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Question: Parents should encourage their children to play outdoor sports instead of computer games. Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons and examples of your experience. Ans: There is no doubt that children are seem to spend plenty of time daily using computer. Though some people emphasis on the children's efficiency of using advance technology , it is agreed that the parents should motivate young starts to engage with outdoor activities rather than indoor sports. The reasons behind this view will be illustrated in the following discussion. Firstly , it is probably true to said that the regular sports which includes physical activities is essential for children's proper growth depending on some indoor games which are mostly based on brain activities bring negative ramification for young people's health . Take Dhaka City as example. It is quite prevalent to find young people suffering from diabetics , high blood pressure and heart problem from the very early age of their lives. The space constraint in this over populated city rarely provides them a scope for sports thus to ensure children's proper physical health the outside sports should be ensured. Secondly, the present critical issue of obesity can be easily eradicated through motivating young stars for outdoor games . For instance, in Australia where over weight is increasing in an alarming rate , the schools are trying to check the tendency through increasing the daily activities for children . It has also been proved an effective way to handle this problem. Hence, it is clear from the example why outdoor games should be popular to young stars to check the problematic issue like obesity from initial age of the people. Finally, the outdoor sports make the children social and cooperative as most of the outdoor activities perform in team. On the other hand, indoor games such as video or computer games which involve zero interaction with other people, make young people introvert. Therefore , in this competitive world to be efficient in social network and communication, children should engage with outdoor sports. In conclusion , it is obvious to state that outdoor sport is essential for children for ensuring their sound health , checking obesity problem and improving communication skill. It is hoped that the parents should focus on this matter for young generations future betterment.

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