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Hello Everyone, Can someone please review my analytical issue essay. I am writing it for first time and have my GRE exam scheduled for next week. I would really appreciate if someone can let me know the areas of improvement. Topic : Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in the new company. FOr the first time in ten years, a compnay that has developed satellite technology has been approved by FTA to complete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of repondants were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitabe for those who invest now. The article that appeared in a newsletter advices investors to make a blind invetment in techcorporation. The reason behind this is that, it is the only company in 10years to hav edeveloped a technology that has been approved by the FTA to cpete with the current satellite provider. Also a survey claims that eighty percent users were dissatisfied with the current satellite provider and would like to switch to another one. However, this advice seems to be flawed, as there is no strong evidence that would support this claim. The newsletter article states that for the first time in 10 years , a satellite built by a comapany has been approved by the FTA. However this statement cannot be blindly accepted. Eventhough the satellite might have been accepted by the FTA there is no guarantee that the satellite would live upto its expectations. As there has absolutely been no strong competitor in the past 10 years, there is no assurance that Techcorporation would succeed as a satellite provider inspite of their satellite being approved. Also the survey which indicated that 80% of the respondents were dissatisfied with their current satellite provider does not shed light towards the place the survey was conducted, the sample size, the survey questions. It could be that this opinion would be limited to only a small geographical area and the rest of the population would be happy with their current service provider. The newsletter article also doesnot take into account techcorporation's experience in the field. Inspite of developing a satellite, the might not have the means or the experience it convert it into a viable satellite television provider. Some data has to be provided regarding the schemes they offer, their execution plan, their stock prices which is vital for investors. Since no strong support data has been provided it is not wise to invest into techcorporation simply based on the newsletter. Proper statistical data has to be provided, only then should investors think of investing or else they could be digging their own grave. Thank you for your feedback.

Hello Everyone, Can someone please review my analytical issue essay. I am writing it for first time and have my GRE exam scheduled for next week. I would really appreciate if someone can let me know the areas of improvement. Topic : Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for young people who look up to them. In return for millions of dollars that they are paid, we should except them to fulfil this societal responsibility. The issue of sports stars and movie starts being the role model and idols is a conspicous; and is also subjected to diffirent opition. Mass venerate the stars and idolizes them; following many things stars do and don't. I believe more that stars it is the media that laud the stars. Like the brand ambassodors of the advertising companies are some exalt stars. Young people follow what they like; and many a times they exonerate their actions by saying they did what their role model did. But is the role model really resopndible to the person's action? Role Model is not only someone to be followed but the role model also correct the mistakes when done. If stars are considered as role models; there is not communication between both and so how is the other person reponsible to one's behaviour or action. Todays young generation is smart and has the scrupulous ability to determine their actions. Stars as paid for their work. Sports stars undergo regerous training to maintain their standards and to be on top that bring value to the country; movie stars act day and night to finish their project; which contributes to the entertainment segment. Other than the stars there are many enterprenuers; business tycoons who earn millions of dollars; so even become reponsible for acting as the role model for young genreations. Then why only stars have the obligation to be fulfilied. It not reponsiblity of everyone one to guide the young generation; Stars can communicate to the mass; but expecting only one person to fulfill the duty is not justifiable. Thank you for you feedback.