---------------------------------------------------------------------- The claim that returning to the services of Buzzoff Pest Control Company in Palm City fast-food warehouse in view of the recently found damages in the warehouse seems to be quite convincing at the first glance. However, a closer look of the argument reveals a discrepancy in the assumptions made while arriving at this conclusion. The food distribution company incurred a loss of over $20,000 after using the services of The Fly-Away Pest-Control Company at Palm City. This claim can be validated only if it can be shown that $20,000 is a large percentage of the total stores at the warehouse. Again, there is no evidence to show that there were no damages of the same order when Buzzoff Pest Control company was offering its services at Palm City. The author has tried to compare the damages incurred at Wintervale and Palm City warehouses in terms of the money lost. However, it is possible that Wintervale is inherently cleaner than Palm City and hence the problem of pests is lesser in Wintervale than in Palm City. And as mentioned in an earlier point, the damages in the Wintervale warehouse as a percentage of the total storage has also not been specified leading to a weak point in favour of Buzzoff Pest Control Company. Again, the author does not specify if the food stored in the Wintervale warehouse is the same as that stored in the Palm City warehouse. It has been said that Palm City warehouse is fast food warehouse. This food stuff probably is easily eaten away by pests. Or it is also possible that this kind of food stuff does not last very long. It is also possible that the condition of the warehouse is not good. Water seeping in from a leakage in the roof could cause much damage to the stored food. This will depend on how old the warehouse is, if it has been inspected recently, if there has been lot of rainfall in the last month etc. The location of the warehouses will also matter. If they are located in regions which provide conducive atmosphere for the growth of pests, the problem of damages to the stored food will be inevitable unless extreme care is taken. This information is lacking in the argument above. The argument above lacks strong data that will prove if the Buzzoff Pest Control Company has been really more effective than the Fly-Away Pest Control Company. This data should be statistical data about the capacity of the warehouses, previous experience with the Buzzoff Pest Control Company at the Palm City warehouse, the location of the warehouses, condition of the warehouses etc. Such information will render a strong argument.
  7. Thank you Tho,Xaero & Amigoro !! I really hope they don't look at my essay rating for TOEFL. I am going to try harder for my GRE essays (I need a 5 there at least).. though I simply cannot match your writing and for that matter that of all the people who post their essays here !! Wish you all luck for your applications !! Amruta
  8. Hello All, I recieved my TOEFL score just now. It is 277 !! ( I am okay with the score .. except .. the essay !!) I did real bad on the essay .. a meagre 4.5 ... I am now so worried about the GRE essays !! huh ... neways .. I wonder how my score is 277 ... when I got only a 4.5 on the essay .. Thanks all. Amruta
  9. Hi Seeny, Congratulations on your score!! And wish you all the luck!! Amruta
  10. Hey AmigoRo, CONGRATULATIONS!! You've CRACKED it !! Wish you all the best!! I dont think your quant score will matter so much ... your command over English itself proves how intelligent you are !! and sorry .. I couldn't reply to your question soon ... was a little busy ... I didn't spend any time on the pc ... I am sure you will crack the essays too !! All the luck. Amruta
  11. Hey Amigoro, This is a brilliant essay ... convincing ... and an excellent read !! There are a few minor grammatical/typo errors .. and a few "idea" errors .... (though I personally think they are not very important .. you would get a six .. for this one .. without correcting the flaws !!) 1. The rituals and ceremonies that one find in many societies today are largely relics of the past. It should be "one finds". 2.Thus then, is it ture to say that rituals and cultures held define a culture and without them societies and groups have a diminished sense of who they are ? Typo errors!! 3.Our ancestors used to be born, live, and die in the same village. Incorrect usage. guess, the structure should be changed. 