Nick92

Hi, I went through your essay and I noticed the following: if you look into the ets gre essay scoring website - link, for the grade 3.0 it is listed "is weak in the use of relevant reasons or examples or relies largely on unsupported claims". This is what I mainly noticed - the example with the kid although relevant was not connected with the rest. I think you need to present your thesis and then make the examples explain/confirm it and not just throw an example for the sake of it. The graders will keep an eye on how connected the examples are with the thesis and you must show this. I hope this helps. All the best and good luck on the exam : ) Nick

Hi everyone, I recently discovered this forum and I was so puzzled how I went through most of my preparation without it... I have started to practise essays a month before my exam, please find below on I wrote recently. I am looking for another persons opinion on grading my essay: Topic: Governments should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The statement that governments should limit the scientific research and development by imposing restrictions is a widely discussed and controversial topic with the advent of technology in the 20 century. On one hand limiting research in specific areas can prove to decrease the amount of scientific innovations. Considering the intricate and complex harmony in which science is developed this can affect seemingly adjacent areas. However, limitations can also be beneficial as technological breakthroughs can seldom provide more problems to humanity. Some of the most appreciated technologies might have not been discovered if certain limits were placed on scientific research and innovation. Nevertheless, it is more beneficial to science and humanity that certain limits are imposed. Innovation in science can take many forms - it can come from a discovery of a new mathematical formulation all the way to the development of a water channel to ease transport. The reason for this is that it is a very intricate network of discrete events each contributing to the discovery of another. These unforgeable events can sometimes lead to major scientific innovations in different fields of research and industries. The research in space exploration has always been controversial due to the high risk for the loss of human life or the exorbitant costs associated with construction and atmospheric launch. However, if limitations were imposed on the mid 20 century space exploration then all the innovations and discoveries would not have taken place. The result would be that the new technology would have never entered the commercial aircraft market and the most common method of transport associated with today's age, the aircraft, would not have been able to transform the world towards the greater good. On the other hand, considering that if science and innovation are left unchecked it might cause a greater problem. The speed with which technology is progressing means that in the very near future with the improvements in 3D printing technology it will be possible to synthesise proteins. It is feared by governments that if this was to become a widely accessible technology then everyone would be able to create viruses and diseases with the clicks of a few buttons. Furthermore, with the creation of the nuclear technology in the mid 20 century a new type of weapon with execrable disastrous power was made possible. The notorious power of the nuclear bomb is the most famous example of a technology developed to better the life of people that can be used in a completely opposite and destructive way. Therefore, numerous governmental control bodies exist that monitor how nuclear and biological technologies are developed and imposes limits where it considers it appropriate. It can be seen that even though this is making research more difficult it is still increasing exponentially. Proving that if the restrictions are reasonable than dangerous exploitation of technology can be avoided and the scientific progress can avoid being halted. In conclusion, it can be seen that imposing limitations of scientific research and development would not create problems if it is done with reason. It is therefore considered reasonable that a governmental body with world experts in charge can determine the most optimal way that innovations of a certain technology are limited to provide the best scientific progress and avoid dangerous circumstanced to humanity.