4.Very few people chose to stay in their hometowns all their lives now. Another typo.. should be "choose" The "idea" errors : "Those rituals and ceremonies helped me find my cultural identity, when I was groping the dark." Left me thinking .. "what you were groping in the dark for?" IMO, when somebody has grown up in the region that they originally belong to .. he/she doesn't really have a identity crisis .. or loss of sense of belonging .. it is only when one is staying in some region/country other than the one you belong to .. that one has an identity crisis .. or a loss of sense of belonging .. and one realises the importance of this "identity and sense of belonging" when one has grown up in ones own region and then goes out of this region for purposes of work etc.. Your third point: "Finally, and perhaps most importantly, these rituals and ceremonies act as a strong glue and help stop the disintegration of a society during the times of crisis." ....I think you need some more elaboration ... on the "scrutiny" of this one .. Well, overall the essay is well-structured, excellent flow .. good points (guess even if you had made 2 points it would have been enuf ..) and flaws are simply too minor .. the essay ... as it is .. would surely hit a sixer !! -Amruta
  12. Congrats Xaero!! Great Work!! Wish you all the best. Amruta
  13. Hi All, I found the site http://www.number2.com very helpful for preparing for GRE .. to supplement the rest of the preparation material you might have. It has a lot of practice stuff for Verbal and Quantitative. -Amruta
  14. Congrats Kaushik !! Way to go !! Wish you best of luck for your future endeavors !! -Amruta
  15. Congratulations Sri !! 610 in V, 770 in Q and 6 in AWA is simply fantastic !! and I think you didn't have much time in hand either .. its really great (especially since I am probably like you ... managing the house/husband .. and trying to study as well .. and I know how hard it is !!) Well, Wish you good luck!!
  16. Congratulations Renata !! Wish you all the best in all your future endeavors !! -Amruta
  17. Hi all, Well, I have a point to make here. I think that though there are some flaws in Smile's essay (for eg. the assumption about this opinion being based on observing a young group of people) , he/she is quite on track .. or rather has addressed the topic correctly, whereas Nisha has digressed from the topic while giving examples. The topic is about how we learn from those who do not share our point of view. That is we learn when we come across those who have a different opinion. We get to see the same thing from a different angle. Smile has put it quite correctly. People have different opinions because they believe in what they have to say. That is if I were to agree or disagree with something I would've already been convinced of why I am agreeing/disagreeing with it ... I wouldn't have an opinion based on something that cannot be proved. I am not sure if I have made myself really clear. Let me know if I am wrong/I am not clear. -Amruta
  18. Congrats Xaero!! Wish you all the luck !!
  19. Hi Avni, Thanx a lot !! Don't worry so much about ur TOEFL. I studied only for 2 days for my TOEFL!! It is pretty easy for Indians because most of the kids go to English medium schools. The essay .. I was myself quite worried about. But I guess essays in TOEFL are much easier than essays in GRE. Listening part in TOEFL.. well .. I would like to say that you have to REALLY concentrate on what you are listening to so that there are no disturbances .. or rather you are not bothered about the other people typing .. or any other noises for that matter.. since .. like everybody said .. that the conversations are longer than the ones we practice ... the comprehensions too are quite long .. The best part about the TOEFL CBT is that you have the head phones .. you get to adjust the volume .. And like somebody on this forum had said .. (that was a very nice post .. ) increase the volume a little more than you are comfortable with .. that will serve 2 purposes .. you will hear the conversations quite clearly .. and it will also keep you from falling off to sleep !! ;) (I am assuming that you are giving the CBT) And another important thing is that .. Reading Comprehensions are very easy .. and you have ample time to finish the questions. While writing the essay .. be confident of yourself and type it out .. Be sure to keep at least a minute to go thru it. You have a lot of time on hand before you appear for your exam .. so go thru the sample essays .. and the scored/graded essays on TESTMAGIC .. that will help you a lot !! My topic was - Some people think that governments should spend money on exploring outer space while others think that they should spend this money for our basic needs... I dont think I wrote it well .. will let you know when the results come out. Well .. you have enough time for Structure too .. So never be in a hurry to finish of things ... Read the sentence over completely 2-3 times .. and then pick out the wrong construct .. I am sure you will do well !! Just go and write the test with complete confidence in yourself !! ALL THE BEST TO YOU!! (I had posted this as a reply to my own topic as well .. but I couldn't see that myself.. so I am posting this here again .. wonder what the problem could be !! )
  20. Hi Avni and Erdtek, Thanx a lot !! Don't worry so much about ur TOEFL. I studied only for 2 days for my TOEFL!! It is pretty easy for Indians because most of the kids go to English medium schools. (I dunno if Erdtek is Indian too .. but I am sure .. if you've put in enough efforts .. you will definitely do well !! ) The essay .. I was myself quite worried about. But I guess essays in TOEFL are much easier than essays in GRE. Listening part in TOEFL.. well .. I would like to say that you have to REALLY concentrate on what you are listening to so that there are no disturbances .. or rather you are not bothered about the other people typing .. or any other noises for that matter.. since .. like everybody said .. that the conversations are longer than the ones we practice ... the comprehensions too are quite long .. The best part about the TOEFL CBT is that you have the head phones .. you get to adjust the volume .. And like somebody on this forum had said .. (that was a very nice post .. ) increase the volume a little more than you are comfortable with .. that will serve 2 purposes .. you will hear the conversations quite clearly .. and it will also keep you from falling off to sleep !! ;) (I am assuming that you are giving the CBT) And another important thing is that .. Reading Comprehensions are very easy .. and you have ample time to finish the questions. While writing the essay .. be confident of yourself and type it out .. Be sure to keep at least a minute to go thru it. You have a lot of time on hand before you appear for your exam .. so go thru the sample essays .. and the scored/graded essays on TESTMAGIC .. that will help you a lot !! My topic was - Some people think that governments should spend money on exploring outer space while others think that they should spend this money for our basic needs... I dont think I wrote it well .. will let you know when the results come out. Well .. you have enough time for Structure too .. So never be in a hurry to finish of things ... Read the sentence over completely 2-3 times .. and then pick out the wrong construct .. I am sure you will do well !! Just go and write the test with complete confidence in yourself !! ALL THE BEST TO YOU 2 !!
  21. Hi Everybody, I wrote my TOEFL yesterday. The scores were as follows: Listening - 27 Structure/Writing - 13 - 29 Reading - 30 The range is 233 - 287. I would like to thank TestMagic for everything. This was the only help I took for my TOEFL. Going thru the scored essays made me comfortable with that part of TOEFL. I was really quite scared of that part in TOEFL and I am scared of it in GRE too. I haven't been an active member of the forum till now. But I guess, I will be one from now on. I'm writing my GRE on 14th Dec. And again, for the GRE essays, I am banking on TestMagic alone !! Well, Thanx a lot Erin .. Regards Amruta
  22. Hi smile, My gre is also in Dec, on the 14th. I am also quite concerned about the "essays" part of the GRE. Guess we found TestMagic at the right time. About 2 - 3 months before the exam. Well, just to help you a little bit. It is not yet too late to write essays. you can start writing them anytime. (ususally the last 15-20 days before the exam is when you really sweat out !!) Just make sure that you do write some essays. That will boost up your confidence level and I guess it will definitely help to improve your essay writing skills .... like if you are at a 4.0/6.0 right now ... i guess a little practice should take you to 5.0 at least!! (I havent written a single one till now.) Neways.. I just wanted to tell you that sometime last week I went through all the Issue topics (the list on gre.org) and found that essay topics were quite repetitive. So I started categorizing them. I could broadly divide about 30-40 of them into 10-15 categories. Hopefully there should not be many categories.. I think this will help since ... you can think of points on the different categories (for preparation) and then use relevant ones in the essays. Or you can prepare one essay from each category .. well.. hope this helps you. (I am quite terrible at english myself !! and am aiming for a 5.0 !!) and I have finished with only 10 wordlists till now !! and I am hoping to post an essay too, hope that is real soon !! neways All the best .. Amruta
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